Honest Story Reviews

Thanks so much for the Review!! I will definitely add more choices and add your suggestions in. Also if it’s possible can you make me a splash for the tap slowly? I would love to add it to my story so I can remove the character from saying it. :blush: Thank you again!

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Of course, no problem. Just fill the form out on my splash thread, and I’ll get started.

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Hey, just finished reading the first episode of Top Star.

4 points for chapter length:
Your chapter was a good length.
2 points for zooms and spot directing:
You didn’t really use spot directing or zooms that much, and I recommend using them more, makes it more visually appealing.
4 points for choices and how many there are:
You used lots of choices, but not any dressing games. I think you should at least include a dressing game in the first episode.
3 points for cover art:
I totally see the plot in your cover art, but why not use some characters?
5 points on grammar:
No issues at all!
5 points on plot:
Your plot is very original, and it is used, but rarely. I think it’s a great plot.
2 points on music and sounds:
You only use music for the song parts, use some sounds and music more!
Other Suggestions: I definitely see that lots of characters are usually idle. Making them do animations seems like a little, but it does a lot to your story and makes it more visually appealing. Don’t make your characters pop into scenes, I see you do that a lot. Please pm me if you need any help! :slight_smile:

Overall, your score is 25!

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Hey, just finished reading Episode One of Recovery in 5.

I have removed the chapter length points since you stated the chapter would be short.

3 points for zooms and spot directing:
You used zooms a little bit, but, I would recommend using more of both.
0 points for choices:
Add some into the first episode!
4 points for cover art:
Pretty hooking, but add some of the characters from the story.
5 points on grammar:
Nothing wrong over here!
5 points on plot:
The plot seems very original, nothing is wrong with it.
3 points for music and sounds:
I see you do only use music, please use some more sounds.

Other Suggestions:
Don’t always zoom out out out, zoom back in on your characters or something.

Overall, your score is 20.

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Thank you for your review! I’ll definitely apply your review to improving my story!

Hey, just finished Episode One of Waver Conquest.

5 point for chapter length:
Your chapter length was pretty good.
0 points for zooms and spot directing:
There was no zooms/spot directing. Adding more of these will increase the visual appeal of the story, an that’s what can really change it, too.
2 points for choices and how many there are:
You only use dressing games, but, the other choices don’t seem important, but they are. Make the reader feel like they are important to the story. Make the choices gold or something.
2 points on cover art:
I wasn’t really hooked on it…
2 points for grammar:
I think you could word your dialogue better, and the dialogue in your story does make me bored.
3 points on plot:
I think your plot is original, but think it’s too rushed.
4 points on music and sound:
You use music and sounds, nice job.
Other Suggestions:
In the beginning, I do see you do not mention the story uses sounds or mature language. You can request one at my thread, just fill the form out over there. Having a splash for this would be very helpful. Also, making your characters idle makes the story look so boring. Make them do something, and it will help your story a lot, even just by doing this one little thing! For dialogue, I also believe you should not do talking animations while they are thinking. This makes it seem weird, odd, and anything else. REMOVE ANY SCENES WITH BLACK BACKGROUNDS! Very unappealing and unneeded.

Overall, your score is a 19…

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Thanks for your review!

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I’ll remove the plot criteria for you then.

_Hey, can you please read my story? _

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Hi everyone! This is my first story, id really love if you’d check it out and leave me some feed back! Thank you!

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I would love if you would review my story!

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Specific Suggestions: I’m open to anything, I only just published this story and would really love to hear any thoughts you have!
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Hey!
I’m the author of Meaning of Love and my name is Vanessa.
It would mean a lot to me if you checked it out and give me feedback.
For Sneak Peeks and other informations you can follow my instagram @vanne.episode

Story: Meaning of Love
Genre: Romance/Drama
Style: Ink
Author: Vanessa
Story Description: Bella has to move away and leave everything behind. But now everything gets more
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Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/vanne.episode/
Read4Read: Yes, dm me on Instagram.

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Can you please remove this post? I find you linking your own review thread on mine is rude and disrespectful.

Please use the form given otherwise I won’t be reviewing the story.

Hello! I’d love to know your opinnion on my story! :heart:

You can also DM me on instagram :slight_smile:

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