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Title: Beautiful Chaos
Author: Aria M Jackson
Style: INK
Number of Episodes: 3
Additional Notes: I accidentally made the Narrator a character, so all the places where there was a narration speech bubble, I had the character who was narrating speak it instead. I’m currently working on changing all of them so I can delete the Narrator character. Sorry if it causes some confusion!!

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The bad girl

Grammar/Spelling: 6
Reasoning: As you said, your english wasn’t the best. You had a lot of spelling mistakes, but I can relate tbh!
Please add . after your sentences! It really annoyed me that you didn’t use it.

Directing: 6

Reasoning: The call sound starts ringing before she started ringing. Strange, you should fix this.
When the bell rings, after they have warn Alex that he can’t have the girl he wants. The two guys is supposed to exits. So they get very big and walks through some bushes. In stead of walking at the road right in front of them. You have just written @CHARACTER exits left, but instead you can just use the spot where they’re standing and change zone. F.eks @CHARACTER spot 0.705 -18 468 in zone 3. If you want them to exits left just write: @CHARACTER walks to 0.705 -18 468 in zone 2 in 5

The teacher forces the MC to put the phone away, and in the next scene the teacher stands alone even though Alex just entered, After some second Alex popps in…

Plot: 8

Reasoning: I didn’t really hear anything about that secret that I was told about in the description. But the rest fits pretty well. I actually liked it, good job

Length: 5

Reasoning: It was kinda short, and I didn’t really like the ending. It should be a cliffhanger, or some kind of closure.

Cover: 6

Reasoning: The small cover is okay. I like the edits of the character, but the background is really boring. The large cover is unclear, and it seems like whoever made your cover just made a small, and then you chose to use it as a large cover as well.

Grade: 62%

It’s romance, and it’s about this girl that get’s invited to her first party. Yeah, hope you read it.

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Our Story

Grammar/Spelling: 7
Reasoning: I didn’t really find much spelling mistakes, but you sometimes you forgot a word. And please use . after every sentence.

Directing: 7
Reasoning:
You know you can change it so its no name for bg?
Music doen’t fade
When Riley screams to wake Ava up, Riley starts falling before she screams.

I see you have tried to spot the speech bubbles some places, remember to reset speech bubble or spot the speech bubbles throughout the story.

When Isabella run after them to save Riley, they just popps in when you pan…
Right after, you used some zooms, and in the next scene (and some other) it’s still zoomed in, so I can’t really see anything.

It’s supposed to be night, but in the windows, it’s day…

Plot: 9
Reasoning: I like the plot, It’s very original!

Length: 8
Reasoning: The length is good (or maybe a bit long), and the ending was a bit sudden.

Cover: 7
Reasoning: The small cover has nice editing, but it’s kind boring with the black background. It’s cool that the large cover show’s all the characters, but you should have added the name of your story.

Overall: 76%

Title: Over Before You Know It
Author: Lizard
Number of Episodes: 3 (unfinished)
Additional notes: Here’s the cover! I just published it, so it doesn’t show up on the app yet.

Summary: You and your best friend make a suicide pact to go to the Grand Canyon and end it all together. Will you both really do it? Or will it be over before you know it?

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6584190301765632

I’ll be giving your story a read, too!

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Thank you for the feedback.

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Also, do you know how to fade music because I don’t know how :joy:

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Yes!
First your music or sound.
Then to fade music/sound you use: volume sound/music x T

x is from 0 to 100 and it’s the volume level
T stands for time, and is time in milliseconds. (1 second = 1000 milliseconds)

Example:
fade in->

music music_emotionalstringpop
volume music 100 5000

fade out->

volume music 0 1000
@pause for 1
@music off

Hope this helped :smile:

I think so. Thank you

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Thank you! Yeah I took a loooong break but I’m going bakc and editing now, as for the choices, the first three episodes were more pilots, right now i’m working on important choices for episode five. Thank you for the review!

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Its really interesting how you review peoples stories​:kissing::kissing:that’s like a hell of a work … it feels good to know that someone is reading and telling you your mistakes !! And you put a lot of effor into all this !! I really appreciate it !! And i would love it if you would read my story too. It’s called ENGAGED!

Title: Enagaged
Author: Navya Sallan
Genere: Comedy
Style: Ink

Description: what happens whe you suddenly found out that you are engaged to a hot stranger in America and you are forced to move to America woth him!!!

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5810322648203264

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Hello! I would very much appreciate a review on my story if you have the time!
Title: Just Us
Author: FATE
Chapters: 12
Additional notes: Romance/Drama
Story description: The story is about 2 friends, Seth and Tara who grew up together. Tara suffers from PTSD and the story starts with them trying to get their life back on track after a tragic incident which turned their lives upside down…
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6247867691958272
Thank you in advance!

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Hey there. It would be great for any feedback on my story!

Title - The FireDraco’s Destiny: Rhea’s Arc
Author - AbbyB
Genre - Fantasy
Number of Episodes - 4 (ongoing)
Description- After Talina’s Arc, Rhea is the legacy to destroy evil. Being a Dragon in the supernatural world is more than troublesome. Will you finish what your ancestors started?
Link - http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6247706304053248
Instagram - official.abbyb.episode
Thanks again xxx

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Hey!!

Story Title : The Art of The Deal

Author : GraceX
Style : Ink
Episodes : 11 ongoing

Genre: Action/Comedy/ Romance

Link:http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4622710791208960

Story: Isobel lives a secret life but is captured by Dark Chaos, a gang with a twist. Fighting for the greater good! But have there lives crossed before?

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Name: Prominent Gift
Author: Gia Morina
Genre: Fantasy/Werewolf/Romance/Drama
Description: Kidnapped at 16, Piper finally escapes after three years. She finds herself in the home of the soon to be Alpha King. What happens when her kidnappers come looking for her? How long can the Alpha King keep her protected?
Number of Episodes: 4
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5263005260054528

I hope you all enjoy! :heart:

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Title: The Most Powerful Scream

Author: Cat Eyed Goddess

Number of Episodes: 7

Additional notes: N/A

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_Hey, can you please review my story? _

Title: Romantic Cruise
Author: Lawful Evil
Style: Ink
Genre: Romance, Drama
Episodes: 4 [Completed] 2 endings
Description: You break up with your cheating boyfriend and go on a cruise. What will happen if you meet a mysterious dangerous man? Customize Characters
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4697971707478016

Pleafeedback: e some feedback :slight_smile:

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Title: Mei

Author: Manna

Number of Episodes: 4 Episodes

Additional notes: You may find it hard to find my story on the app so I am posting the link to it below. I would love some honest feedback.

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6274704344219648

I’d love a story review!
Title: A Twist Of Faith
Author: Lexi Lu
Number of Episodes: 1-6 (you can decide how many to read)
Additional notes: layering in the first couple episodes are off :slight_smile:

Title: Stuck in My Screen
Author: writerRMT
Number of Episodes: just the first one please
Additional notes: um please make sure to give me any feedback, even if you feel its too honest lol
link to my story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5960003971973120
tysm!

Title: Filling a void
Author: Amber Thompson
Number of Episodes: 3
Additional notes: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4742249652682752 thats the link.
And any kind of feedback would be appreciated x thanks for this