This story is unpublished but I will be providing a link
This is the saga of the once not so eligible bachelor Lalit who runs away from his wedding. He fights all forms of convention and challenges of the community he was raised in. Running away from his own wedding his life is in pieces so you follow him on a journey of damage control, sarcasm and self discovery.
-The opening is cool and fun! I do think it’s a few seconds too long.
-I’m really glad its a male MC!
-I think he should a have a look of more fear/panic before he says he’s not getting married.
-Lailani is trash
-His mouth moves while he’s thinking about running into the forest.
-And when his mom is speaking. You should add a non speaking animation every time after a character speaks so their mouth isn’t moving when another speaks.
-I love his determination and humor!
-The timing when Lalit and Brenda bump into each other is a tad awkward, the timing is a bit off.
-Brenda is spunky and realistic lol
-Ummmmmm…is that coffee shop cutie with ex-fiance?!
-The layer is off when his parents walk away, they walk between the “couple” in the back. Move couple to layer 0 and parents to 1.
-His dialogue is hilarious
-The parents are layered wrong as well, move dad to 1 then mom to 2 before they start talking.
-Not sure if gori means anything or if you meant to put girl, but Amma says that when she’s caps lock yelling at him lol
-The dad is funny toooooo.
-I really love Lalit getting real about his culture and the negativity he’s had to face with his family.
-Sometimes the dad’s face is offscreen when he speaks, maybe make him smaller, move him to the left more, or zoom out.
-Love the mom pacing back and forth haha
-The first episode ended abruptly.
Overall, I enjoyed the story and kudos to you for introducing a culture not usually shown and making the MC male! Fun story and great humor!