Help with directing

In my story I want the reader to see the girls face first on the background carpet, and then on a different background (ceiling) I want it to show the guys face smiling. So, basically it goes back and forth on the girls face and then back to the guys face. (Staring contest). I did this but when i play it on the app it looks weird because it has the girl and after like 3 seconds the guy comes up and it looks “sloppy”.

Script

INT. CEILING
@zoom on 130 343 to 185% in 0
@YOU spot 1.685 195 -331
@BOI spot 1.532 123 -204
@YOU moves to layer 3
@BOI faces right
@YOU faces right
@YOU is rear
@BOI is idle_happy_loop
@BOI faces right
@YOU faces right
@pause for a beat
INT. CARPET
@BOI moves to layer 1
@YOU moves to layer 0
@zoom on 133 368 to 341% in 0
@BOI is rear
@YOU spot 0.947 159 137
@BOI spot 0.929 111 112
@BOI moves to layer 2
@YOU is idle_armscrossed_angry_loop
@pause for a beat
INT. CEILING
@zoom on 130 343 to 185% in 0
@YOU spot 1.685 195 -331
@BOI spot 1.532 123 -204
@YOU moves to layer 3
@BOI faces right
@YOU faces right
@YOU is rear
@BOI is idle_happy_loop
@BOI faces right
@YOU faces right
@pause for a beat
INT. CARPET
@BOI moves to layer 1
@YOU moves to layer 0
@zoom on 133 368 to 341% in 0
@YOU spot 0.947 159 137
@BOI spot 0.929 111 112
@BOI is rear
@BOI moves to layer 2
@YOU is idle_argument_angry_loop
@BOI is rear
@pause for a beat
@pause for a beat

You have every command in separate line starting with @. I’m not so smart to know everything by head (I admit that), but looking at this I have a feeling like every next line starts after a beat.

So I’d say you started first scene almost ok.
INT. BACKGROUND
&zoom on X Y to Z in 0
Start the zoom with & instead of with @.

After that place characters, one line for each, starting with &.
&CHARACTER spot XXX AND CHARACTER faces XXX AND CHARACTER starts ANIMATION and CHARACTER moves to layer Y.

Start all 4 scenes like this.

The first zoom put on one character.

After pause put zoom on another character, but start the second zoom with @.

Hope it works for you :heart:

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Thank you so much :blush:

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