How can I improve my first episode

Hi, so yesterday I released my first story and tbh I’m not sure about my first episode. I like the second and third better but I know if people don’t really like the first one much they probably won’t continue to read it. So is anyone willing to read it and give me feedback on if they liked it or how I could improve/change it.
This is the cover.


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