Hm, this sounds like a middle school relationship . I ain’t hating but it brings back this couple I used to know. It was hilarious to watch but heartbreaking but funny . I don’t know what to say to be honest.
I assume they’re in high school? I feel like I would write it differently than what you have it as. But hey if you like it you like it . My opinion and I’m sorry if I offended you. By no means that wasn’t my intention .
It’s a little too unrealistic for me.
Maybe if you worded it differently it would work but I find it kinda cheesy.
I wouldn’t make her threat whoever it is to be her prom date. Make her try to persuade her more and then she could say I guess this is goodbye then.
Good luck.
Ah I can kinda visualise it now.
Based on how you described it now, I actually think readers will really connect with her and feel her pain.
Good luck babe.
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. I ain’t hating but it brings back this couple I used to know. It was hilarious to watch but heartbreaking but funny 
. My opinion and I’m sorry if I offended you. By no means that wasn’t my intention 
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