Feedback needed!
Hi!
So I’m writing a new story so I can text out the new features that will be coming out soon and I thought I could use some advice or feedback!
Genre: Fantasy/drama
Description:
A once prosperous empire is on the verge of destruction as the black market comes crashing down onto it. Dark royal figures and Cruel Gang Lords fight to death over the throne of the glistening city of Tenebrae. Ivy stumbles across a huge factor of the war and has to make decision on what side she’ll support, will she save her city or help create a new one.
About Tenebrae:
District 1:
Is the remnants from the war that had happened many years ago.
People still resided within and above the flooded buildings living in poverty. This place soon became the slums.
Large container ships, rooftop cities, and floor by floor estates were the locations of black market trading.
Despite it being the lowest of low within Tenebrae, a lot of money could still be made there.
It was ravaged by drug-trading, the sex industry, and gang activity.
Despite there being so many active gangs, one topped them all. Unlike the rest, it didn’t have a name; only a presence. Some refer to it as the Underworld, Others simply call it the mafia. Either way, they weren’t to be messed with.
District 2:
Despite being a town for the lower income, it was still cozy and self sufficient. Unlike District 1, it was a bright agricultural town with great potential. The people were genuine and helped others without asking for more. It was isolated from the bustling capital as crops spanned up its hills and stopped at it’s flowing tree’s. It’s streets were full of vibrance and life, each of its citizens full of character. District 2 was a cultural melting pot and discrimination simply didn’t exist. People of every culture, language, and color could be seen walking its streets peacefully. To most, District 2 was seen as a perfect society.
Despite district 2 being lower in wealth, we still survived and prospered. The social aspect of our district was superior to the rest, our at least that’s what I think.
District 3:
District 3 is bustling with people rushing to work or shopping their hearts out. Here people had more than enough money to live so they spent it in businesses. A lot of the produce and products sold in District 3 were made or grown in District 2. The people lived in cycles, they work, eat, and sleep. District 3 was known for its businesses and fast growth. It produced the highest wealth within the businesses. The consumers lived in its towering apartments of expanding suburbs.
To make up for the lack of green space and land, they planted gardens on their roofs and stacked upwards.
District 3 resides just behind the wall making it the outermost part of the city. However, our empire hasn’t been threatened in hundreds of years so no threat is placed over District 3.
District 4:
Known for its historic marks and beautiful Greek architecture, District 4 is where the extremely wealthy and royal bloodlines resides. The capital sat right in the middle on a mountain overlooking the entire empire and its glistening falls. The district was built along the hill and down to the bay where lavish yachts and boats lined its docks. The people lived in town estates that reached the skies. Their floors tiled with marble and their hearts coated in gold. The only thing that truly went on with District 4 was politics.
Unfortunately, the other districts had no say in the position of emperor/empress. Only the nobles and capitalists in District 4 did. Every empress or emperor that dies, a new one must be elected within the royal bloodline. If not elected, the heir will receive the throne. Only blood relatives within the emperor/empresses bloodline can receive the throne.
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District 1 = the slums
District 2 = lower class - agriculture
District 3 = middle class - businesses and housing
District 4 = upper class - politics and royalty
What are your thoughts?
