Honest Criticism for New Stories!


#1

Hey there! I’ve been writing for a while and needed a short break, so for a little bit (about a week or two until around the end of June) I will be doing reviews of new stories! I will correct grammar, plot, and script mistakes. If you have any suggestions for what I should look for, don’t hesitate to mention it! Here are my few requests for stories:

  • They cannot be longer than 4 episodes (I specified new)
  • They must be in mostly English (if other languages are briefly mentioned, its no big deal but I may translate them).
  • They must be written using computerized coding, and are not created on the episode app (stories made using only the app are very simple and use very limited detailing).

Please be aware that by criticizing your story, I am not trying to offend you or hurt your feelings personally. I am trying to be honest about your story and help you make it perfect! Everyone has great ideas, and I’m trying to help you present them!

Here is how you send your story to me:

  • In the episode writer portal, view your story.
  • Scroll down beneath where your episodes are listed, where it says: “Share your story and improve your rank!”
  • Copy that link and paste it in the comments of this post, or message it to me.
  • In addition, please state any requests for what you may want me to look for, such as character development, smooth transitions, overlays, etc.

Important Note:

All of my opinions and criticism will be private, and will only be sent to you (I will not respond to comments with results) I will message you my opinions after your story is read. I will also notify you when I begin to read your story, and give it an honest rating (I can only do so much with a certain amount of passes).

Thank you! :grin:
Emma E. L.


#2

Can I request some criticism on this story? It’s fairly new and recent.

Title: Video Game Champion
Author: Karlon Artis
Genre: Action
Style: Limelight
Description: You are a gamer hoping to win the video game championship. Can you defeat your rival after a 5-year losing streak?
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5634634595172352

What to look for: character and plot development.


#3

Thank you! I will begin reading it and will message you soon.


#4

Hi :blush: are you willing to give a feedback on a unpublished story?


#5

Hi!! @emmael Thanks for creating this thread…

Title: Fantastical: Virtues of Destiny
Author: S.Dsana
Genre: Fantasy
Style: INK
Description: "Evil is rising, truth is surpassing, but what will happen when they find out who they really are? Is this going to lead to love, hate, revenge or magical encounter.
Choices Matter.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6566802985713664
Instagram- @princesssana_sa
What to look for: directing, grammar

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Thanks again.


#6

Hi, @emmael!

Thank you very much for creating this thread, this is very kind of you! Constructive criticism is exactly what I am looking for!

If you are interested in reading a story with several mini-games and where CHOICES REALLY MATTER then, please, give my story a try. It has 4 different endings and it is really animated! All the backgrounds are custom and there is a special art scene as well. I promise, the plot will also keep you hooked :blush:

Here is the video trailer I made so that you can get a better idea what the story is about:

My story details:

Name of story: Fantastical: Black Shadow
Author: Alex Af
Genre: Fantasy
Episodes: 3 (I’d ask you to kindly review all the 3 episodes as this is a contest entry and I don’t want to mess up the reader engagement)
Summary of story: Having women on board is considered bad luck? Well, as the most wanted pirate captain, you’ll certainly bring the worst luck to anyone who dares cross your path. CC, choices matter
Link to story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6081182347689984
Instagram: @episode.alex.af


#7

Hey, @emmael! Thank you for creating this thread! I’d love a review for my story. (It’s a new one, by the way.) Here are my story details:

Title: Fantastical: Silhouettes
Author: aprilish
Genre: Fantasy/Romance
Style: Ink
Blurb: Arion’s ready to risk it all to make her dreams come true. Leslie sees him every day, yet fails to recognize who he is. Watch them fall in love…without ever meeting each other.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6116658762874880
Cover:


My Instagram: @aprilish.episode

Thank you so much! Looking forward to hearing your feedback! :two_hearts:


#8

Hi! I would very much appreciate if you could give my story a read and give me a review.

Title: Life without Jennifer
Author: Mia
Genre: drama
Style: Ink
Description: An accident has Jennifer torn from the world. Her loved ones are now left to learn how to live without her.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5397065844785152
Instagram: miawritesepisode

Pleas PM me the review here on the forums.
Thank you!


#9

Hi! I just revamped my story Puppy Love. It’s out with a better storyline and improved directing. I would like to hear your feedbacks and any suggestions will do. Here’s the details of my story.

Title: Puppy Love
Author: Lou
Style: Limelight
Genre: Romance w/ a touch of Fantasy (but i put it in the fantasy section)
Episodes: 4 ongoing
Link: https://www.episodeinteractive.com/s/i/5630801559027712
IG: @authorlou.episode

Description:
Jason caught himself in a CRAZY, complicated situation. Watch out on how he will handle his true feelings for Alli. Will he fall in love with his DOG??


#10

Hey there everyone! I’ll get to as many of you as I can, as soon as I can. After I notify you that I will read your story, it takes me about three to four hours to write your review. Hope this makes sense!


#11

Hey @Tessx !

I definitely can.
Depending on when you plan on publishing it, of course! I’ll notify you when I am open to read it, however I will focus on published stories until I don’t have enough passes to read another (so just look out for a message from me whenever I am available, either today or tomorrow)!

:slight_smile:


#12

Hi @S.Dsana !

I will begin reading your story in a few minutes. Expect a message from me in a few hours!


#13

Thank you…
I probably won’t respond right away as I’ll be asleep by then…:slightly_smiling_face::slightly_smiling_face:


#14

Me too!! I would love an honest critique.


#15

Hey @Alex_Af !

I loved the trailer. I’m beginning to read your story shortly and will message you in a few hours!


#16

Hello everyone who’s responded on here!

I apologize for not being able to review today. I will definitely try to get to two-three stories tomorrow. Thank you for your patience!


#17

Hey @emmael! Thanks for creating this thread! I`d love a review on my story.


Story : Let the demon inside
Gender: Supernatural romance
Description: You have to move back to Dimwood because of you brother. What will you find there? Love, death or supernatural freinds?
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4876381520789504


#18

Name: The Ember Moon Pack
Description: You’re an average highschool girl. What’ll happen to your life when you get kidnapped by a pack of Hybrids that claim that you are their sacred Queen? CC, ChoicesMatter, 5Endings
Chapters: technically 3 bc ch 2 is customization
Genre: Fantasy
Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5387476824358912
Instagram: emberpackepisode :smile:


#19

Hey I’m a new author, and I was hoping to get some honest reviews!
Here is a little review of mine:

Title: The Nation D: Moon Eyes
Author: P Marroquín
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure
Style: Limelight
Number of episodes: 5 (ongoing)
Description: Heather has no parents, she is trapped in a place were she can’t go out and were she has to work everyday or else the leaders will kill her, but what happens when her best friend and his dead sister offer her a way to get out of there for good and start a brand new life…! Where’s your new destination? And what dark secrets does it hide? Will you finally find answers to your past?
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6435647390351360


#20

Hey! This is so nice of you to do! If you could read the first three chapters that would be great :blush:

Title - Beautiful Broken Lies
Author - Hannah & Carly
Genre - Drama (also a comedy, romance & mystery)
Link - http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6662026650320896
Style - ink
Instagram - harly_episode
Description - Elena’s life seems perfect. Partying, boys, friends, you name it. That is until a dark tragedy changes her life forever. What is the truth? Will it break her?

Thank you so much :kissing_heart: