So I am in the process of writing a new story, and I need as much constructive criticism as possible.
Lana’s life has been turned upside down with a harsh break-up, fights with friends and family secrets. What happens when the one that got away returns, Weston is home and seems to take a romantic interest in Lana, will he reveal the real reason he’s home or will he break her heart instead?
I plan on focussing a lot on all the characters and to focus on some of the ins and outs of being a young adult. One of my characters Weston struggles with a sick brother and he needs to make money to pay for the hospital bills due to unpresent parents. My character Violet and her mother have an unhealthy relationship since her father passed and her mother not supporting her coming out as gay, her mother always has dodgy people over putting violets safety at risk. Zander is constantly compared to his twin as she is more mature and his parents constantly put him down and try to change him and his ways. His twin Delilah was sexually assaulted by a man when she was 17, Violet stopped him and Delilah feels she owes it to Violet to start dating her after Violet confesses her feelings.
Lana is Mexican and so is her family so if anyone is Mexican can they please tell me about their culture. And Zander and Delilah are African so once again please let me know about your country and culture. Lastly, Lillia is Italian (a later character). And Violet and Weston are English. I know I am asking a lot, I just want honest brutal opinions and suggestion. Thanks!