Thanks you!!
The reason I put a disclaimer is because people usually complain when a story isn’t realistic. So I’m letting them know that its fiction (and a product of my imagination) therefore certain parts of the story may or may not meet the realistic requirements.
Yeah, the other hair lengths are locked, but they will have the option to choose other hairstyles in the future. (Dara A. Marie has a template that is updated on her linktree account)
The reason I let them customize their parents are because I usually hate stories that automatically create the parent because they end up looking like poop, the color is usually a bit off and they look ugly. For example, in a story I chose pink hair for my character and the Dad ended ip having pink hair. They end up looking nothing like the main character in my opinion. Also, the parents play a big role in my story along with the other characters.
The lips moving and characters not talking lol. I have to explain this, but have you ever watched a movie and the main character is narrating over their own actions (whether it is lauging, walking, or interacting with friends… thats what I was going for). Also with the mom talking while Ren said “I’ll call you”. She is talking to the Dad, (for example in plays where the background characters talk but you cant hear them because they’re focusing on the main character… or when you have background characters in your story and they are talking to another character)
The reason I spelled curse word with the dashes is because When you read it, I want you to read it in your mind as the actual curse words but I don’t want it to be shown in the dialogue as the full word. And I also don’t want to use fudge and butt because that sound weird and for example Ren is a bad ass, he’ll look weird being angry and saying “What the fudge?” Lol . I’ve seemn stories where people use symbols in for the rest if the word. Its just a preference.
Yes, I LOVE HARRY POTTER TOO I watch every single one every halloween!!
Btw, thank you! I know I made a lot of grammatical errors from typing fast and not really thinking properly when wording sentences. strong textI will correct those errors asap.
The reason I said “really Ren” is because he said “please dont see me” but he was standing in the wide open and the nurse was on the side of him. So it was stupid of him to think she would not see him. Anytime I use a readers message I’m usually reaponding to the last dialogue spoken.
I’m from the caribbean so we say “its half 8”. Its just dialect.
The scream- Ren screamed because Nylah doesn’t eat bacon . He is weird and unpredictable at times.
About Nylah and Michael ages and relationships etc. Nylah is 17, she is going to be turning 18 sometime throughout the story, Ren is 18 and Michael is 22. He graduated the 12th grade at the age of 16 (So did I lol) and graduated college at 22 ( I KNOW IT SOUNDS WEIRD NOW BUT IT WILL ALL MAKE SENSE IN THE FUTURE EPISODES).
Ronald Krumps is “Donald Trump”. I didn’t want his name in the story but I wanted to reference how he always says “huuggggeee” and also beause it is a product of my imagination.
Michael wasn’t invited to the party but he is still young. He only came there to look for Nylah and apologize for being unprofessional. He is also friends with Jonas ( Rens drummer) so he knew she would possibly be there.
When Ren said “Jail”, the party scene ended because I used a transition to fade out and the scene cut to him at the police station. Certain shows and movies do this, to make it more dramatic. I didnt think I had to explain anything or put any more information because he literally knocked the guy out therefore he ended up at the police station lol.
“Lets head to my office” - the scene was focusing on the mom and the police at the time. Nylah and Ren were having there own concersation at the time. Thats why as soon as the mom and the police left. The dialogue began with Nylah and Ren because the scene is focusing on them now. Lol, again its just a technique I use. A lot of other people understood what was happening when I did that.
I hope you can understand some of the things you were confused about. Thanks a lot for the review and the feedback. I will correct those errors right away! Sorry if it isnt your cup of tea. God bless!
Lol btw, “DF” means Da fuck.