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WELCOME TO THE FEEDBACK GROUP!!!

Here you come to get feedback on your story, there are three of us @Forever1201 @Danielle318 & @AMagic if you would like to join PM me.

RULES

  • You may not get upset over a truthful review.

  • We can accept or deny your review. It will be denied if you don’t give us your Story Link, Title, & Cover, plus a description of your story.

  • We are not robots, we have lives outside of the forums, so you must be patient.

  • When you have gotten your feedback, make sure to rate our service.

WHAT WE JUDGE

  • Grammar
  • The Plot
  • Directing
  • Intro & Outro
  • Sound
  • Character Devolpment
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Hey! Can you give feedback on my story?

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@Miranda_Episode

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Yeah, that’s what we’re for.

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Title: Better Than Ever
Author: Miranda
Description: You’re a teenage girl with a lot of secrets. What happens when you start looking for your paren’t killer? Will Derek change you? Your killer may be closer than you think…
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6391041504903168

Sorry, I don’t have the cover now, but it’s basically something like this:

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@Danielle318 do you want to do this one?

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Sure! I will get right on it!
Are we gonna do sound and character development too? @AMagic

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Yeah, I’m adding it rn, I have slow wifi.

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Ok

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I will do your request! I will grading:

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Story title: Insecure
Story description: Olivia used to be the nerd girl in school, she always had a crush on Noah but never told anyone about it. Growing up being so beautiful and fashionable will he ever notice her? CC, 2 love interests
Story Cover:

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Story link:

P.S: The description is a little bit different from the one on the app bec. I can’t recall it. It’s the same plot tho.

I hope you like my story :blush:

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Ok, thank you!

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Hey there, I’m @AMagic. I will be reviewing your story today :smile:

I will be grading.

  • Grammar
  • The Plot
  • Directing
  • Intro & Outro
  • Sound
  • Character Devolpment
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Alright, I hope you enjoy it♥️

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I am only reviewing 3 episode out of 7.
So Episode 1:
Grammer 15/15
Plot 15/30
Reason: Because it doesnt show the reader much about the MC’s past.
Directing 10/10
Character Development 15/30
Reason: Dont much about the MC or any of the other characters.
Sound 5/5
Intro and Outro 5/10
Reason: Only have an Intro. No outro.

Episode 2:
Grammer 15/15
Plot 15/30
Reason: Because it doesnt show the reader much about the MC’s past.
Directing 10/10
Character Development 15/30*
Reason: Dont much about the MC or any of the other characters.
Sound 5/5
Intro and Outro 5/10
Reason: Only have an Intro. No outro.

Episode 3:
Grammer 15/15
Plot 15/30
Reason: Because it doesnt show the reader much about the MC’s past.
Directing 10/10
Character Development 20/30*
Reason: Showed some information but not a lot.
Sound 5/5
Intro and Outro 5/10
Reason: Only have an Intro. No outro.

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EPISODE 1

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CONS

  • Her Mother wasn’t the same skin color as me.
  • You were missing punctuation
  • The girl with the black and red top, was wearing the same clothes from years ago.
  • I wish you would have told us who Natalie was.
  • Oliva became invisible.
  • At times they were talking with no animation.
  • It was short, which is okay, but you didn’t cover everything a first chapter should.
  • You lacked some transitions
  • When they exited they got bigger.
  • You didn’t fade the music.
  • Characters were popping out of nowhere
  • Speech bubbles were sometimes out of place

PROS

  • I like where the plot was going.

  • Your story had some type of vibe that I liked.

  • Plot Score: 5/10

  • Sound Score: 3/10

  • Directing Score: 2/10

  • Intro Score: 0/10

  • Outro Score: 0/10

  • Grammar: 4/10

  • Character Devolpment Score : None Yet

FINAL SCORE: 14/50

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Thank you for the feedback!! :grinning:

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Of course!

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Thank you so much. I’ll modify all of this before I publish and I will work on making longer chapters and maybe add more to this one, but who is Natalie?
I’ll be waiting for your feedback on chapter two​:heart::heart:

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Yeah, I think I got the name wrong :sweat_smile: , it’s gonna be a minute till chapter two, I just got my phone fixed and my little sister took it from me.

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