Hey there! I started to write my new story and need some feedback and opinions on it! If you are, please could you read two episodes as I haven’t completed episode 3! Let me know! I’ll credit you for helping me! Thanks in advance! Please no read for reads!
Title: Compulsion Description: Zyro Morte is sent on death row. He’s given the chance to extend his time after the FBI need him for a mission. Simple? One problem, he has to jeopardize his soulmates family!? Genre: Romance and comedy Link:http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6725446713540608
@appleqrl hey there! (sorry if this isn’t you, my bad if I’m tagging the wrong person!) Thanks for giving me feedback in the Q and A! You mentioned the length, could you elaborate please! Is it too short? too long?
I just saw it and THANK YOU!! You’ve made me so happy! Could I ask, what was your opinions on Kendra? (the MC lol!). I’m thinking to redo some scenes with her as I think she seems too weak but I’m not really sure. But again, THANK YOU! I was really starting to doubt the story and start over! You’ve really reassured me!
ohhhh kendras the main character? Like the main main one? I thought it was the dude who was killing her family haha. So definitely shift the story for her a little bit. You focused a lot on the male character for the 2 episodes (i feel like). Prob because most of the comedy was put on that scene.
From an outside standpoint, all i recall for Kendra is she was knocked out by a perv…and she was spying on her family lol for a passcode while the male character had a lot more fun aspects and therefore more things i can recall for him.
If you plan to make Kendra more of the focus, maybe involve her more in scenes thats seems exciting. Although she was knocked out by a perv, way overused and unlikely because she has said that her parents taught her how to shoot, so she prob has learned self defense as well? Maybe make that perv scene where she knocks out the perv instead? And then having the blinking scene come from the perv, and hes like “wtf just happened”
Then be a progressive bich about it, and say" Dont underestimate me, ya perv" and flip dat hair and throw shade XD.
haha, im glad to have helped!