Honest Criticism/Reviews


#1

Hey, there! Name’s Dog. :blush:

I’m in the mood to read some stuff over. I’ll only be reading the first chapter since limited tickets, but that should be enough for me to get a good feel for your story. First chapters are the hook; if you can’t get me with that, then it’s something to think about.

I’m not mean, but I’m honest. I studied English in college (due to the luxury of having an English major as a mother lmao) and currently work in psychology, so I have a firm grasp of character creation and grammar. If something isn’t making sense, I’m going to let you know.

If you’re not interested in your own story, please don’t bother me. People who care about the quality will appreciate real critiques. I’m not going to just cut you down. I want to help.

I’ve only got time for a few, so I’ll be picking and choosing, so to speak. If I feel I can’t do your story justice due to a lack of personal interest, I won’t waste your time! That’d be disrespectful and unfair to you.

So, yeah! Just let me know if you’re interested. I also love bouncing ideas around, so if you need help with unwritten stories I’m always around to listen. :smile_cat: I promise I’m pretty friendly lol


#2

Hi! I’m Rude :blue_heart:

My story’s name is LOBITA

Let me know what you think :relieved:


#3

Sure thing! I’ll get right to it. :kissing_closed_eyes: I’ve seen this floating around, but haven’t sat down and read anything quite yet, haha. Looking forward to it!


#4

:scream: glad it’s been floating around loll I need the buzz :honeybee:


#5

Just finished it up. :smile_cat: Hope I could help some! I think you have a great base for a unique plot!


#6

Here’s my story:
Title: Darkness
Author: Dani
Genre: Romance/Mystery
Style: Ink
Description: If you can’t get away from darkness, you learn to live with it… A vampire story!
Episodes: 6 (more to come)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5439290271858688
Instagram: daniepisodewriter
I hope you like it! :black_heart:


#7

Hi Dog,
I’d really appreciate if I could get some feedback on my unpublished story, “Switched Royalty.” I’ve been working on it for well over a year (I write a lot more than I transfer to episode), and I just want to make sure that I’m heading in the right direction. I’ll include the “basic” summary just to give you a better idea of it. There should be some rough edges (such as small grammatical errors and extras not named) as I still haven’t completely finished editing, but I want to know your general ideas on it.

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/65977307590819842
Summary: Thrust into the life you were suppose to live, into the middle of a revolution, and romance- can you save your nation?

Thanks for your time!
-Robin Bennet


#8

Officially published! I appreciated any and all support!

Title: H & V: The Hacker Chronicles
Genre: Adventure
summary: Follow three best friends on an epic post-apocalyptic quest to find the rightful heir to the throne!
Choices Matter You Play All Three Characters

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#9

I’ll start getting to these tonight! I’ll message each of you when I finish. Thanks so much for giving me the opportunity to read your writing! :smile_cat:


#10

Hi, creator! It seems like you have added a wrong link to your story. You should replace it with the share link :slight_smile:


#11

Hi, Dog! Would you be so kind to check my story? You promise strictness and honesty and that’s just what I’m looking for :slight_smile:
Title:"H & V: Fake Friend"
Genre: Drama (but, maybe, it can also be categorized as mystery)
Style: Ink
Story Summary: Janette’s daughter disappeared. Friends help her in search. One of them lies. Will the villain’s plan fail or succeed? It depends on your choices.
Choices: matter and determine the story ending. Three possible endings.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6167433466478592

I’m not a native English speaker, and I’d be happy if you point me to my grammar and punctuation mistakes, although I honestly tried hard to avoid them.


#12

This is my story:
Title: The Twins
Author: Dasha (me, lol)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6300814564655104
Enjoy, and please review! :slight_smile:


#13

Thank you for reading them!


#14

Hi, Dog!

Thank you very much for creating this thread, this is very kind of you! Constructive criticism is exactly what I am looking for!

If you are interested in reading a story with several mini-games and where CHOICES REALLY MATTER then, please, give my story a try. This is my first story ever but I have put a lot of effort in it and would highly appreciate any feedback! I promise, the story will keep you hooked :blush:

My story details:

Name of story: H & V: Fate
Author: Alex Af
Genre: Thriller
Episodes: 4 (completed)
Summary of story: Young ambitious journalist hunting down a powerful tycoon who has made a fortune based on lies. But who really is a villain here? Choices matter.
Link to story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6548486212681728
Instagram: @episode.alex.af


#15

Hi❤ I would really aprecciate if you read my story and review my grammar, because English is not my first language and I’m afraid it could ruin the story😱 The name is Bloody Obsession by Mar C, thank you❤


#16

Hi there! If you’re interested, please review my story:
Title: Spotlight: Jellyfished
Genre: Mystery (/romance)
Number of episodes: 4 (ongoing)
Description: Did you know? Jellyfish do not have hearts. Yet they live. What if a human, a woman, would lose this vital organ…and live?

I am always looking for more ways to improve my story and I’d love it if you could help me with that!


#17

Hi @Dogeyes I’d appreciate a review on my first story:

Title: Lost Boy Lost Girl
Author: MrBitPlayer
Genre: (Drama/Romance)
Art: Limelight!
Description: Will a lonely girl next door and troubled boy be able to overcome the challenges in their lives that inevitably bring them closer together?

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6253275339161600

(My story is not finished atm and is unpublished because I’m waiting on my cover arts, so I would like some feedback and tips before I make it official.)


#18

Hi Dog,
I recently published my first story and would like some honest feedback. Here are the details:

Title: H & V: Lie to me
Author: Alexandra Mar
Genre: Drama/Mystery with romantic subplots
Description: After only serving 3 years of a 25 to life sentence, Aiden Suarez is mysteriously released. But wait, what’s that? Oh right, “Aiden Suarez” no longer exists.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6378501067505664


#19

Hi

I would love some feedback on my story.

The story isn’t published yet, so you’d need to click on the link

Thank you so much


#20

Hey, I’d appreciate any feedback you can give me.
Title: H & V: From Zero to Hero
Author: Dr.Smile
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4697049362202624 8
Thank you in advance.