Hi! I need help with an description for my story called “eli.” The summary of the story is:
Elijah and Ivan meet up through friends and they slowly get to know eachother. As they get more close and get into a relationship, things slowly go downhill while their relationship comes to an end. I already wrote dialogue for the intro of the story, so if that helps:
ELIJAH: My bedroom feels warm, but it’s cold outside. I can tell because of the fog on the windows. It makes me realize that there are things you know, but can’t accept… and that there are things you can feel, but can’t explain.
VAN: I almost thought that our presences went hand in hand, like a slow dance that compliments a piece of music. But the sad reality is that we were only two souls toying with each other’s lives… changing our reality so we can fit ourselves into it.
ELIJAH: If I had the choice, I would’ve chosen to be young forever. Not to become immortal out of greed, but to try again. To see if there was another way. And keep trying over and over to see if it works. Maybe, if I could choose, I wouldn’t have to live with the realization that our love wasn’t strong enough to keep us anchored down. Instead, the ships have sailed away.
IVAN: You were the cold outside.
ELIJAH: And you were the warmth in my bedroom.
I also wrote a small description and i don’t know if I like it, but it’s
"And as our love is close to failure, we try going to the ends of the earth to try to repair the unfixable."