I recently started my story and managed to finish 3 chapters… I haven’t publish it yet as I’m still waiting for the final background I added for approval…however, I wanted to get your help and check my story development so far and I would greatly appreciate any feedback you can give me on my first 3 chapters. I already proof read it but I think I need a new set of fresh eyes to spot some animations I need to change or if my story is a bit slow…
I promise I will take every feedback positively and I will push myself to make it better.
Hello Goji,
Thank you so much in advance!
Is it better if I give you the link on the account itself? unfortunately I cant publish it yet due to a pending background approval.
Just finished reading chapter 1.
I think it’s better to add transitions before you move to the next scene/background.
Customise part, I suggest that you zoom the camera to Ayah instead of having her to be in center suddenly.
In every dialogue, it would be better to add a different animation to the listening character.
After customising Xander, he oddly walks to a different spot… can you fix that?
I’m not very good with grammar, but I noticed that you have many words that lack apostrophes…
You can add more zoom in as well.
The party/bar scene, there are no extra characters in zone 1, maybe just cut to zone 2 or 3 right away?
Wow, this is awesome. thank you so much!
I will take note and create changes ASAP.
I hope the next chapters are a bit better since thats when I started learning more on advance directing.
