Can I have a story review please (it’s unpublished, only one episode)
Name of the story: Now and Forever
The MC is a girl named Mia. She has a younger sister named Amy and her mom died while giving birth to Amy. Her best friends are Adam and Victoria, who are twins. One day, she finds a mysterious journal in a thrift shop. Surprisingly, it used to belong to Evelyn (her great-great-great-great-great-grandmother). When the eldest daughter turned 17, it was passed down to her through the generations until Mia’s mom got it. However, when they were cleaning out Mia’s mom’s stuff after she died, the journal happened to be donated to a bookstore. She reads everyone’s pages (from the seven women before her). Apparently, Jasper (Alex’s great-great-great-great-great-grandfather) and Evelyn were childhood friends. So, Jasper made this journal for Evelyn and bestowed magic upon it. He was secretly in love with her and didn’t approve of her fiance. They had a falling out because she refused to be with him so he put a curse on the journal/Evelyn. If the rift between their bloodlines isn’t fixed, the seventh generation will be plagued with bad luck. It starts out small and gets bigger. Mia goes on a “quest” to find Alex and heal the bond. Alex uses his magic to help her break the curse.
- There will also be a separate storyline between Jasper and Evelyn.
- The reader will have a choice between Theodore/Skylar and Alex in the end, but there will also be a point system.
- Theodore/Skylar is another LI that she might end up with. They work at the cafe where she likes to go, and they date for a bit, but she also starts liking Alex.
Sorry that it’s so long, I don’t have a description yet.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5047139559473152 Please don’t go on to the second episode, it’s in progress.
Can you tell me your thoughts on the plot, directing, choices, and characters?