Help Needed On Making Story Seem More Interesting

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#1

Hello all! I need help making my story seem more interesting, first up is the cover! Does this cover catch your eye?

  • Heck, yes!
  • Not Really
  • Kinda

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Secondly, Is this a good description:
What will happen after 16-year-old Emma gives birth to newborn twins Isabella and Hope, will she find True Love and happiness??

  • Heck, yes!!
  • Ew, no

0 voters

If you voted “No” to number 2, any suggestions?


#2

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#3

Emma, a sixteen year old, gives birth to two beautiful twins. What would be in store for her? Love? Lies? Drama? Read to find out.


#4

OMG!! That sounds awesome!


#5

The trees create more emphasis then the characters…if you want it like that, leave it, if you want the characters to create emphasis I would try to add intensity to the characters or low the background intensity (not much tho)


#6

Oh boy… Now this is my personal opinion and my preferences.
U can rephrase it any way u want, but I wouldn’t be interested in a story that revolves around pregnancy, even more teenage one.
Wondering bout MC’s wrong life decisions… Yeah. But not reading, sorry :confused:


#7

Like I tell MANY people it’s my FIRST story!

(Sorry If I seem rude, I just get all the little self-cofedince I have, from this story, and how far it’s come)


#8

Hey it’s fine.
U asked a question, I answered from my perspective.
A lot of people enjoy reading these kinds of stories. I just happened to not be one of them.


#9

Anyone who’s an art scene artist please check out this thread


#10

How about giving more of the plot away? Yes, its a teen mum story that leaves a teenager in a dilemma, but I would suggest adding more of the other issues she faces. Does she have an enemy? How does everyone treat her now she’s a young mother? Emphasise on what other troubles she faces instead of a vague description that doesn’t really pull a reader in (sorry if that sounds a bit rude :sweat_smile:).


#11

What would you suggest for a description then?


#12

Well, what’s the main conflict of the story (not including the fact she has 2 kids)?


#13

Being a teen mom and an actress.


#14

How about “16 and her priorities on the line, new mother, Emma, has to deal with a dilemma - the fame and pressure of the acting world, or a full devotion to her children - but could her true love add to her struggle or help her find happiness?”


#15

That description is too long for Episode’s format, could you shorten it a bit?


#16

“Priorities on the line, young, new mother, Emma, deals with a dilemma - the pressure of acting or devotion to her children - but does her true love add to it or help her?”


#17

Perfect!


#18

Glad to help!


#19

On a scale of 1-10, how much does the cover catch your eye?


#20

8, All it needs is more emphasis on the text and the characters,