Helene Reviews | A Brush With Love by @S. Green


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Continuing the discussion from Helene Reviews | Free Honest Episode Story Reviews:

Review: A Brush With Love by @SG38

What I like:

  • Good storyline

  • Interesting conversations
    Sometimes the conversations are funny too, especially between the roommate and Sophie

  • Decent length
    The episode isn’t too long nor is it too short.

You might want to look into:

  • Lengthy transitions
    The transitions are a little dragged out, especially the beginning.

Additional comments:

During the part when Suki tells Sophie about the actors/actresses, it would be great if we a take a look on how they look like. Overall, I enjoyed playing and I might continue it.

Good luck and happy writing! xx


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Thank you for reviewing and your suggestions.

I get what your saying about showing what the characters look like. It would be good to see what they look like beforehand. The reason I haven’t yet is because Sophie doesn’t know who these people are, and when she does finally get to meet them, there is a big reveal/surprise element to each of them. If I show them before it takes away that moment. :blush:

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review :heart_eyes:


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