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Title: DD: Rock Your Socks Off
Author Name: Isaiah H
Genre: Drama/Romance
Style: Limelight
Description: Lies,Love, Lust, Gangs and Death! People may think the dancing industry is simple… But what happens when it can get you killed?You Choose!
Episodes: 4
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5450918717161472

Code:write84

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It makes me slower, but also less bored.

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If you want, you can include your cover!

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Ok! I don’t really like it i’m making a new one but here it is
:smiley:

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Thank you. I’ll use that in the review too.

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Ok you can post it here!

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Perfect!

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Story Title: In a Starry Night
Author Name: Fatima Al star
Style: Limelight
Genre: Romance/drama
Episodes: 3 (more coming soon!)
Story Description: Rose goes thorough a lot of difficulties that will lead her to find secrets that were hidden for years! Will she ever find happiness and love? (Choices matter)
Instagram Name: @fatima_stories
Story Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5756418218131456

Story cover

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What made you write your story?:
I had a good plot in mind and I wanted to make it com in real life so I did it!

Code : writer84

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I love how you threw in that question! Will read it soon. :heart:

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Thank you!

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Title: Teacher or Queen?
Author Name: Mystique
Genre: drama
Style: Limelight
Description: After years of searching she had finally found them. Can she get close to them?
Her destiny is about to change forever. What will she choose?
Episodes: 4
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5874052041146368
Code: write84

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Here’s mine:
Title: Dreams and Nightmares
Author: Dreamer
Genre: Romance
Style: Ink
Description: Scarlet had a rough past and it looks like it’s not getting better after she was bought by some mysterious guy. Will she ever turn her life from a nightmare to a dream?
Episodes: 9 (more coming soon, I’m trying to update once a week)
Updates to this story: Dreams and Nightmares - my first story
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5452320906543104

Code: write84

Thanks for doing this, take your time :slight_smile:

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You’re welcome :slight_smile:

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Title: The Four Horsemen
Author Name: S_Unique
Genre: Fantasy
Style: INK
Description: 4 Sins. 4 Angels fell. 4 Horsemen rose. A curse was casted. And the battle of good vs evil is about to begin. CC/ Choices matter
Episodes: 7 (ongoing)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5482099054608384
Code: write84

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Moved to Share Feedback since this is for reviews and not r4rs. Make sure to check out our Forum Tutorial for more info about where to correctly create topics. :wink:

Apologies for the mistake, Sydney :grin:

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Title: Thrill of the Hunt
Author Name: Azaria Sin
Genre: Mystery/Romance/Thriller
Style: INK
Description: A deranged serial killer is hunting street workers! You’re a detective paired with a beautiful man: will you capture the manipulative psychopath while warring lust & inner demons?
Episodes: 12 (S1 ranged from 1-10, S2 has started)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6661570308734976

Code: write84

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Title: Midnight Memories
Author Name: Evija
Genre: Romance
Style: LImelight
Description: Ayla flies all the way from Ireland to somewhere in America, when she’s supposed to spend a summer in some kind of rehabilitation center for people with anorexia.
Episodes: 16
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5689448274984960
Code: write84

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Here is your review, @IDONTKNOWREAL.

Girl of Deception

Chapter 1
What I Loved
  • I like the splashes.
  • That animated intro! Brilliant.
  • Customization, but limited. Nice. :+1:t3:
  • You used choices and the point system? Awesome!
  • Nice outfits. And I love how you didn’t use the panning thing.
  • Lyra is pretty.
  • Yup, Rafe, run! She’s a psycho!
  • I like the backgrounds.
  • What a nice cliffhanger!
  • Karma!!!
Thoughts
  • Aria, give your chest a rest.
  • Rude much?
  • “19-year-old woman” LIAR.
  • You’re acting like a peasant!
  • What a spoiled brat. Wait, who raised her?
  • You can’t even act like a decent human.
  • Bitch.
  • Lyra is encouraging her behavior too?!
  • I already hate Aria, and you won’t change my mind. :no_good_woman:t3:
  • The fashion adviser looks old :laughing:
  • Can Aria stop lashing out at everyone for one fucking second?
  • I hate Aria…
  • All of that, just to eat a cupcake? Are you kidding me?!
  • I despise Aria.
What I Didn't Love So Much
  • Aria should’ve entered with a walking animation.
  • Wait, the hair changed back to Straight, but I chose Diva Curls. Everything else stayed the same. How?
  • You should’ve used @zoom reset before the street scene.
  • Some spelling errors.
  • Aria popped onto the screen. She should’ve entered.
  • A speech bubble error. Use @speechbubble reset before the photoshoot scene.
  • It should’ve been a narrator bubble for the Camera Girl. This: NARRATOR (CAMERA GIRL)
  • Wrong background for nighttime. What I mean, is that it should be JUVIE WELLES BEDROOM - NIGHT, not DAY.
  • I think Aria should’ve been screen center for the dressing game.
  • Use transitions, but not too many, to establish new scenes.
Chapter 2
What I Loved
  • I really like how you used filters for a flashback. Glad to know that I’m not the only one. :slight_smile:
  • Oh, now you’re scared.
  • I liked the Q&A.
  • Aria is screwed…
  • I feel like Cassian is a good guy, though. That’s a good feeling.
  • Karma! Yet again!
Thoughts
  • Wow, now she’s scared?
  • Everything.
  • Oh, I don’t know… everyone you hurt?
  • Damn, Aria’s gonna lose her voice.
  • Is this a dream?
  • I don’t think it is…
  • Cassian seems like a bad boy. For some reason, I don’t know why…
  • Hmm… Who is that?
What I Didn't Love So Much
  • You should include teasers for each episode. Helps a lot. :wink:
  • The 3 characters should’ve been placed there before the pan.
  • More sounds and music would work.
  • The first scene dragged out for a bit…
  • Aria popped onto the screen.
Chapter 3
What I Loved
  • Still shook over that intro.
  • I like the setting. Meaning the place… you get what I mean.
  • Wow, Elenora is giving Aria a taste of her own medicine!
  • The ballroom outfits are nice.
  • Where are some of the backgrounds from? Love them. :heart:
Thoughts
  • So, Cassian is a love interest…
  • “Cupcake”
  • She is so dumb…
  • Is Logan a love interest too?
  • Um, it’s a ballroom, stupid!
  • So this is like the Bachelor?
  • I knew Lyra was a snake!
  • Is Rafe a love interest, too?! Oh my God… :woman_facepalming:t3:
  • Are they flirting? squints
  • Wow, the palace must be huge.
What I Didn't Love So Much
  • You should’ve turned off the music at the end of episode 2.
  • Why wasn’t there a clothing choice between the Prince’s clothes and ger own?
  • You should’ve turned off the music after the ballroom scene.
  • The music is annoying me…
  • Maybe try using a different type of cliffhanger? Instead of “who”, pull a “what”, or “how”.
  • A little short…
Chapter 4
What I Loved
  • Again, those splashes!!! :heart_eyes:
  • I’m loving what’s happening to Aria.
  • Mags is so cute.
  • I love the black outfits!
  • Nice spot directing!
  • That directing with the fire scene. Incredible! :revolving_hearts:
  • This does have fantasy elements!
  • Lisa is friends with everyone!
Thoughts
  • What does the title mean? :thinking:
  • What is going on?
  • What??
  • I’m so confused right now…
  • This has fantasy?!
  • Wait, she’s being nice now?
  • You don’t know her like we do, Maggie…
  • Aria is changing?
  • Aria can’t get anymore stupider, can she? :woman_facepalming:t3:
  • She has powers?
  • What a sadist.
  • Temptation…
  • You were cruel to an innocent child. This is karma.
What I Didn't Love So Much
  • A few grammar errors.
  • A period, or exclaimation mark after “Come in”.
  • You should really fix the speech bubbles.
  • Aria popped onto the screen.
  • Try @CHARACTER enters from side to position more often.
  • Overlays would’ve worked for Maggie’s face…
  • Use @transition fade out before the author’s entrance.

Overall?

My Opinion

Well, this story was… different from what I expected it to be. It’s definitely a fantasy to me. I have some questions, but the story is quite a gem.

Storyline

It’s not very clear yet. I feel like I kind of understand what’s happening. I hope the storyline doesn’t end up being cliche.

Characters
  • Aria - This is the first time I’ve hated an MC for a legitimate reason. I don’t like her at all. Her having a bad past does not excuse her shitty personality.
  • Cassian - He seems very kind. I like him, but he acts like a typical “mysterious” guy.
  • Rafe - Hilarious! But he’s secretive, too… I feel like he’s a love interest.
  • Logan - Humble. Basically, everything a guard should be. I don’t know how to feel about him yet.
  • Lyra - I feel like she isn’t important to the plot at all. Try developing her storyline more.
  • Magdalena - I like her so much. She’s so cute! She doesn’t deserve what’s happening to her…
  • Lisa - She’s so friendly, I just wanna be her friend!
  • Princess Isabella - Very kind. I wonder what’s she really like.
  • King Phillip - I don’t really like him. He looks like a creep, or maybe I’ve just been reading too many mafia stories… shudders
  • Queen Elenora - Not that bad. She reminds me of Regina Mills from Once Upon A Time.
  • Irianna - First, she was rude to Aria. That was fine, but then she beat up a child for wearing a different dress? I don’t tolerate child abusers.
Choices

Awesome job with the choices! It really does matter, and I love that. I also love that the choices give us various outcomes.

Cover

When I read the first chapter, I thought, This doesn’t fit the story at all. Then I continued reading, and went, Oh! I kinda get it now! But what does the title mean?

Will I continue reading?
Hmm… Maybe. The plot is very interesting. If you just work on what I said, your story will become even more amazing. I don’t remember if I added the story to My Favorites or not…

Are you satisfied with your review? :heart:

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