So, I am the author of the story Crossed Paths.
In light of recent feedback, I have made some adjustments to episodes 1 and 2.
I have changed the dialogue, provided lessons for readers to learn from and tried to focus more on character development.
I have added some more information as well as tried to make Derek far less desperate - I want to see if my adjustments have truly worked.
If you are able to take the time to see if my story has improved, I would appreciate it profoundly.
I am kind of at a loss and going through some block of what to do to improve the appeal of my story. I consider this story my baby but at the same time, is it an ugly baby? So, I am just kinda stumped and even discouraged.
Please provide the review here, thank you so much and review the first two episodes please!