Help with description! please

Hey y’all , So I was thinking of changing my story description to make it fit the plot more but tbh i dont really like the new one i made can anyone help?

After being expelled from her previous school Serena decides to move back to her old town. But soon enough she finds out someone didn’t want her to come back.

I think it’s good, I’ve just refined it a little bit (:

After getting expelled, Serena decides to move back to her hometown, only to find that a certain someone doesn’t want her back.

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Thank you so much. this sounds so much better!

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