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You are an innocent girl who falls inlove with her dream man, but what happens when you realise not everything is as it seems?
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maybe, you could do a fantasy theme theme when something darker is going on

Hm, like what?

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like, a kingdom is not innocent as you think and the king is actually crazy idk

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ooo that wouldn’t be too bad

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imma edit this topic real quick

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Make it scary :crazy_face:

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i love y’all sm i have gotten 10000 ideas from just like two comments

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I know we are just so powerful

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ikr like wow

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Not saying this to be rude, but it’s very generic. What about this story makes it different the 8,000 other stories where you fall in love with a guy who isn’t what he seems?

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true, but like i don’t have any other ideas, could u help?

No hun, it’s your story. I don’t know what story you’re trying to tell. :slight_smile:

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I like it :eyes::eyes: maybe fantasy, or drama :woman_shrugging:t4: I don’t know, it kinda sounds like a fantasy description to me

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it seems a bit generic to me tbh

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Oh look at at that I made it just in time before it closed.

So, yes it does seem a bit generic, but there could be more. It’s just hard to give feedback to one sentence.

How did you envision the characters? What inspired the story? How is she innocent? Young? Sheltered life? Just clueless in general? How is he her dream man? Is he powerful somehow? Brave in some way?

“Not everything is as it seems” This could go so many ways. There needs to be a little bit of an explanation to hook people in so they check out the first episode at least.

Let me know if you need ideas, I can usually come up with a lot of them, but I struggle to write out whole episodes.

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