Hiii
To be honest your story has interesting plot and I love it for sure.
And I know we’re new writers but directing is important to the story, like the characters supposedly idle when they’re not talking (no speechbubble) and about overlays you need to moves your characters into different layers so it won’t messed up. Hehe sorry if you don’t like my advice I’m telling to make it better because your STORY IS AMAZING 
