Help gain script trouble (better for me to show you)


#1

I just recently updated my script and it is my first time using gains. However I am having a problem. the best way i can put it in words is it’s like my second gain is completly ignored. The easiest thing for me to do is show you and let y’all see it for yourself, as well as tell you about it here

When you get to the 3rd episode, when Becky is trying to decide her new outfit, choose outfit 2. Then in the next episode, what should happen is becky should appear with braided hair in outfit 2 (this character is supposed to be becky 3) but that doesn’t happen. Unless it’s my phone alone making it like that but i doubt it cause i tried turning it on and off

Please help! How do i fix this? Why is it doing this?


#2

Let’s see your script


#3

the only way i know to send the script is copy and paste so to keep it more organized im gonna send each episode script in different replies. Im guessing the issue will be the 3rd or 4th episode since thats where the issue begins but i figure ill send it all.


#4

plus maybe i can get some other pointers


#5

ok here is episode 1

INT. WARNING - THEMES
@BECKY changes into BECKY_default
NARRATOR
Hey guys. Thanks for choosing to read this story.

    NARRATOR
The first few stores is heavy on sexual child assault. But


    NARRATOR
Most of them will either not go into them that deep or only for a brief moment


    NARRATOR
Thanks for choosing to read this story.


    NARRATOR
Just so you are aware, Anita Gandre is my version of Ariana Grande

    NARRATOR
I can't use real celebs so I have to give them Aliases. I hope yall like this strory

    NARRATOR
There will be more celebrities that I will use alias's for.


    NARRATOR
Anyhoo, I hope yall like the story



    NARRATOR
And please. Send me tips and comments



    NARRATOR
And big thank yous to all of those who have followed me and read my other story

    NARRATOR
Im still working on it

    NARRATOR
Hope yall enjoy

INT. CLASSIC LIVING ROOM - DAY

@UNCLE HECTOR spot 1.280 88 69 AND UNCLE HECTOR faces right

    UNCLE HECTOR (scream)
Becky! Get down here now you stupid piece of crud

@pause for a beat

@BECKY enters from right to spot 0.400 201 204 AND BECKY is run_athletic
@BECKY spot 0.400 201 204 AND BECKY is cry_weep_loop
UNCLE HECTOR (arms_crossed_angry)
Stop crying you stupid piece of crud. Its time to play the game
BECKY (cry_sob_loop)
Please Im begging you, please spare me it hurts.

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry_accuse)
Stop being a big drama queen. I want you undressed and

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry_accuse)
In my bed in five minutes. Do you understand?

@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat

    UNCLE HECTOR (scream)
Answer me!

@pause for a beat
@UNCLE HECTOR spot 1.280 88 69 AND UNCLE HECTOR is slap_face
@BECKY spot 0.400 201 204 AND BECKY is slap_face_receive

    BECKY (cry_sob_loop)
Ok

@BECKY exits right AND BECKY is walk_sad

@transition fade out black

INT. YOUR BEDROOM - NIGHT
@BECKY enters from left to spot 0.355 240 211 AND BECKY is walk_sad
@BECKY faces right AND BECKY is cry_weep_loop

    BECKY (cry_weep_loop)
(I just don't get it. Why does he do this to me. He is my uncle)

    BECKY (idle_sad)
(I miss you mom and dad. I wish you were here)


    NARRATOR
I am 4 years old. A month after my second birthday, my parents were killed

    NARRATOR
In a car wreck. My Uncle was my only living relative. So he became my legal guardian

    NARRATOR
No one knew he had become a violent man. He's been hurting me for 2 years now

@UNCLE HECTOR enters from left to spot 1.266 73 76 AND UNCLE HECTOR is walk_neutral

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry)
I told you to get undressed and in my bed

@BECKY faces left

    BECKY (cry_sniff_loop)
Sorry

@UNCLE HECTOR faces right AND UNCLE HECTOR is punch_jab
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_wounded

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry_arms_crossed)
Do you want another one?

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is talk_sad

    BECKY
No

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry_accuse)
Then move your rotten self to the bed

@BECKY exits right
@pan to zone 4

@BECKY enters from left to spot 0.353 250 271 AND BECKY is walk_trudge
@BECKY faces right AND BECKY is dustoff_loop
@UNCLE HECTOR enters from left to back left

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_handsonhips)
Now then, lets do this

@transition fade out black

INT. BLACK - NIGHT

    NARRATOR
It hurts so bad. But my uncle doesn't care

INT. YOUR BEDROOM - NIGHT
@pan to zone 4
@BECKY spot 0.353 250 271 AND BECKY is cry_weep_loop
@BECKY faces right AND BECKY is idle_wounded
@UNCLE HECTOR stands back left AND UNCLE HECTOR is talk_handsonhips

    UNCLE HECTOR
That was some good stuff

@UNCLE HECTOR exits left AND UNCLE HECTOR is walk_neutral

    BECKY (talk_neutral)
My uncle won't be back for 5 hours. I should get some time out of the house

    BECKY (talk_shrug)
I guess I'll go to the

choice
“park”{

    BECKY (idle_sad)
I can hide in the cave like place and gather myself

    BECKY
Hopefully no one is there

@BECKY exits left AND BECKY is walk_trudge

gain chose_park

EXT. CAVE - DAY
@BECKY enters from left to spot 0.299 248 242 AND BECKY is walk_trudge

    BECKY (idle_wounded)
Im so hungry. My uncle doesn't feed me reguarly

@BECKY faces left

    BECKY (admire)
Oh my. God is being good to me. There is a piece of pizza over there

@BECKY walks to spot 0.337 70 213 AND BECKY is walk_neutral
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is eat_pizza
@pause for a beat
@ANITA GANDRE enters from right to spot 0.732 232 143

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_greet)
Hello

@BECKY faces right AND BECKY is idle_terrified

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
Don't be frightened. Im Anita Gandre. Im a singer

    BECKY (talk_neutral)
Im a huge fan. I love your song wreckless lady. Actually i love all your songs

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
Aww thank you. Tell me, what's your name?

    BECKY (idle_sad)
(I guess it can't hurt to tell her my name)

    BECKY
Becky

    ANITA GANDRE (admire)
I love that name

    BECKY (idle_sad)
I have to go back home. My uncle will be upset if I am not back in time

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
Well it was nice to meet you

@ANITA GANDRE faces left AND ANITA GANDRE is reach_kneel_rear

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
My number is on it. Call me anytime

    BECKY
Thank you

@BECKY exits left

    ANITA GANDRE (idle_sad)
(Its kind of concerning that she was here all by herself)

    ANITA GANDRE
(And i just noticed she had bruises on the back of her neck)

    ANITA GANDRE
(I hope she comes back cause i wanna ask about that)

EXT. PHILLY CAFE - NIGHT
@BECKY enters from left to spot 0.319 241 215 AND BECKY is walk_neutral

    BECKY (cry_sob_loop)
What is wrong with me, I had a chance to be free and I blew it

@UNCLE HECTOR enters from left to spot 0.840 94 148 AND UNCLE HECTOR is walk_neutral

    UNCLE HECTOR (scream)
What the hell are you doing here?

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_terrified

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry_accuse)
How dare you leave the house

    UNCLE HECTOR
You know you are not allowed to leave the house

    UNCLE HECTOR
You are too ugly

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry)
You know what? Since you are ungrateful to the point you would try to run away

    UNCLE HECTOR
I don't want you back. You aren't worth it

    BECKY
I wasn't running away, I just wanted some fresh air

@UNCLE HECTOR faces right AND UNCLE HECTOR is punch_jab
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_wounded

    NARRATOR
He continued to beat me till I fell to the ground, and could barely move

@UNCLE HECTOR faces right AND UNCLE HECTOR is idle_punch
@BECKY spot 0.463 356 194 AND BECKY faces left
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is faint

@UNCLE HECTOR exits left AND UNCLE HECTOR is walk_neutral

    NARRATOR
I could barely move. Any movement caused extreme pain
    NARRATOR
Everything hurts.

    NARRATOR
At this point I hope I die soon.

@pause for a beat
@ANITA GANDRE enters from left to spot 0.840 62 139 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

    ANITA GANDRE (dismayed)
Oh my God! Becky!

@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel

    ANITA GANDRE (idle_kneel)
(She is hurt bad. I must get her to the hospital)

    ANITA GANDRE (tinker_kneel_loop)
It's gonna be ok Becky. Lets get you to the hospital

gain chose_park
}
“lake”{
@BECKY exits left AND BECKY is walk_trudge

EXT. ROMANTIC LAKESIDE - DAY
@BECKY enters from left to spot 0.319 276 413 AND BECKY is walk_trudge
@BECKY faces right AND BECKY is idle_rear
@ANITA GANDRE enters from left to back left AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_think)
(That's odd. That little girl is here all by herself. She looks too young)

    ANITA GANDRE
(To be alone)

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_call_out)
Hey sweetie, please come here

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_terrified

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
It's ok Im not gonna hurt you

@pause for a beat
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is deepbreath
@BECKY walks to spot 0.319 192 298 AND BECKY is walk_exhausted

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
What are you doing here by yourself? You look pretty young.

    BECKY (idle_sad)
(I can't tell her the whole truth)

    BECKY (talk_sad_timid)
Um I live close by and my Uncle allows me to come here


    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
How old are you?

    BECKY (talk_sad_clutch)
Im um, four

    ANITA GANDRE (idle_sad)
(Something tells me something worse is happening.)

    ANITA GANDRE
(I have a hard time believing that any good parent/guardian would let a four year old)

    ANITA GANDRE
(Go out all by themselves)

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
What's your name?

@pause for a beat

    BECKY (talk_sad)
Becky

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
That's a beautiful name

    NARRATOR
Becky's stomach growls

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
Oh you sound hungry.
    ANITA GANDRE
I have some fruit in my car. I'll go get them
    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
Wait here. I'll be right back

@ANITA GANDRE exits left AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

    BECKY
(She's right. I am hungry. The last thing I had to eat was an apple.)

    BECKY
(And that was 2 days ago)

@UNCLE HECTOR enters from left to spot 0.840 92 227 AND UNCLE HECTOR is walk_neutral
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_terrified

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry_accuse)
How dare you leave the house!

@UNCLE HECTOR faces right AND UNCLE HECTOR is punch_jab
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_wounded
@UNCLE HECTOR faces right AND UNCLE HECTOR is punch_jab
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_wounded
@UNCLE HECTOR faces right AND UNCLE HECTOR is punch_jab
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_wounded
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is faint

@UNCLE HECTOR exits right AND UNCLE HECTOR is walk_neutral
@pause for a beat
@ANITA GANDRE enters from right to spot 0.840 211 296 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

    ANITA GANDRE (dismayed)
Oh my god! Becky

    ANITA GANDRE (idle_kneel)
Everything is gonna be ok.

    ANITA GANDRE
(I gotta get her to the hospital)

@transition fade out black

gain chose_lake
}

INT. BLACK - DAY

    NARRATOR
5 hours later

INT. HOSPITAL BED - NIGHT

@ANITA GANDRE left AND ANITA GANDRE faces right
@DR GENIS right AND DR GENIS faces left

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
How is she Dr Genis?

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
She is gonna be ok,

    DR GENIS (talk_sad)
But she has much more damage then meets the eye

    DR GENIS
While I was examining her, i found 500 wounds under her clothes

@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is dismayed

    DR GENIS
And only a fourth of them look like they are brand new

    DR GENIS
The rest of range from about a day old to 5 months old.

    DR GENIS (deepbreath)
And when i weighed her, she was only 18 pounds

    DR GENIS
And i also discovered she has been raped at least 30 times. Her small body couldn't handle that

    DR GENIS
So she had a lot of internal damage. I had to do a small operation to fix the damage

    ANITA GANDRE (cry_sniff_loop)
What was I thinking? I should've just taken her home the minute I saw her

    DR GENIS (talk_gesture)
Dont be so hard on yourself. The majority of her wounds were either well hidden

    DR GENIS
Or internal. You did the right thing to bring her here.

@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is deepbreath

    DR GENIS
I also did some dna testing on her so I could get proof of who raped her

    DR GENIS
Would you like to see her?

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
Yes.

@DR GENIS faces right AND DR GENIS is talk_gesture

    DR GENIS
She's over there.
    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
Im gonna run those test through. Ill be back in a bit

@BECKY changes into BECKY_Hidden wounds
@pan to zone 3
@BECKY spot 0.319 10 500 AND BECKY is lay_asleep_loop
@pause for a beat

@ANITA GANDRE enters from left to spot 0.840 73 139 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

    ANITA GANDRE (dismayed)
I cant believe someone would be this cruel to someone. Especially a child

@ANITA GANDRE walks to spot 0.840 34 227 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral
@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is sit

    ANITA GANDRE
Becky, I am so sorry I didnt do something sooner

    ANITA GANDRE
I promise. You will be safe now. I will make sure whoever did this to you

    ANITA GANDRE
Can never hurt you again

@pause for a beat
@DR GENIS enters from left to spot 0.840 190 194 AND DR GENIS is walk_neutral
@DR GENIS faces left

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
The DNA test I took not only gives me an answer for who her rapist is, but also who

    DR GENIS
Gave her these other injuries. It was all done by the same man.

    DR GENIS
The data matches up to a man named Hector Wallace. When Becky wakes up, I will

    DR GENIS
Need to ask a few questions

    DR GENIS (talk_reassure)
The more we find out, the more we can help Becky

    ANITA GANDRE
I have a strong feeling that she has been abused at home. I can't let her go back to that

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
I wanna adopt her

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
You will have to talk to child protective services about that


    ANITA GANDRE
I know, I just want her to be safe

    DR GENIS
Well one thing is for sure is that she will not go back to her abuser.

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is lay_awake_loop

    ANITA GANDRE (admire)
Look, she's waking up.

@pause for a beat
@BECKY spot 0.319 116 472 AND BECKY is idle_terrified

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
Hi Becky.

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is cry_sob_loop

    DR GENIS (talk_sad)
Poor thing is scared to death

@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is sit

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_sit)
It's alright Becky.


    DR GENIS (talk_reassure)
Everything is gonna be alright. I'm Doctor Genis. Im here to help.

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
I need to ask you a few questions. Please answer as much as you can

    ANITA GANDRE
And you are in a safe place so there is no need to be afraid

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is nod_loop
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is deepbreath

    BECKY (cry_sniff_loop)
Ok

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_sad

    DR GENIS
What was the last thing you had to eat?


    BECKY (idle_sad)
I had a

if (chose_park) {
BECKY
A slice of pizza

    DR GENIS (write_notepad)
I see. And where did you get this slice

    BECKY (idle_sad)
Cave

    DR GENIS (think)
Cave?

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
I think she means the one in the park. It's not actually a cave

    DR GENIS (write_notepad)
I see. Becky, was the pizza good?

    BECKY
No. I was hungry

}

elif(chose_lake) {

    BECKY (idle_sad)
An apple. Found it in the attic

}

@DR GENIS faces left AND DR GENIS is write_notepad

    DR GENIS (talk_gesture)
Can you tell me when you had your most recent full meal?

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_sad

    BECKY
Dont know

    DR GENIS (idle_sad)
Im not surpised. Her ribs are actually visible

    ANITA GANDRE (dismayed)
She has been starved.

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
We have some vegetable soup left at my house. Could she eat that. I can

    ANITA GANDRE
Call my mom and ask her to bring some

    DR GENIS (nod_loop)
Yes. That would be good. She needs a meal thats small, but nutricious.

@DR GENIS faces left AND DR GENIS is idle

@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is text_phone_neutral_loop
@pause for a beat
@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is idle

    ANITA GANDRE
My mom is on the way

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
Excellent. Now Becky. I have one more question for your right now

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_sad

    BECKY
Ok

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
Can you tell us who Hector Wallace is?

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is cry_sob_loop

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
Shh, it's ok Becky

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
So you know him. Is he your Dad?

@pause for a beat

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
Will you whisper it to me?

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is cry_sniff_loop
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is nod_loop

@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is sit

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_kneel

    NARRATOR
Becky whispers to her

    ANITA GANDRE (idle_sad)
He is her uncle.


    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
Where are your parents?

    NARRATOR
Becky whispers to Anita

    ANITA GANDRE (idle_sad)
She said they died when she turned 2. She lives with her Uncle

    DR GENIS (arms_crossed)
Not any more.

    DR GENIS (talk_phone_neutral_loop)
Hello, yes Id like to report a child abuse case.

@pause for a beat

    DR GENIS
Yes, I will send the testing results. Thank you

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
That man will no longer harm her.

@BECKY is cry_weep_loop

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
Shh, You are safe now

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is faint
@ANITA GANDRE faces right and ANITA GANDRE is dismayed
@transition fade out

INT. BASEMENT HALLWAY - NIGHT

@UNCLE HECTOR stands back left AND UNCLE HECTOR faces right
@UNCLE HECTOR faces right AND UNCLE HECTOR is punch_jab
@BECKY spot 0.292 224 270 AND BECKY is idle_wounded
@UNCLE HECTOR faces right AND UNCLE HECTOR is punch_jab
@BECKY spot 0.292 224 270 AND BECKY is idle_wounded

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is cry_sob_loop
@transition fade out

INT. HOSPITAL BED - NIGHT
@cut to zone 3
@BECKY spot 0.319 10 500 AND BECKY is lay_asleep_loop
@pause for a beat

@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 39 229
@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is sit

    ANITA GANDRE
Becky. Becky. Wake up sweetie

@BECKY spot 0.319 136 475 AND BECKY is cry_sob_loop
@pause for a beat

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
Shh. There there. Everything is alright

@DR GENIS enters from right to back right AND DR GENIS is walk_neutral

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
I wanna take her temperature. Could you lay her down please

@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 147 225 AND ANITA GANDRE is tinker_loop_rear

    ANITA GANDRE
Lie down Becky, It's alright

@BECKY spot 0.319 52 499 AND BECKY is lay_awake_loop

@ANITA GANDRE walks to spot 0.840 53 185 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral
@ANITA GANDRE faces right

@DR GENIS spot 0.840 125 184 AND DR GENIS is tinker_loop_rear

    DR GENIS
Ok. We're just gonna keep that in there a few minutes. Just lay still and quiet

@DR GENIS walks to spot 0.840 222 169 AND DR GENIS is walk_neutral
@DR GENIS faces left
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat

@DR GENIS faces right AND DR GENIS is reach_kneel_rear

@pause for a beat

    DR GENIS (talk_phone_neutral_loop)
Hey Nurse Lois. Could you bring me 2 damp cloths and a blanket please.

@pause for a beat

    DR GENIS
Thank you

    ANITA GANDRE (idle_sad)
What is her temperature?

    DR GENIS (idle_sad)
105. Thats why she passed out

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_terrified

    BECKY (cry_sob_loop)
Please don't hurt them Uncle Hector

    DR GENIS
Uh oh, she's hallucinating. Her fever must be rising

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is faint
@DR GENIS faces left

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
Dont worry. She'll be alright.

@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is deepbreath
@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is idle
@DR GENIS faces left AND DR GENIS is idle

@NURSE LOIS enters from left to back left AND NURSE LOIS is walk_neutral

    NURSE LOIS (talk_gesture)
Here you go Dr Genis. One blanket and some cool wash cloths

    DR GENIS
Thank you

@NURSE LOIS exits right AND NURSE LOIS is walk_neutral

@DR GENIS walks to spot 0.840 119 218 AND DR GENIS is walk_neutral

    DR GENIS (tinker_loop_rear)
Ok first im gonna get her head back on the pillow

@BECKY spot 0.319 10 500 AND BECKY is lay_asleep_loop

    DR GENIS
Ok now I'll put the washcloth on her forehead and the blanket over her

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
That should help bring the fever down. Im gonna go email that DNA sample.

@DR GENIS faces left AND DR GENIS is idle
ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
If Becky wakes up and is scared again, can i hold her? I don’t care if I catch her fever

    DR GENIS (talk_gesture)
Yes. By the way Im pretty sure her fever is caused by extreme stress. If that is so you cant catch it

@DR GENIS exits left
@ANITA GANDRE walks to spot 0.840 50 204 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral
@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is sit

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_sit)
Rest easy Becky. You're safe now.

#6

episode 2

INT. KITCHEN CLASSIC LUXURY - DAY
@cut to zone 3
@JOANNA spot 1.038 64 176 AND JOANNA is rear

    JOANNA
From what my daughter told me, this poor child needs a lot of stuff in this soup


    JOANNA (tinker_loop_rear)
Lets see how about some carrots

    JOANNA
Peas

    JOANNA
Potatos

    JOANNA
Green beans

    JOANNA
Noodles

    JOANNA
And some Corn

    JOANNA
Now I'll just stir it up

    JOANNA (rear)
All done. Better get this to them.

@transition fade out

INT. HOSPITAL BED - NIGHT

@BECKY changes into BECKY_Hidden wounds
@pan to zone 3
@BECKY spot 0.319 131 473 AND BECKY is idle_terrified
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 50 204 AND ANITA GANDRE is sit
@ANITA GANDRE faces right

@pan to zone 1
@JOANNA enters from left to back left AND JOANNA is walk_neutral

    JOANNA (talk_greet)
Hi Becky

@pan to zone 3

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
It's alright Becky this is my mom


    BECKY (idle_sad)
Hi. Sorry

@pan to zone 1

    JOANNA (talk_reassure)
No need to apoligze. I can imagine meeting new people is a bit scary now

    JOANNA (talk_gesture)
I brought you some vegetable soup

@JOANNA exits right

@pan to zone 3

@JOANNA enters from left to spot 0.840 211 209 AND JOANNA is walk_neutral

@JOANNA faces left AND JOANNA is give_gift

    NARRATOR
Please use your imagination and pretend it is a bowl of soup with crackers

    BECKY (talk_neutral)
Thank you it looks delicious


    NARRATOR
Please pretend she is eating soup


    BECKY
This is the best thing I have eaten in ages.



    JOANNA (talk_gesture)
Would you like some more?


    BECKY
Yes please

@transition fade out

INT. BLACK - DAY

    NARRATOR
Gonna jump foward 3 weeks later. Becky is a lot better but is still recovering




    NARRATOR
Her Uncle has been arrested for child abuse and neglect. Now he is on trial.


    NARRATOR
Becky is at the trial, but in another room with Anita cause she was too scared

    NARRATOR
To be present for the trial

INT. COURTROOM WIDE - DAY
@cut to zone 1

@JUDGE stands back far left AND JUDGE faces right
@BECKYS LAWYER spot 0.840 151 206 AND BECKYS LAWYER faces right
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@pan to zone 2
@JURY 1 spot 0.696 82 210
@JURY 2 spot 0.678 141 217
@JURY 3 spot 0.705 295 206
@JURY 4 spot 0.678 210 215
@pan to zone 3
@DR GENIS spot 0.732 92 229

@UNCLE HECTOR spot 0.813 226 167 AND UNCLE HECTOR faces left
@UNCLE HECTOR faces left AND UNCLE HECTOR is arms_crossed
@UNCLE HECTORS LAWYER spot 0.840 294 164 AND UNCLE HECTORS LAWYER faces left
@pan to zone 1

    JUDGE (talk_neutral)
You say you have evidence against Mr Wallace?





    BECKYS LAWYER (talk_neutral)
Yes your honor



    BECKYS LAWYER (talk_gesture)
I call Doctor Genis to the stand

@BECKYS LAWYER walks to spot 0.750 275 286 AND BECKYS LAWYER is walk_neutral

@pan to zone 3
@DR GENIS exits left AND DR GENIS is walk_neutral
@pan to zone 1
@DR GENIS enters from right to back right AND DR GENIS is walk_neutral

    JUDGE (talk_contend)
Do you solemly swear to tell the truth, the whole truth and nothing but the truth?

@JUDGE faces right AND JUDGE is idle

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
I do

    JUDGE
You may proceed

@DR GENIS faces right

    BECKYS LAWYER (talk_neutral)
Dr Genis, when you sent me those horric pics of Becky, all injured and starved

    BECKYS LAWYER
You also sent me these DNA samples, showing that Hector beat and raped Becky

    BECKYS LAWYER (talk_gesture)
Am I correct that the reason you dont take a bath or shower if you are raped is


    BECKYS LAWYER
Because it could make the dna samples unclear



    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
Yes

    JUDGE (think_loop)
Did Becky get a bath before you took the sample?

    DR GENIS
No your honor. She was in critical condition when Anita came running in with her


    DR GENIS
There was no time

    DR GENIS
I got the sample while she was still knocked out from the anestesia





    BECKYS LAWYER
Thank you Dr Genis, please be seated

@DR GENIS exits right

    JUDGE (talk_neutral)
Now before we get the verdict from the Jury, I want us to hear Becky's view

    JUDGE
Dr Genis. Please go ask Becky if she will come into the court room. Anita can come too

    JUDGE
If she is not comftorable with that she can stay in her room and I will come to her

@pan to zone 2
@JURY 1 spot 0.696 82 210
@JURY 2 spot 0.678 141 217
@JURY 3 spot 0.705 295 206
@JURY 4 spot 0.678 210 215
@pan to zone 3
@DR GENIS spot 0.732 92 229

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
Yes your honor.

@DR GENIS exits right

INT. STUDY ROOM NO TABLE - DAY
@cut to zone 2

@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 253 236 AND ANITA GANDRE is idle
@DR GENIS enters from left to spot 0.894 69 213

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
How is she?

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
At the moment she is doing ok. She had a melt down a few hours ago

    ANITA GANDRE
But she calmed down when I sang to her

    DR GENIS (talk_gesture)
Well I'm not suprsied. You have such a beautiful voice.

    DR GENIS
In fact, Im touched you took this much time and effort to do this

    ANITA GANDRE
Well I couldn't just leave her.

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_sad)
She is a child who is scared and hurt

    ANITA GANDRE
Um, if her Uncle wins the case will Becky have to go back to him?


    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
Don't worry it has been decided that no matter what, she won't go to him

    DR GENIS
This trial is to decide if he goes to prison

    DR GENIS
And so far the evidence is against him

    DR GENIS
Do you still want to adopt Becky?

    ANITA GANDRE (nod_loop)
Absolutley.

@ANITA GANDRE faces left AND ANITA GANDRE is idle

    DR GENIS
I have a friend who works as a social worker. I will give her a call.



    ANITA GANDRE (talk_happy_smile)
Thank you

@DR GENIS faces right AND DR GENIS is talk_phone_neutral_loop
@pause for a beat

    DR GENIS
Uh Hu

    DR GENIS
Ok. I'll tell her. Thank you

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
She says she can do it today but only if it is the next 15 min.

    DR GENIS
She needs to see some records, DNA stuff, and your house


    DR GENIS (idle_sad)
Im afraid we will be here for at least another hour


    ANITA GANDRE (think)
Did she say how long it would take?


    DR GENIS
About 5 hours


    ANITA GANDRE (talk_suggest)
How bout I alert my mom she is coming and ask her to let her in. Then when


    ANITA GANDRE
I get home, I mean becky and I get home, we can either talk in person or video chat

    DR GENIS (text_phone_neutral_loop)
Good idea. Let me ask her

@pause for a beat
@ANITA GANDRE is idle

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
She said yes. I am sure you will make a fine mom to Becky

    DR GENIS (talk_gesture)
Actually the judge sent me in here to ask Becky if she will come talk to us in the court room

    DR GENIS
You can come too. If she isn't ok with that the judge will come to her

@ANITA GANDRE faces right

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
She's over there fidgeting with a stress ball. I'll go ask her. And lets tell her


    ANITA GANDRE
About the adoption after we are positive my house and records passes inspection


    DR GENIS (talk_gesture)
That is wise.

@BECKY changes into BECKY_Hidden wounds
@pan to zone 3
@BECKY spot 0.345 173 407 AND BECKY is tinker_kneel_loop

@ANITA GANDRE enters from left to spot 0.840 60 263

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
Hey Becky

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is idle_kneel

    ANITA GANDRE
Dr Genis told me that the judge would like to speak with you

@ANITA GANDRE faces right AND ANITA GANDRE is idle

    BECKY (idle_terrified)
In front of big group?



    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
If you are not ok with that, he can come in here




    BECKY
Men scary. They hurt me


    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
He is a nice man. I promise. However I bet

    ANITA GANDRE
He will understand what you mean. And I will be with you the whole time


    BECKY (idle_sad)
I will

choice “Go to the court room”{

@transition fade out black
INT. COURTROOM WIDE - DAY
@JUDGE stands back far left AND JUDGE faces right
@BECKY enters from right to spot 0.344 270 340 AND BECKY is walk_neutral
@pan to zone 3

@UNCLE HECTOR spot 0.813 226 167 AND UNCLE HECTOR faces left
@UNCLE HECTOR faces left AND UNCLE HECTOR is arms_crossed_angry
@pause for a beat
@pan to zone 1
@BECKY spot 0.344 270 340 AND BECKY is idle_terrified
@BECKY faces right AND BECKY is idle_terrified

@pan to zone 2
@JURY 1 spot 0.696 82 210
@JURY 2 spot 0.678 141 217
@JURY 3 spot 0.705 295 206
@JURY 4 spot 0.678 210 215
@pan to zone 3
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.732 92 229
@pan to zone 1
@JUDGE stands back far left AND JUDGE faces right
@BECKY spot 0.344 270 340 AND BECKY is idle_terrified
@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is cry_sob_loop

    JUDGE (talk_neutral)
Hello Becky. Could you please tell us about your Uncle.



    BECKY
Can't

@BECKY exits right AND BECKY is run_athletic

@pan to zone 3
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.732 92 229

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
I'll go see what's wrong

@ANITA GANDRE exits right AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

INT. STUDY ROOM NO TABLE - DAY

@cut to zone 2
@BECKY spot 0.309 284 374 AND BECKY is cry_sob_loop
@pause for a beat
@ANITA GANDRE enters from left to spot 0.759 176 293 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
Shhh, it's alright Becky

@ANITA GANDRE is idle

@BECKY faces left AND BECKY is cry_weep_loop

@JUDGE enters from left to spot 0.840 57 266

    BECKY
Can't too scary in room

    JUDGE (talk_reassure)
It's ok Becky. We wont force you to go back there.

    JUDGE (talk_neutral)
I do need your honest description about your Uncle. I promise no one will harm you

@BECKY faces right AND BECKY is cry_sob_loop

    ANITA GANDRE (idle_sad)
Im afraid she is too overwhelmed to talk.



    JUDGE
Would you write it down Becky?

    BECKY
I only know how to write letters A-G.

    ANITA GANDRE
Could you draw us some pictures?



    BECKY (cry_sniff_loop)
Ok



    NARRATOR
To be continued

} “Stay here” {

@ANITA GANDRE faces left AND ANITA GANDRE is talk_neutral

    ANITA GANDRE
She wants to stay here

@pan to zone 2

    DR GENIS (talk_neutral)
Alright in that case I will go get the judge

@transition fade out black
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat

INT. STUDY ROOM NO TABLE - DAY

@cut to zone 3
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 252 207 AND ANITA GANDRE faces left
@BECKY spot 0.345 173 407 AND BECKY is idle_sad
@JUDGE enters from left to spot 0.840 57 266

    JUDGE (talk_greet)
Hello Becky. Could you please tell me about your Uncle.

    NARRATOR
Just to be clear, what you are about to see is a flashback

INT. CLASSIC LIVING ROOM - DAY
@BECKY changes into BECKY_default

@UNCLE HECTOR spot 1.280 88 69 AND UNCLE HECTOR faces right

    UNCLE HECTOR (scream)
Becky! Get down here now you stupid piece of crud

@BECKY enters from right to spot 0.400 201 204 AND BECKY is run_athletic
@BECKY spot 0.400 201 204 AND BECKY is cry_weep_loop
UNCLE HECTOR (arms_crossed_angry)
Stop crying you stupid piece of crud. Its time to play the game
BECKY (cry_sob_loop)
Please Im begging you, please spare me it hurts.

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry_accuse)
Stop being a big drama queen. I want you undressed and

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry_accuse)
In my bed in five minutes. Do you understand?



    UNCLE HECTOR (scream)
Answer me!

@pause for a beat
@UNCLE HECTOR spot 1.280 88 69 AND UNCLE HECTOR is slap_face
@BECKY spot 0.400 201 204 AND BECKY is slap_face_receive

    BECKY (cry_sob_loop)
Ok

INT. STUDY ROOM NO TABLE - DAY
@BECKY changes into BECKY_Hidden wounds
@cut to zone 3
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 252 207 AND ANITA GANDRE faces left
@BECKY spot 0.345 173 407 AND BECKY is cry_sob_loop
@JUDGE spot 0.840 57 266 AND JUDGE is idle

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
Shh it's alright Becky

    ANITA GANDRE (idle_sad)
Im afraid she is too overwhelmed to talk.



    JUDGE
Would you write it down Becky?

    BECKY
I only know how to write letters A-G.

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
Could you draw us some pictures?



    BECKY (cry_sniff_loop)
Ok



    NARRATOR
To be continued

}


#7

episode 3

INT. BLACK - DAY
@ANITA GANDRE changes into ANITA GANDRE_default

    NARRATOR
Theres not really a good background for specific drawn pictures


    NARRATOR
So i will have to describe them
    NARRATOR
Becky drew pictures of her Uncle beating her with his fist

    NARRATOR
A whip

    NARRATOR
A bat



    NARRATOR
She also drew pics of him assaulting her in all manners

    NARRATOR
Pretty much everything he has done to her.

    NARRATOR
The pictures have been shown to the court and now the descision

    NARRATOR
Is about to be made

INT. COURTROOM WIDE - DAY
@cut to zone 1

@JUDGE stands back far left AND JUDGE faces right
@cut to zone 2
@JURY 1 spot 0.696 82 210
@JURY 2 spot 0.678 141 217
@JURY 3 spot 0.705 295 206
@JURY 4 spot 0.678 210 215
@pan to zone 3

@UNCLE HECTOR spot 0.813 226 167 AND UNCLE HECTOR faces left
@UNCLE HECTOR faces left AND UNCLE HECTOR is arms_crossed
@UNCLE HECTORS LAWYER spot 0.840 294 164 AND UNCLE HECTORS LAWYER faces left
@cut to zone 1

    JUDGE (talk_neutral)
Has the Jury reached a verdict?

@cut to zone 2

    JURY 1 (talk_neutral)
Yes your honor






    JURY 2 (talk_neutral)
We find the defendant






    JURY 3 (talk_neutral)
Hector Wallace, guilty


    JURY 4 (talk_neutral)
Of the crimes of child abuse and neglect

@pan to zone 1

    JUDGE (arms_crossed)
Thank you Jury


    JUDGE (talk_contend)
Hector Wallace, I sentence you to 25 years in prison! Case closed



    NARRATOR
So now Hector is going to jail, and Dr Genis has declared that Becky is

    NARRATOR
Well enough to leave the hospital

    NARRATOR
However she will need therapy and special medicine for anxiety

    NARRATOR
But we will get to that later.

    NARRATOR
Right now, Anita has to pass the social workers requirments in order


    NARRATOR
To become Becky's new mom.

INT. FANCY LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
@BECKY changes into BECKY_default
@cut to zone 2
@SOCIAL WORKER stands back far right AND SOCIAL WORKER is idle
@BECKY enters from left to spot 0.327 143 223 AND BECKY is walk_neutral
@ANITA GANDRE enters from left to spot 0.840 73 164 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
Thank you so much for doing this on such short notice


    SOCIAL WORKER (talk_gesture)
Happy to do it. I am also happy to tell you that your house is child friendly

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_excited)
Yay. Thank you

    SOCIAL WORKER (talk_neutral)
I do need to ask some questions, and I prefer to do it alone.


    SOCIAL WORKER
It will only take a few minutes

@BECKY is dismayed
@BECKY is idle_terrified
@BECKY is cry_sob_loop

    BECKY (cry_sob_loop)
Uncle hector stop stop please stop!!!!!!

@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 11 182 AND ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop

    ANITA GANDRE
It's alright Becky it's ok.

    SOCIAL WORKER (talk_worried_kneel)
What's Wrong?

@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel

    ANITA GANDRE
She often has flashbacks. It's like she is being

    ANITA GANDRE
Teleported back to her uncle without warning

@BECKY is cry_sniff_loop

    ANITA GANDRE
It looks like the flash back is over

    ANITA GANDRE
Dr Genis said it should get better over time, and eventually go away

@BECKY is idle_exhausted

    ANITA GANDRE
Im gonna take her upstairs and put her to bed. I'll be right back

@transition fade out

INT. PROTAG ROYAL BEDROOM - NIGHT
@BECKY changes into Becky_cupcakepjs
@cut to zone 3
@BECKY spot 0.219 -38 418 AND BECKY is lay_awake_loop
@pan to zone 2
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 231 156 AND ANITA GANDRE is sit
@ANITA GANDRE faces right

    ANITA GANDRE
*Singing* Sun goes down and we are here together

    ANITA GANDRE
Fireflies glow like a thousand charms

    ANITA GANDRE
Stay with me and you can dream forever

    ANITA GANDRE
Right here in my arms, tonight

@pan to zone 3
@BECKY spot 0.219 -38 418 AND BECKY is lay_awake_loop
@transition fade out black
@transition fade in
INT. PROTAG ROYAL BEDROOM - DAY
NARRATOR
The next morning
@BECKY changes into Becky_cupcakepjs
@ANITA GANDRE changes into ANITAGANDREpjs
@cut to zone 3
@BECKY spot 0.219 -38 418 AND BECKY is lay_awake_loop
@ANITA GANDRE enters from left to spot 0.840 141 165 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral
@ANITA GANDRE faces left

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
Good morning Becky

@BECKY spot 0.210 31 395 AND BECKY is stand_up
@BECKY faces right

    BECKY (talk_neutral)
Good Morning Anita.


    ANITA GANDRE
How are you feeling?


    BECKY (talk_gesture)
Much better thank you

    BECKY (talk_unsure)
Anita, thank you for saving me. I want to repay you. Please name something

    BECKY (talk_gesture)
If you want me to, I will take your next album to antartica for penguins to hear

    BECKY
On foot if necessacary

    ANITA GANDRE (laugh_giggle)
Oh Becky, I don't want you to do that. Thanks for offering

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_suggest)
But there is something I want for you to do




    BECKY (talk_happy_agree)
Just name it

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
Start calling me mommy

@BECKY is talk_excited

    BECKY
Oh my gosh! You really want to be my mommy?

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
I've wanted it ever since I met you

    BECKY (talk_happy_smile)
You are an angel. I love you Ani, I mean Mommy

@ANITA GANDRE walks to spot 0.840 16 160 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral
@ANITA GANDRE is hug_rear
@BECKY spot 0.210 19 487 AND BECKY is hug
@cut to zone 1

@JOANNA enters from left to spot 0.840 127 156 AND JOANNA is walk_neutral

    JOANNA (talk_neutral)
Im guessing you told her our suprise

@cut to zone 3
@BECKY spot 0.210 31 395 AND BECKY is idle_happy
@BECKY faces right
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 134 149 AND ANITA GANDRE faces left

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
Yep

@cut to zone 1

    JOANNA (talk_gesture)
Welcome to the family Becky. Hey, how bout you go try on some of your new clothes

@cut to zone 3
@BECKY spot 0.210 31 395 AND BECKY is idle_happy
@BECKY faces right
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 134 149 AND ANITA GANDRE faces left

    BECKY (talk_gossip)
Oh my gosh, clothes! Thank you so much

    ANITA GANDRE (laugh_giggle)
How bout you go put something on, and then come down for breakfast

INT. WALKINCLOSET - DAY
@BECKY enters from left to spot 0.291 145 215

    BECKY (admire)
All these look amazing and comftorable. Ive narrowed it to two outfits

label choosing_outfit

    BECKY
(I'll try)

choice “Outfit 1” {
@BECKY exits right
@BECKY changes into Becky_outfit1
@BECKY enters from right to spot 0.300 123 212

} “Outfit 2” {
@BECKY exits right
@BECKY changes into Becky_outfit2
@BECKY enters from right to spot 0.291 143 212

}

    BECKY
(I think I will)

choice
“Wear this” {

    BECKY
( I think this is cute. Im not sure cause ive only had one outfit till now)

} “Try the other outfit” {

goto choosing_outfit

}

    BECKY
( I think this is cute. Im not sure cause ive only had one outfit till now)

@BECKY exits left

INT. GRAND DINING TABLE4 - DAY
@ANITA GANDRE changes into ANITA GANDRE _outfit 1
@JOANNA changes into JOANNA _outfit 1
@cut to zone 1
@JOANNA spot 0.840 246 90 AND JOANNA is sit
@JOANNA faces right
@pan to zone 2
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 76 84 AND ANITA GANDRE is sit
@ANITA GANDRE faces right
@BECKY enters from right to spot 0.498 198 241 AND BECKY is walk_neutral
@BECKY is sit

    ANITA GANDRE (admire)
Oh Becky you look so cute!


    BECKY
Thank you for the outfits. These pancakes look delicious Mrs Gandre

@cut to zone 1

    JOANNA (talk_sit)
Why thank you. And please, call me Nona

@cut to zone 2

    BECKY (talk_sit)
Ok Nona

@cut to zone 1

    JOANNA
She is just the cutest thing

@cut to zone 2

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_sit)
Becky, Would you like me to braid your hair?

    BECKY (admire)
Oh yes please.

#8

and finally episode 4 (thx for offering to look at my script)

INT. BLACK - DAY

    NARRATOR
Hi everyone. Before I start chapter 4 Id like to say thx agan

    NARRATOR
For looking at my story.



    NARRATOR
I also wanna inform y'all that this episode is my first time changing hair

    NARRATOR
And using gains. I apologize in advace if there are some glitches

    NARRATOR
Thanks again for reading. Please leave comments. Alrigt here go. Oh and a few sounds are in too

INT. WALKINCLOSET - DAY
@ANITA GANDRE changes into ANITA GANDRE _outfit 1
@cut to zone 1

@JOANNA enters from left to spot 0.840 118 131 AND JOANNA is walk_neutral

    JOANNA (admire)
Oh my gosh that is adorable

@pan to zone 2

if (chose_outfit1) {

@BECKY2 spot 0.309 252 292 AND BECKY2 faces right
@BECKY2 is sit
@ANITA GANDRE stands back left AND ANITA GANDRE faces right
@ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop
@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.759 97 182
ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
All done.

@BECKY2 spot 0.309 205 242
BECKY2 (admire)
Thank you Ani, I mean mommy.

    BECKY2 (deepbreath)
I never thought I would actually get to feel cute or pretty


    BECKY2
Im used to being called ugly

@BECKY2 is cry_sniff_loop

    BECKY2
Im sorry


    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
No need to apologize Becky.



    ANITA GANDRE (arms_crossed)
And you are not ugly. You never were. You are adorable and beautiful

@ANITA GANDRE is idle

    BECKY2
Thanks mommy. I love you

@BECKY2 walks to spot 0.309 125 237 AND BECKY is walk_neutral
@BECKY2 faces left AND BECKY2 is hug
@BECKY2 faces left AND BECKY2 is idle
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.759 13 171 AND ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel

    ANITA GANDRE
I love you too my little angel.

    BECKY2 (talk_neutral)
You are my angel mommy

sound doorbell

    ANITA GANDRE
(I wonder who that could be)

INT. DELTA HOUSE - DAY

@JAC WILLIN spot 0.840 57 198 AND JAC WILLIN faces right

    NARRATOR
Jac Willin is my alias for mac miller

@ANITA GANDRE enters from right to spot 0.840 216 207 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
Hi Jac, good to see you. I was actually about to call you to tell you some news

    JAC WILLIN (talk_gesture)
I know you adopted a little girl. Your mom told me. That's wonderful. In fact I have a present for her

    ANITA GANDRE (admire)
Aww that's so sweet. Here follow me. I just finished braiding her hair

@ANITA GANDRE exits right AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral
@JAC WILLIN exits right AND JAC WILLIN is walk_neutral

INT. WALKINCLOSET - DAY
@cut to zone 2

@BECKY2 spot 0.309 252 292 AND BECKY2 faces right
@BECKY2 is sit

@JAC WILLIN enters from left to spot 0.840 186 152 AND JAC WILLIN is walk_neutral

    JAC WILLIN (talk_greet)
Hi Becky!

@transition fade out black

INT. WALKINCLOSET - DAY
@cut to zone 2

@BECKY2 spot 0.309 252 292 AND BECKY2 faces right
@BECKY2 is sit

@UNCLE HECTOR spot 0.840 165 158 AND UNCLE HECTOR faces right
@BECKY2 spot 0.309 253 229 AND BECKY2 faces left
@BECKY2 is idle_terrified

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry)
You Rotten Girl! You don't deserve anita. Im taking you home with me

    UNCLE HECTOR
And we are gonna play the game

@BECKY2 is cry_sob_loop

    UNCLE HECTOR (scream)
Shut up!

@ANITA GANDRE enters from left to spot 0.840 49 152 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

@UNCLE HECTOR faces left AND UNCLE HECTOR is punch_jab
@ANITA GANDRE is faint
@BECKY2 is dismayed
@BECKY2 is cry_sob_loop
@BECKY2 faces right AND BECKY2 is cry_sob_loop

@transition fade out
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@transition fade in

INT. WALKINCLOSET - DAY
@cut to zone 2
@BECKY2 spot 0.255 187 223 AND BECKY2 is cry_sob_loop
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 303 158 AND ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop
@JAC WILLIN spot 0.840 47 161 AND JAC WILLIN is idle_sad

    ANITA GANDRE
Becky it's ok. Everything is alright

    JAC WILLIN
I feel awful I didn't mean to upset her. I am so sorry

@JAC WILLIN faces right AND JAC WILLIN is idle_kneel

@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel

    ANITA GANDRE
It's not your fault. You see, prior to joining us, she was abused by

    ANITA GANDRE
Her uncle for 2 years

    ANITA GANDRE
She has only been away from him a few days. She is still used to abuse

    ANITA GANDRE
And sometimes she has episodes where she invisions being with her uncle

    ANITA GANDRE
Like she is being transferred to him or him to her randomly

    JAC WILLIN
Will she be ok?

    ANITA GANDRE
Of course. And the doctor said these episodes should get less and less as time goes on

    BECKY2
Please dont die ANi, Mommy! I need you. This is all my fault

@ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop

    ANITA GANDRE
Shh, Becky I am right here, it's ok

@BECKY2 faces right AND BECKY2 is cry_sniff_loop

    BECKY2 (cry_weep_loop)
Mommy?

    ANITA GANDRE
Right here baby. It's ok

@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel

    BECKY2
I thought my uncle killed you. I saw it.

    ANITA GANDRE
Shh, it was just a vision. It wasn't real

@BECKY2 is deepbreath

    ANITA GANDRE
Feel a little better?

    BECKY2
Uh-huh

@BECKY2 faces right AND BECKY2 is cry_sniff_loop
@BECKY2 spot 0.255 182 333 AND BECKY2 is sit
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 235 122 AND ANITA GANDRE is sit

@JAC WILLIN is idle

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
Becky, this is my boyfriend Jac. He is a rapper and very friendly.

@BECKY2 faces left

    BECKY2
Nice to meet you. Sorry about what I did

    JAC WILLIN (talk_reassure)
No need to apologize Becky. I understand.


    JAC WILLIN (talk_gesture)
I have something for you

@JAC WILLIN is give_gift
@JAC WILLIN is idle_happy
@BECKY2 is admire_hold_gift

    BECKY2
Thank you

@BECKY2 is tinker_kneel_loop
@BECKY2 is admire

    BECKY2
It's a teddy bear! Thank you Jac

    JAC WILLIN
Im glad you like him

    BECKY2
I love him.

}

if (chose outfit2) {
@BECKY3 spot 0.309 252 292 AND BECKY3 faces right
@BECKY3 is sit
@ANITA GANDRE stands back left AND ANITA GANDRE faces right
@ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop
@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.759 97 182
ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
All done.

@BECKY3 spot 0.309 205 242
BECKY3 (admire)
Thank you Ani, I mean mommy.

    BECKY3 (deepbreath)
I never thought I would actually get to feel cute or pretty


    BECKY3
Im used to being called ugly

@BECKY3 is cry_sniff_loop

    BECKY3
Im sorry


    ANITA GANDRE (talk_reassure)
No need to apologize Becky.



    ANITA GANDRE (arms_crossed)
And you are not ugly. You never were. You are adorable and beautiful

@ANITA GANDRE is idle

    BECKY3
Thanks mommy

@BECKY3 walks to spot 0.309 125 237 AND BECKY is walk_neutral
@BECKY3 faces left AND BECKY2 is hug
@BECKY3 faces left AND BECKY2 is idle
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.759 13 171 AND ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel

    ANITA GANDRE
I love you too my little angel.

    BECKY3 (talk_neutral)
You are my angel mommy

sound door_knock

    ANITA GANDRE
(I wonder who that could be)

INT. DELTA HOUSE - DAY

@JAC WILLIN spot 0.840 57 198 AND JAC WILLIN faces right

    NARRATOR
Jac Willin is my alias for mac miller

@ANITA GANDRE enters from right to spot 0.840 179 195 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_neutral)
Hi Jac, good to see you. I was actually about to call you to tell you some news

    JAC WILLIN (talk_gesture)
I know you adopted a little girl. Your mom told me. That's wonderful. In fact I have a present for her

    ANITA GANDRE (admire)
Aww that's so sweet. Here follow me. I just finished braiding her hair

@ANITA GANDRE exits right AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral
@JAC WILLIN exits right AND JAC WILLIN is walk_neutral

INT. WALKINCLOSET - DAY
@cut to zone 2

@BECKY3 spot 0.309 252 292 AND BECKY2 faces right
@BECKY3 is sit

@UNCLE HECTOR spot 0.840 165 158 AND UNCLE HECTOR faces right
@BECKY3 spot 0.309 253 229 AND BECKY2 faces left
@BECKY3 is idle_terrified

    UNCLE HECTOR (talk_angry)
You Rotten Girl! You don't deserve anita. Im taking you home with me

    UNCLE HECTOR
And we are gonna play the game

@BECKY3 is cry_sob_loop

    UNCLE HECTOR (scream)
Shut up!

@ANITA GANDRE enters from left to spot 0.840 49 152 AND ANITA GANDRE is walk_neutral

@UNCLE HECTOR faces left AND UNCLE HECTOR is punch_jab
@ANITA GANDRE is faint
@BECKY3 is dismayed
@BECKY3 is cry_sob_loop
@BECKY3 faces right AND BECKY2 is cry_sob_loop

@transition fade out
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat
@transition fade in

INT. WALKINCLOSET - DAY
@cut to zone 2
@BECKY3 spot 0.255 187 223 AND BECKY3 is cry_sob_loop
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 303 158 AND ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop
@JAC WILLIN spot 0.840 47 161 AND JAC WILLIN is idle_sad

    ANITA GANDRE
Becky it's ok. Everything is alright

    JAC WILLIN
I feel awful I didn't mean to upset her. I am so sorry

@JAC WILLIN faces right AND JAC WILLIN is idle_kneel

@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel

    ANITA GANDRE
It's not your fault. You see, prior to joining us, she was abused by

    ANITA GANDRE
Her uncle for 2 years

    ANITA GANDRE
She has only been away from him a few days. She is still used to abuse

    ANITA GANDRE
And sometimes she has episodes where she invisions being with her uncle

    ANITA GANDRE
Like she is being transferred to him or him to her randomly

    JAC WILLIN
Will she be ok?

    ANITA GANDRE
Of course. And the doctor said these episodes should get less and less as time goes on

    BECKY3
Please dont die ANi, Mommy! I need you. This is all my fault

@ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop

    ANITA GANDRE
Shh, Becky I am right here, it's ok

@BECKY3 faces right AND BECKY3 is cry_sniff_loop

    BECKY3 (cry_weep_loop)
Mommy?

    ANITA GANDRE
Right here baby. It's ok

@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel

    BECKY3
I thought my uncle killed you. I saw it.

    ANITA GANDRE
Shh, it was just a vision. It wasn't real

@BECKY3 is deepbreath

    ANITA GANDRE
Feel a little better?

    BECKY3
Uh-huh

@BECKY3 faces right AND BECKY2 is cry_sniff_loop
@BECKY3 spot 0.255 182 333 AND BECKY3 is sit
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.840 235 122 AND ANITA GANDRE is sit

@JAC WILLIN is idle

    ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
Becky, this is my boyfriend Jac. He is a rapper and very friendly.

@BECKY3 faces left

    BECKY3
Nice to meet you. Sorry about what I did

    JAC WILLIN (talk_reassure)
No need to apologize Becky. I understand.


    JAC WILLIN (talk_gesture)
I have something for you

@JAC WILLIN is give_gift
@JAC WILLIN is idle_happy
@BECKY2 is admire_hold_gift

    BECKY3
Thank you

@BECKY3 is tinker_kneel_loop
@BECKY3 is admire

    BECKY3
It's a teddy bear! Thank you Jac

    JAC WILLIN
Im glad you like him

    BECKY3
I love him.

}

    NARRATOR
Tbc

#9

WOAH WOAH WOAH! Please don’t post your WHOLE script for all 3 episodes!! Just post the part of your script with the gains and the if/elif/else code you used.


#10

Yea, just show copy and past we’re you have your choices


#11

ok and ill see if i can delete my previous replies with entire episodes. sorry bout that


#12

ok Im pretty sure it has to be episode 3 or 4 causing the issue so ill just show those episode choices (including diolauge and gains with them) if they seem fine then ill show the first 2 episode choices

episode 3 choices

label choosing_outfit

    BECKY
(I'll try)

choice “Outfit 1” {
@BECKY exits right
@BECKY changes into Becky_outfit1
@BECKY enters from right to spot 0.300 123 212

} “Outfit 2” {
@BECKY exits right
@BECKY changes into Becky_outfit2
@BECKY enters from right to spot 0.291 143 212

}

    BECKY
(I think I will)

choice
“Wear this” {

    BECKY
( I think this is cute. Im not sure cause ive only had one outfit till now)

} “Try the other outfit” {

goto choosing_outfit

}

    BECKY
( I think this is cute. Im not sure cause ive only had one outfit till now)

(i didn’t put gain cause i read somewhere that outfit choices are automatically saved for the reader)

episode 4
if (chose_outfit1) {

@BECKY2 spot 0.309 252 292 AND BECKY2 faces right
@BECKY2 is sit
@ANITA GANDRE stands back left AND ANITA GANDRE faces right
@ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop
@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.759 97 182
ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
All done.

@BECKY2 spot 0.309 205 242
BECKY2 (admire)
Thank you Ani, I mean mommy.
(skipping rest of diolauge)

if (chose outfit2) {
@BECKY3 spot 0.309 252 292 AND BECKY3 faces right
@BECKY3 is sit
@ANITA GANDRE stands back left AND ANITA GANDRE faces right
@ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop
@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.759 97 182
ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
All done.

@BECKY3 spot 0.309 205 242
BECKY3 (admire)
Thank you Ani, I mean mommy.
( skipping rest of diolauge which is pretty much the same as before)


#13

Part 1

episode 3 choices

label choosing_outfit

BECKY

(I’ll try)
choice (outfit_choice1)
“Outfit 1” {
@BECKY exits right
@BECKY changes into Becky_outfit1
@BECKY enters from right to spot 0.300 123 212

} “Outfit 2” {
@BECKY exits right
@BECKY changes into Becky_outfit2
@BECKY enters from right to spot 0.291 143 212

}

BECKY

(I think I will)

choice
“Wear this” {

BECKY

( I think this is cute.)

goto label continue

} “Try the other outfit” {

goto choosing_outfit
}

label continue


#14

This is only if you don’t have a character change into anything else after that dressing game. Characters stay in outfits until you change them into a different outfit. You will need to use gains if you want to remember this outfit.

You’re using if (chose_outfit1) { but you didn’t add in this gain, chose_outfit1, or the other 2 gains to the dressup choices.

Now to remember the choice, you will have to use the if/elif/else method. You’re using if for all three options, in which case you’re suppose to only use if the first time, elif for the middle, and else as the last one (more on this in the guide below). This guide will help you:


#15

Part 2

episode 4

if (outfit_choice1 is “Outfit1”) {

@BECKY2 spot 0.309 252 292 AND BECKY2 faces right
@BECKY2 is sit
@ANITA GANDRE stands back left AND ANITA GANDRE faces right
@ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop
@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.759 97 182
ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)
All done.

@BECKY2 spot 0.309 205 242
BECKY2 (admire)
Thank you Ani, I mean mommy.
(skipping rest of diolauge)

} else {
@BECKY3 spot 0.309 252 292 AND BECKY3 faces right
@BECKY3 is sit
@ANITA GANDRE stands back left AND ANITA GANDRE faces right
@ANITA GANDRE is tinker_kneel_loop
@ANITA GANDRE is idle_kneel
@ANITA GANDRE spot 0.759 97 182
ANITA GANDRE (talk_gesture)

All done.

@BECKY3 spot 0.309 205 242
BECKY3 (admire)
Thank you Ani, I mean mommy.

}


#16

Although… tbh, the whole code is off. Instead of making a new character for each outfit, just have the character change outfits:

@CHAR changes into Outfit_Name


#17

ok. though the reason i had a new character was so that becky could go from shaggy hair to two pigtail braids. it was for the purpose of hair change. is there an easier way to do it?


#18

@CHAR changes hair into Hair Name


#19

If you’re letting readers customize that character, then what you’re doing with switching characters is perfectly fine. If you’re not letting readers customize that character, then you can use the code that Rude posted.


#20

ok since im beginner im probably not doing customizations, just choices.