Continuing the discussion from Helene Reviews | Free Honest Episode Story Reviews:
Review: Dreams and Nightmares by @RainbowCat
What I like:
Goddamn this is a whole new level of brutal
I don’t see stories with this much violence. I’d say you brought something new to the table.
Although you took away the mysteriousness of Scarlet’s past right from the beginning, you brought in another mysterious element when you introduced the traffickers. Stories must always have a question the readers are looking for the answers to.
You might want to look into:
- I’ve read quite a lot of stories with similar concepts. To make yours stand out, I suggest giving the characters a little more to look for than what they are already. For example, Scarlet may be constantly thinking about somebody she encountered a long time ago, or she received a note from an unknown messenger. Something like that.
I honestly don’t have much to comment on this story. I think the plot could be worked on to make it even more interesting, but it is really good already. But that’s just my opinion. I might continue reading it.
Good luck and happy writing! xx