And also how is my story overall like coding and zooms? would apprentice it
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You have a few grammatical errors
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You should say Tianna Petrov is from Russia
She’s the type of friend that’s got your back
Don’t tell me what the f*ck I need or Don’t tell me what I f*cking need
I thought you guys cared about me.
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I don’t know what the stories about but your zooms and intro seem good.
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Also if you’re adding swear is up to what audience you want to target. Not adding them gives you a wider audience.
But you can have replacement words such as “ screw you” or “ You’re such a jerk/ass”
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In which part and should i put f*ck ?
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what the zooms and directing is that good introduction?
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okay well i can give a description The mc samantha gets bullied because of disability and the kids at school make fun of it. But Nick the love interest also was previous bullied at school because he had cancer at 10 year olds he is trauma by that experiences and he couldn’t take it anymore so he had go to school home and his parents want him to go to school so he moved to New York and goes to Private School at there
But should i had more thriller and make it more adventure
Since it has a more serious theme I think using swear words would fit in with your theme.
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But is it too cliche i was going to had self harm and mental awareness because nobody seems to think that important
It’s not really cliche. There are a few stories about self harm but few make big compared to how many bad boy stories make it big.
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I know i can’t actually put the self harm but like in dialogue
what do you mean by how many bad boy stories?
Stories where there’s a bad boy and he’s a playboy, dangerously good looking and a jerk and the mc turns him good by falling in love with him and him falling for her.
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Or mafia bad boy and gangster
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Basically there aren’t a lot of stories where the Male lead is equally as average as our Mc.
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Should i change because i don’t want the Nick to be the like bad boy he’s like this way because he had a tragic past in his life
To be rude but a lot of the time the bad boy is a jerk because of happened to him in the past and the mc is the one who helps him. Hence the falling in love.
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oh yeah that’s true
Oh crap, Well the love interest is going though a life tragic event but MC doesn’t like him at first
i really hope this doesn’t sound like a bad boy stories
I was going to make the Nick the one who has cancer goes though depressed.
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DO NOT START WITH INTRODUCTION OF THE CHARACTERS!!!
99% of the episode readers hates it!
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