(Keep in mind I’m terrible with names so I’m probably just gonna say MC (main character) or MC’s best friend)
So far, the directing is smooth and flawless! Not only that but everything it timed perfectly! I also think that you use music in all the right places… just everything- flawless. I would recommend using more choices though, like ones that really matter to the plot.
I also love the main character and the backstory, aside for a few things.
- I don’t like how you use the trope of “I’m different from all the other girls” type with the main character. It’s cliche and probably not logical and a turn-off.
- I don’t like how she is so nervous around him when she first meets him, especially when she’s angry with him. It’s a personal preference for me, but I’d rather see her be angry with him and not at all attracted to him then slowly get to know him.
I don’t like these tropes because they are very cliche, but they will readers if that is what you’re going for. A lot of people like that kind of thing- so if that’s what you’re going for, good job, I’m not a fan of that - but that’s just my opinion, a lot of other people like it.
Beckett- I like how he sees his mistake but I don’t like love interests that make me angry. It’s fine if you’re going to make him like that, but once he goes to her house to make amends I say you should make him a little more nicer because he was the “bad guy” in that situation and you not only want the main character to forgive him but the readers.
The reason I don’t like “dark and brooding” type guys in these stories is that usually they “change” because of the MC or a girl, they never really changed for themselves. If you make this type of story I would reccommend giving Beckett a backstory to explain why he is like this and have him change on his own, maybe MC helps him or makes him realize, but it’d make him seem like an actual person and not just a “dark and brooding” episode guy.
That’s all! Everything else was amazing.
What to get out of this: Hate Beckett, still hasn’t won me over and it’s the third episode (In my opinion the LI (love interest) should win you over before the MC starts dating them or has a thing for them or something)
Like the MC, slightly sterotypical, but I love her character from your backstory.
Like the bestfriend- I don’t know her that well all I really know about her is that she is a student (the student loan thing) and MC’s bestfriend.
Not my type of story but loved the directing!
I would reccomend this to anyone who likes office romances.