Hey guys,
I would like you to read the first chapter of my story and tell me what you think of it.
Too dramatic? Too fast? Is the length of the chapter okay? Improvements?
I would like the absolute truth as this will help me improve my writing on episode, and as I am also a new author.
Thanks!
One bit of feedback from me: your character customization needs fixed a little. Take the “What’s your name” prompt outside of the customization-- put it before your customization label. Every time I select something and say “Done” it asks me what my name is again