Lacuna, @dianadee Review:
Impactful Choices/Choices in general: 7/10. In the midst of the first chapter, you add some options for the reader to choose hairstyle, makeup and the attire for the day. In addition, you add some important choices, which makes the reader feel closer to the story.
Grammar and Vocabulary: 8/10. You manage to captivate the reader with an enriching vocabulary that sometimes seems minimal, but your usage of words is perfect in your story. There are some grammatical errors with punctuation, but the spelling of words is excellent. Nonetheless, the punctuation is a little incorrect. For instance, you write the following: “Sorry honey”, which should be rewritten to the correct form “Sorry, honey.” Another issue is “Hello girls” which should be rewritten and corrected to “Hello, girls.” Nonetheless, these are only minor punctuation problems, but can cause less enthusiasm for the reader. Something else worth noticing is that you write, “But Abby is this year leader…” which should be written to “But Abby is this year’s leader… etc.”
Directing and the addition of overlays: 9/10. In the first chapter, you direct a scene of a reporter. This scene, in particular, shows that your abilities as an Episode author is very well. In addition to this scene, you manage to use an appropriate amount of overlays.** **Additionally, you add different zooms and pan the camera from other directions, which only goes to show that you are able of using the directing features on the app. I would recommend that you add more background characters, especially at the funeral scene. Even though that might seem difficult and time-consuming, it is of essence if you want to show the reader that you are serious in the author position. You manage to add several flashbacks during the funerals scene, which all amaze me. Something else that might subtract from your points is that when she walks across the bathroom, her reflection is nowhere in the mirror. This might be difficult to direct, it will add onto your outstanding directing.
Plot and storytelling: 8.5/10. The plot itself is well written and it seems as though you have spent much time understanding the plot yourself. Using flashbacks interprets the meanings of character’s devotion. In addition, your story uses narration, which is brilliant in a mystery story. The storytelling and the plot are eloquently written, and accumulates to you receiving an almost full score. The girl that was being vocal in the speech stops talking when the people in the church start talking. What is she doing simultaneously? This is the only spot that seems somewhat awkward to me.
Character development: 7/10. You are developing your characters in sufficient ways. Nonetheless, I do not feel the necessary bond that the reader is supposed to have with its main character. This is a major problem, because it takes away from the plot and the storytelling. You develop your characters to an extent, but there needs to be improvements in this department for the reader to fully acknowledge the character or characters’ emotions.
Diversity: 8.5/10 You include the addition of characters with different origins, skin-colors and mismatched cultures. Background characters are added, some of whom are of different origins. You receive this score because some of the characters with different ethnicities are more frequent than they are in other stories.
Different backgrounds, overlays, etc.: 3.5/5. The story and plot is engaging and engrossing, but the only reason why the reader might be disinterested at times is the backgrounds. The backgrounds are recognizable in plenty of other stories, which removes some points from the story. The overlays, nonetheless, adds to your points.
Chapter Length: 5/5 You manage to create a thrilling story with chapters that are long enough for the reader not wanting to exit the story. You add the necessary scenes that are of relevance. Nicely done.
Creativity: 5/5. Your creativity is beyond my mind. Primarily, I can analyze the features that you have incorporated in the story and understand that this is an everlasting project. The addition of perfectly fit music, impactful choices, sub-covers and other features accumulate to a total score.
Story description: 4.5/5. The story description is a nice element to the first impression of the reader. You have done fine work with the vocabulary, which seems to be minimal, but you still manage to pinpoint the most important information that is of relevance. By having a nice story cover and a well-described description, you manage to captivate the reader for the journey ahead of them. Well done!
Story cover(s): 4.5/5. As soon as I laid eyes on your cover, I was in awe of how gorgeously detailed it is. You manage to incorporate the nice touch of darkness and mythical mystery in the cover. The addition of the smoke and the dark background accumulates to an excellent score, since it fits the Mystery trope perfectly. The only reason why you did not receive the full score is that the faces appear crooked, as well as the story title being hidden at the bottom of the cover. Well done!
Total Points: 70,5/85
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PS: Added to my favs.