Here is my script but it is not exactly ho i want it to be


#1

For starters, the Erik character is just passing by. They start a fight but the only thing he can in the animations is dodge rear, why i don’t know, but that looks not real.

Secondly, I want to zoom in on the raper and that you see him with bruises on his face but I just can’t do it, can someone help me please:

this is the script;

EXT. BUS STOP EVENING - NIGHT
@cut to zone 2

@ANNEKE spot 1.052 91 139
@BACKGROUND8 spot 1.064 415 133
@BACKGROUND8 walks to spot 1.064 226 133

BACKGROUND8 (talk_excited)
Need a ride home, beautiful?

@ANNEKE faces right

ANNEKE (talk_angry_arms_crossed)
No thanks, I am waiting for the bus.

@ERIK enters from right to spot 1.280 315 8 THEN ERIK faces right and ERIK is idle_rear

BACKGROUND8 (talk_flex)
I would love to give you a ride and much, much more.

@BACKGROUND8 is laugh_giggle

ANNEKE (talk_angry_defensive)
Go away. I’m not in the mood for games.

BACKGROUND8 (talk_happy_hand_raised)
Oh but this is not a game, this is real.

@BACKGROUND8 walks to spot 1.064 146 125

BACKGROUND8 (talk_neutral_arms_crossed)
I’ll take you with me and we are going to my place to have a little fun.

@ERIK walks to spot 1.082 274 116 AND ERIK does it while walk_neutral THEN ERIK faces left AND ERIK is shiftweight

ANNEKE (talk_afraid)
Oh no no no no no!

ERIK (talk_doubtful)
Is there a problem here???

@ANNEKE is cry_sniff_loop

@BACKGROUND8 faces right

BACKGROUND8 (talk_angry)
Would you mind your own business, boy?

ERIK (talk_angry)
I wasn’t talking to you.

BACKGROUND8 (talk_angry_accuse)
Leave us alone and go somewhere else.

ERIK (talk_idle_punch)
Do you need my to make your face red?

BACKGROUND8 (talk_idle_punch)
From who? You, kiddo? Don’t make me laugh!

@ERIK is punch_jab AND BACKGROUND8 is punch_receive

@BACKGROUND8 is punch_jab AND ERIK is dodge_rear

@ERIK is punch_jab AND BACKGROUND8 is punch_receive

@ERIK is punch_jab AND BACKGROUND8 is punch_receive

@BACKGROUND8 is punch_jab AND ERIK is dodge_rear

@ERIK is punch_jab AND BACKGROUND8 is punch_receive

@BACKGROUND8 is fall

@BACKGROUND8 is idle_fallen

@pause for a beat

@pause for a beat

@transition fade out black 2

EXT. BUS STOP EVENING - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

&ANNEKE spot 1.280 96 -7 AND ANNEKE faces right
&ERIK spot 1.280 218 7 AND ERIK faces left

ANNEKE (talk_scared_flashlight)
He’s not dead is he.

ERIK (talk_neutral)
No but, he has some bruises, he’ll be fine.

ANNEKE (talk_awkward)
You sure.

ERIK (talk_neutral_forward)
Yes you don’t have to worry about him, he was going to rape you.

ANNEKE (talk_neutral)
I know.

ERIK (talk_neutral)
Come I’ll walk you to your home…

ANNEKE (talk_apathetic)
It is too far.

ERIK (talk_neutral_forward)
Ok then we’ll go with my car.

ANNEKE (talk_happy_agree)
Ok… and thanks.

thanks somebody xxx


#2

If you do this, it will look a little better. Erik will face the attacker while dogging his punches :wink: :

@ERIK is punch_jab AND BACKGROUND8 is punch_receive

@BACKGROUND8 is punch_jab AND ERIK is dodge_rear AND ERIK faces right

@ERIK is punch_jab AND BACKGROUND8 is punch_receive AND ERIK faces left

@ERIK is punch_jab AND BACKGROUND8 is punch_receive AND ERIK faces left

@BACKGROUND8 is punch_jab AND ERIK is dodge_rear AND ERIK faces right

@ERIK is punch_jab AND BACKGROUND8 is punch_receive AND ERIK faces left


#3

And for the zooming part, you will need to place BACKROUND8 somewhere, after the scene changes here:

EXT. BUS STOP EVENING - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

&ANNEKE spot 1.280 96 -7 AND ANNEKE faces right
&ERIK spot 1.280 218 7 AND ERIK faces left

Then you will be able to zoom on him :wink:


#4

The fallen part you did not do in it but for the rest it looks very much better thank you xxx


#5

that zooming is the thing i can’t do lol


#6

No problem :grin:
You can try to use the ‘‘faint’’ animation :wink:


#7

He is already fallen i left it as it was. But you not see his bruises lol


#8

I meant instead of the ‘‘fall’’ animation :wink:


#9

You can for example place him like this, so he will be on the ground in the next scene. Then you need to play a little bit with zooms :slightly_smiling_face: :

&BACKROUND8 spot 1.064 226 133 AND BACKROUND8 is idle_fallen AND BACKROUND8 faces right
&BACKROUND8 moves to layer -5


#10

I think that that is a little bit to difficult for me but thanks dough
But for the moment he is on the ground
But i leave it like that the first episodes are published so it is better to do not to much on it

Maybe you can help me with something else
Ho do you do text messaging in INK


#11

Check this out:

EXT. BUS STOP EVENING - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

&ANNEKE spot 1.280 96 -7 AND ANNEKE faces right
&ERIK spot 1.280 218 7 AND ERIK faces left
&BACKGROUND8 spot 1.064 226 133 AND BACKGROUND8 is idle_fallen AND BACKGROUND8 faces right
&BACKGROUND8 moves to layer -5

    ANNEKE (talk_scared_flashlight)
He's not dead is he.

&cut to zone 3 AND zoom on 750 0 to 242% in 0

    ERIK (talk_neutral)
No but, he has some bruises, he'll be fine.

    ANNEKE (talk_awkward)
You sure.

&cut to zone 2 AND zoom on 160 284 to 100% in 0

    ERIK (talk_neutral_forward)
Yes you don't have to worry about him, he was going to rape you.

    ANNEKE (talk_neutral)
I know.

    ERIK (talk_neutral)
Come I'll walk you to your home...

    ANNEKE (talk_apathetic)
It is too far.

    ERIK (talk_neutral_forward)
Ok then we'll go with my car.

    ANNEKE (talk_happy_agree)
Ok... and thanks.

#12

You could use a backround or some overlays with the messages that your characters are reading/writing.