Impactful Choices/Choices in general: 0/10. Not accessible.
Grammar and Vocabulary: 3/10. Your spelling is fine, but you lack in vocabulary. Some grammatical errors occur while reading. For instance, you write “YES! I get to get the single bed!” This shows the reader that you are incapable of using a broad vocabulary with lesser-used words. In addition, you have reoccurring problems with punctuation and capital letters. For instance, you write, “All done! now I can Relax!”. This should be rewritten to “All done, now I can relax” or “All done. Now I can relax.”
Directing and the addition of overlays: /10. Not accessible.
Plot and storytelling: 5/10. Acceptable storytelling. You have a palpable plot outthought. The storytelling is not that well told. You are constantly writing information and details about the characters without showing. This makes the reader less enthusiastic about reading your story. You inform the reader about several characters without showing them simultaneously. Nonetheless, your plot gives you the score written above.
Character development: 4/10. Poor character development. In every story, you should always connect the future to the past. By doing that, you show the reader what the character has been through, and why they act in the matter that they do. Hence it doesn’t seem like you are developing your characters properly.
Diversity: 7/10 Diverse characters; you include customizable characters where skin-color can be changed. Characters are different from one another, and they have different ethnicities and moral knowledge. Well done!
Different backgrounds, overlays, etc.: 2/5. Primarily, the addition of overused backgrounds hurts the story, because they are the same backgrounds used in plenty of other stories. This is not necessarily a problem, but some readers are very meticulous when it comes to the creativity of an author. Additionally, you use the Spotlight version of Episode, which in itself makes the directing less reliable. In addition to that, you are not using overlays resulting in you not showing the reader you directing skills.
Chapter Length: 4/5. You have made an acceptable length for the story’s chapters; it is not too long or too short. You include the necessary scenes without the addition of unfitting scenes. However, some chapters are shorter or longer than the others are which might confuse the reader as to how much time they are spending on reading.
Creativity: 4/5. Using Spotlight in itself is a bonus in your creativity, seeing as not many authors use this feature on the Episode app. In addition, your usage of music and sounds is perfectly fit in the scenes where you include the music.
Story description: 3/5. You use a minimal vocabulary, but you sum up the story in a short matter, which I like. Nonetheless, there can be some improvements such as removing the exclamation mark from the story description.
Story cover(s): 4/5. I am basing my score on the cover that you posted on the forum. Personally, I think the cover is appropriate and fits the climatic of your story. The nice addition of the pink color and the frames surrounding the characters in the story is also another bonus. It is simple, yet affective.
Total Points: 36/65
Star Rating: 
1/4