Glad to know I’m not the only one then
Title: DD: Rock Your Socks Off
Author Name: Isaiah H
Genre: Drama/Romance
Style: Limelight
Description: Lies,Love, Lust, Gangs and Death! People may think the dancing industry is simple… But what happens when it can get you killed?You Choose!
Episodes: 4
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5450918717161472
Code:write84
It makes me slower, but also less bored.
If you want, you can include your cover!
Thank you. I’ll use that in the review too.
Ok you can post it here!
Perfect!
Story Title: In a Starry Night
Author Name: Fatima Al star
Style: Limelight
Genre: Romance/drama
Episodes: 3 (more coming soon!)
Story Description: Rose goes thorough a lot of difficulties that will lead her to find secrets that were hidden for years! Will she ever find happiness and love? (Choices matter)
Instagram Name: @fatima_stories
Story Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5756418218131456
Story cover
What made you write your story?:
I had a good plot in mind and I wanted to make it com in real life so I did it!
Code : writer84
I love how you threw in that question! Will read it soon.
Thank you!
Title: Teacher or Queen?
Author Name: Mystique
Genre: drama
Style: Limelight
Description: After years of searching she had finally found them. Can she get close to them?
Her destiny is about to change forever. What will she choose?
Episodes: 4
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5874052041146368
Code: write84
Here’s mine:
Title: Dreams and Nightmares
Author: Dreamer
Genre: Romance
Style: Ink
Description: Scarlet had a rough past and it looks like it’s not getting better after she was bought by some mysterious guy. Will she ever turn her life from a nightmare to a dream?
Episodes: 9 (more coming soon, I’m trying to update once a week)
Updates to this story: Dreams and Nightmares - my first story
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5452320906543104
Code: write84
Thanks for doing this, take your time
You’re welcome
Title: The Four Horsemen
Author Name: S_Unique
Genre: Fantasy
Style: INK
Description: 4 Sins. 4 Angels fell. 4 Horsemen rose. A curse was casted. And the battle of good vs evil is about to begin. CC/ Choices matter
Episodes: 7 (ongoing)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5482099054608384
Code: write84
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Apologies for the mistake, Sydney
Title: Thrill of the Hunt
Author Name: Azaria Sin
Genre: Mystery/Romance/Thriller
Style: INK
Description: A deranged serial killer is hunting street workers! You’re a detective paired with a beautiful man: will you capture the manipulative psychopath while warring lust & inner demons?
Episodes: 12 (S1 ranged from 1-10, S2 has started)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6661570308734976
Code: write84
Title: Midnight Memories
Author Name: Evija
Genre: Romance
Style: LImelight
Description: Ayla flies all the way from Ireland to somewhere in America, when she’s supposed to spend a summer in some kind of rehabilitation center for people with anorexia.
Episodes: 16
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5689448274984960
Code: write84
Here is your review, @IDONTKNOWREAL.
Girl of Deception
Chapter 1
What I Loved
- I like the splashes.
- That animated intro! Brilliant.
- Customization, but limited. Nice.
- You used choices and the point system? Awesome!
- Nice outfits. And I love how you didn’t use the panning thing.
- Lyra is pretty.
- Yup, Rafe, run! She’s a psycho!
- I like the backgrounds.
- What a nice cliffhanger!
- Karma!!!
Thoughts
- Aria, give your chest a rest.
- Rude much?
- “19-year-old woman” LIAR.
- You’re acting like a peasant!
- What a spoiled brat. Wait, who raised her?
- You can’t even act like a decent human.
- Bitch.
- Lyra is encouraging her behavior too?!
- I already hate Aria, and you won’t change my mind.
- The fashion adviser looks old
- Can Aria stop lashing out at everyone for one fucking second?
- I hate Aria…
- All of that, just to eat a cupcake? Are you kidding me?!
- I despise Aria.
What I Didn't Love So Much
- Aria should’ve entered with a walking animation.
- Wait, the hair changed back to Straight, but I chose Diva Curls. Everything else stayed the same. How?
- You should’ve used @zoom reset before the street scene.
- Some spelling errors.
- Aria popped onto the screen. She should’ve entered.
- A speech bubble error. Use @speechbubble reset before the photoshoot scene.
- It should’ve been a narrator bubble for the Camera Girl. This: NARRATOR (CAMERA GIRL)
- Wrong background for nighttime. What I mean, is that it should be JUVIE WELLES BEDROOM - NIGHT, not DAY.
- I think Aria should’ve been screen center for the dressing game.
- Use transitions, but not too many, to establish new scenes.
Chapter 2
What I Loved
- I really like how you used filters for a flashback. Glad to know that I’m not the only one.
- Oh, now you’re scared.
- I liked the Q&A.
- Aria is screwed…
- I feel like Cassian is a good guy, though. That’s a good feeling.
- Karma! Yet again!
Thoughts
- Wow, now she’s scared?
- Everything.
- Oh, I don’t know… everyone you hurt?
- Damn, Aria’s gonna lose her voice.
- Is this a dream?
- I don’t think it is…
- Cassian seems like a bad boy. For some reason, I don’t know why…
- Hmm… Who is that?
What I Didn't Love So Much
- You should include teasers for each episode. Helps a lot.
- The 3 characters should’ve been placed there before the pan.
- More sounds and music would work.
- The first scene dragged out for a bit…
- Aria popped onto the screen.
Chapter 3
What I Loved
- Still shook over that intro.
- I like the setting. Meaning the place… you get what I mean.
- Wow, Elenora is giving Aria a taste of her own medicine!
- The ballroom outfits are nice.
- Where are some of the backgrounds from? Love them.
Thoughts
- So, Cassian is a love interest…
- “Cupcake”
- She is so dumb…
- Is Logan a love interest too?
- Um, it’s a ballroom, stupid!
- So this is like the Bachelor?
- I knew Lyra was a snake!
- Is Rafe a love interest, too?! Oh my God…
- Are they flirting? squints
- Wow, the palace must be huge.
What I Didn't Love So Much
- You should’ve turned off the music at the end of episode 2.
- Why wasn’t there a clothing choice between the Prince’s clothes and ger own?
- You should’ve turned off the music after the ballroom scene.
- The music is annoying me…
- Maybe try using a different type of cliffhanger? Instead of “who”, pull a “what”, or “how”.
- A little short…
Chapter 4
What I Loved
- Again, those splashes!!!
- I’m loving what’s happening to Aria.
- Mags is so cute.
- I love the black outfits!
- Nice spot directing!
- That directing with the fire scene. Incredible!
- This does have fantasy elements!
- Lisa is friends with everyone!
Thoughts
- What does the title mean?
- What is going on?
- What??
- I’m so confused right now…
- This has fantasy?!
- Wait, she’s being nice now?
- You don’t know her like we do, Maggie…
- Aria is changing?
- Aria can’t get anymore stupider, can she?
- She has powers?
- What a sadist.
- Temptation…
- You were cruel to an innocent child. This is karma.
What I Didn't Love So Much
- A few grammar errors.
- A period, or exclaimation mark after “Come in”.
- You should really fix the speech bubbles.
- Aria popped onto the screen.
- Try @CHARACTER enters from side to position more often.
- Overlays would’ve worked for Maggie’s face…
- Use @transition fade out before the author’s entrance.
Overall?
My Opinion
Well, this story was… different from what I expected it to be. It’s definitely a fantasy to me. I have some questions, but the story is quite a gem.
Storyline
It’s not very clear yet. I feel like I kind of understand what’s happening. I hope the storyline doesn’t end up being cliche.
Characters
- Aria - This is the first time I’ve hated an MC for a legitimate reason. I don’t like her at all. Her having a bad past does not excuse her shitty personality.
- Cassian - He seems very kind. I like him, but he acts like a typical “mysterious” guy.
- Rafe - Hilarious! But he’s secretive, too… I feel like he’s a love interest.
- Logan - Humble. Basically, everything a guard should be. I don’t know how to feel about him yet.
- Lyra - I feel like she isn’t important to the plot at all. Try developing her storyline more.
- Magdalena - I like her so much. She’s so cute! She doesn’t deserve what’s happening to her…
- Lisa - She’s so friendly, I just wanna be her friend!
- Princess Isabella - Very kind. I wonder what’s she really like.
- King Phillip - I don’t really like him. He looks like a creep, or maybe I’ve just been reading too many mafia stories… shudders
- Queen Elenora - Not that bad. She reminds me of Regina Mills from Once Upon A Time.
- Irianna - First, she was rude to Aria. That was fine, but then she beat up a child for wearing a different dress? I don’t tolerate child abusers.
Choices
Awesome job with the choices! It really does matter, and I love that. I also love that the choices give us various outcomes.
Cover
When I read the first chapter, I thought, This doesn’t fit the story at all. Then I continued reading, and went, Oh! I kinda get it now! But what does the title mean?
Will I continue reading?
Hmm… Maybe. The plot is very interesting. If you just work on what I said, your story will become even more amazing. I don’t remember if I added the story to My Favorites or not…
Are you satisfied with your review?