Feedback for my story


I’m only on the first episode and I’m an amateur. I feel like I can improve but I’m not sure where. Help is definitely appreciated.


Hey! My name is Dani! :black_heart:

If you want, I can review your story and post the review on my Instagram (daniepisodewriter).

The review will be focus on:

Language/Grammar (I can’t say much about grammar and language because English is not my first language, but if I spot any mistakes I’ll tell you.)
Overall opinion

:warning: The review will be as many episodes as you have read of my story. :warning:
Per example: If you read 3 episodes of my story, I’ll review the first 3 episodes of your story.
Maximum: 4 episodes

Here’s my story:
Title: Darkness
Author: Dani
Genre: Romance/Mystery
Style: Ink
Description: If you can’t get away from darkness, you learn to live with it… A vampire story with action, adventure, mystery and, of course, romance!
This is not a cliche vampire story!
Episodes: 6 (more to come)
Instagram: daniepisodewriter
I hope you like it :black_heart:

Any other person who wants a review can send me their story too! :blush::black_heart:

Tell me if you want me to do the review! :calling:


Yay!! That’s fine with me. Do I need to have 3 episodes because I only have one and i’m not done with it.


No problem! That means you only have to read one episode of my story… :wink: Or you can read more if you like, it’s up to you! :joy:
Do you have Instagram? Send me the screenshot of the number of episodes you’ve read of my story. After that I’ll start reviewing your story!


I do. it’s skittleslover94


Okay! Don’t forget to send me the screenshot then… :blush:


I sent you a dm on instagram


Hi there! Would you be interested in doing a review for review? I am very thoughtful in my reviews and provide screenshots proving that I actually read the chapters :slight_smile:


Closing due to one month of inactivity :slight_smile: