Feedback on my opening scene

I posted about not knowing how to start my story. I’ve taken on board feedback but I’d like to see what people think about this (start of the story)
The scene takes place before the in introduced.

Story
title: Unfolded With A Scar
Genre: Mystery/drama
synopsis:
When a famous fashion designer is murdered it’s up to you and your partner to find the
perpetrator. But what seems to be a straight forward case, gets a lot more complicated when her true identity reveals she has already been dead for 2 years.

I’d just like a little feedback on my opening scene

Thank you

Emmzy

  1. Andy is too short in front of the door.
  2. Instead of using exit/enter you should spot them in a different zone, and let them walk on the carpet.
  3. The crowd is not at good quality. Maybe use the one from overlays? The blue one (name of overlay: CONCERT CROWD)
  4. (On the stage) I think applause sound will make it look better.
  5. Let Andy be rear in front of the opened door.
  6. Maybe fast zoom and scream?
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Thank you :slight_smile:

When you say rear do you mean like this?

Also if I have him rear do you mean zoom onto his head or onto the door

Again thank you :slight_smile:

Yep, I meant it, but let him face in a different direction.

Zoom on his face in (for example in 0.2) and then scream.

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