if you’re still looking for reviewers i’d love to give it a review! 
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Yeah! That’d be great, you can just write it here! 
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Ok I’ve done 3 episodes and I won’t repeat what the others have told you as I agree with them.
The dialogue seems some what lacking in areas it doesn’t seem to flow like a actually conversation if you need help try talking to a friend or family or even on here to see how a conversation goes.
How much younger is Tessa as she speaks like she younger yet she the same height as the others you can have her smaller on screen.
The description I would put down “your a small town girl who just moved to the big city New York when an unexpected offer comes across your way” you don’t have to do this but it discribe your story a bit better.
I found this to be a good story that can be great just those little problems and it can be a great story and like the great authors on episode took them a lot of learning to make the great stories they make now.
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Thanks so much this was really inspiring and helpful!
- For the whole intro, you shouldn’t do it with blocks of text in a narrator box. Show, don’t tell!
- I noticed you don’t have any splashes or sound. That’s fine, but it makes a story look a lot more professional if you have those
- Some text boxes don’t have periods
- You should incorporate your limited cc into the chapter in a creative way. while there’s nothing really wrong with the way you are doing it right now, it would be a lot better
- Why only customize the hair? I get that the hair color and style could be important to the story, but I doubt that lip color/shape, eyebrow color/shape, nose, and eye shape would be beneficial to the story. A lot of readers like cc, so you should use a limited cc template with only the hair styles and colors you want, and just take out the option to change eye color and skin color if those are important.
- You used a laugh animation for dialogue and it looks weird, you could have made mc laugh, then add a dialogue animation after
- Is Mina supposed to be my friend? Why am I so mean to her? it doesn’t make sense
- Why does my mom not have the same hair color as me? you should customize the family as the reader customizes the MC so we don’t get confused
- When Mina walks out, she should be using a angry walking animation so it looks better
- Mom keeps on talking as MC walks out, use an idle animation after her dialogue so her lips don’t keep moving
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why do your outfits look like pajamas lol
- When Mina comes in when I try on her outfit, she doesn’t leave. She’s just standing there for the rest of this scene watching me change
- Tessa isn’t using a talk animation
- Neither is Mina
- Shouldn’t the waitress be wearing something more like a uniform?
- I don’t think waitresses comment on peoples beauty… they could, like “You look nice today!” or “What can I get for you gorgeous ladies?” but not really “Omg ur beautiful!”. It just seems unnatural
- Side note: why are there no bg characters, and is this a restaurant because it wasn’t specified and that isn’t a restaurant bg
- The table overlay looks really low
- Why is everyone standing up to talk? no one does that irl, so you should position your characters lower so they can talk normally and still look like they are sitting
- Mina is stuck in her talk_repulsed (I’m assuming) animation, you should use @MINA is idle after this so she won’t look stuck.
- Is the girl on the right supposed to be a kid? if she is, her face looks weird because it is mature
- MC is stuck in a selfie position. I thought that the waitress is going to take a picture of her…?
- Also this whole “waitress thinks she’s pretty and wants to take a picture of her” is totally unrealistic
- Wow, Mina is really jealous of MC. I don’t know what MC’s relationship with her is supposed to be like, but so far she seems really one-dimensional and not well rounded out
- Mina isn’t moving her lips again
- Does girl on the right really have nothing to say this entire time?
- You need to check your spelling. It’s guess, not geuss, it’s Spaghetti, not spagetti. there’s a spelling check in the portal
- Why is there a black screen as a transition, it looks choppy.
- MC should use a talking animation for “oh my gosh, what did you say?”
- Yours, not your’s
- Is there only one school in this entire place? there’s more than one reason as to why henry wouldn’t see MC at school other than her being homeschooled
- MC is a little harsh turning henry down, it makes no sense that she has no manners.
- real siblings don’t call each other “sissy”
- MC’s bedroom bg looks weird, did you squish it to make it one zone or something?
- Episode is super short
I’m only doing the first episode sorry, and hopefully you don’t take all of this the wrong way.
Thanks so much for this review, a lot of the things you have mentioned I noticed myself and have already changed (I just need to press update) But there were also some key points that I know now I need to make clearer. Thank you so much! 
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