Help with description

Hi guys,

Please could you look at my below description for my story? I like it but i don’t feel like it flows very well, is anyone able to advise on any changes that could be made? Any feedback would ne greatly appreciated

Thank you

What’s the story about? Just like a more in depth summary so I can help? I like it but I think a couple small changes might make it flow better. Perhaps saying When you get the league book instead?

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