So, I`ve done two stories in this app. But the first one didn’t work out. I was really new and got myself lost a lot of times, but still I had a lot of readers on it… I gave up on it and then learned more to do a new one, which I got a lot more excited and inspired about. But I’ve only a few reads and I dunno what should I do… The story has a lot yet to come, I would love if any of you guys could read it and even tell me if there’s a problem… “My messy life” is on the drama category. Let me know if you like it. And if you have our own story that you would like a feedback or more readers, feel comfortable to share it here.
I will read it and I will tell you my opinion in pm🌸
But can you post the link?
And my story is , I hope you will enjoy it
Story title :- Darker than Black
Author :- flare
Description:- Under some Circumstances you will have to act as Psychologist at the house of the riches people in the country , will you mange to keep your identity hidden ?
Genres :- Drama , Romance .
Current chapters :- 7 (on going )
style :- LL
You can customize the main charecter and name it the way you want !
I will definitely check it out, loved the cover btw.
There you go!
Hi, I checked out your first chapter and this isn’t meant to hurt your feelings in any way or to come off as rude.
Your transitions need to be smoother. It just jumped from scene to scene.
I had no idea what your story was about or what your characters personalities are.
You should work on your grammar, as you have a lot of grammatical errors. Maybe get a proofreader.
I was more confused than anything else within 1 minute of reading.
As your characters enter or exit, some of the spotting is off.
The pace of the story was way too fast. It seems rushed.
If your story is going to have abuse, you should give the reader the option to skip it. And before you show any scene like that, put up a quick warning to let readers know that they’re about to see such a thing!
I think those are the major issues I noticed.
Again, I hope this helps you in some way
Ex: It should be, which. Not “witch”!
Sleeping. Not “slepping”!
Name: Arena Of Pride
Genre/s: Drama filled with action & romance
Episodes: 15 (more coming soon)
After a tragedy, Layla gets dragged deep down in the mafia world. Little did she know that the leader of Morocco’s black market - Oscar Kebryak, would put her under his protection.
I will definitely check it out.
Can u give me a review you don’t have to.
Ok I read a little bit and here are some of my tips.
Add a period.
Only 3 people per group
I want you guys to form your groups.
So I have noticed a lot of sentences did not have periods.
Also maybe add a flashback of when the parents left.
I forgot got to add one in my story but i will add one in later.
Also when you talk about abuse i suggest you add a warning.
Please remember this are suggestions and I am not trying to change your story at all i think it has potential and I would like to keep reading it.
Also if you want anymore help I have more suggestions for grammar mistakes just text me on Instagram jazz.episode01.
I`ll be working on that. Thank you for the feedback.
I read 6 chapters of your story and I need more already
I`m loving it and I would like to know if it’s okay not to want a romance for my caracter…
The grammar can be really tricky for me sometimes, ill try to give it an extra attention. Thank you for the feedback, and I would love to read your story too.
I can’t open it. Could you just say the name and I`ll search for it?
Hello! Good luck with your story!
(If you wanna do R4R with my story, let me know via pm or dm, please.)
Here is my story information.
Title: 𝕸𝖞 𝕹𝖊𝖎𝖌𝖍𝖇𝖔𝖗 𝖎𝖘 𝖆 𝕸𝖔𝖇𝖘𝖙𝖊𝖗.
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Description: 𝑀𝑒𝑒𝑡 𝑤𝑖𝑡𝘩 𝐿𝑒𝑛𝑘𝑎 𝑅𝑒𝑑𝑠𝑡𝑜𝑛𝑒 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑁𝑌 𝑚𝑜𝑏𝑠𝑡𝑒𝑟 𝑁𝑖𝑘𝑙𝑎𝑢𝑠 𝑅𝑒𝑒𝑐𝑒. 𝐿𝑒𝑛𝑘𝑎 𝑖𝑠 𝑎 𝑠𝑡𝑟𝑜𝑛𝑔 𝑤𝑜𝑚𝑎𝑛 𝑤𝑖𝑡𝘩 𝑎 𝑔𝑜𝑜𝑑 𝑏𝑎𝑐𝑘𝑔𝑟𝑜𝑢𝑛𝑑 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑁𝑖𝑘𝑙𝑎𝑢𝑠 𝑖𝑠 𝑎 𝘩𝑎𝑟𝑑 𝑚𝑎𝑛 𝑡𝑜 𝑟𝑒𝑎𝑑. 𝑊𝘩𝑒𝑛 𝐿𝑒𝑛𝑘𝑎 𝑟𝑎𝑛 𝑎𝑤𝑎𝑦 𝑓𝑟𝑜𝑚 𝘩𝑒𝑟 𝑂𝑊𝑁 𝑒𝑛𝑔𝑎𝑔𝑒𝑚𝑒𝑛𝑡 𝑝𝑎𝑟𝑡𝑦 𝑡𝘩𝑒𝑦 𝑓𝑖𝑛𝑎𝑙𝑙𝑦 𝑚𝑒𝑒𝑡. 𝐴𝑛𝑑 𝑡𝘩𝑒 𝑚𝑎𝑛 𝑙𝑜𝑠𝑒𝑠 𝘩𝑖𝑚𝑠𝑒𝑙𝑓 𝑖𝑛 𝘩𝑒𝑟 𝑠𝑐𝑒𝑛𝑡. (𝐿𝐿) 𝐶𝘩𝑜𝑖𝑐𝑒𝑠 𝑤𝑖𝑙𝑙 𝑏𝑒 𝑚𝑎𝑡𝑡𝑒𝑟 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑡𝘩𝑒𝑟𝑒 𝑤𝑖𝑙𝑙 𝑏𝑒 𝑜𝑛𝑙𝑦 𝑜𝑛𝑒 𝑙𝑜𝑣𝑒 𝑖𝑛𝑡𝑒𝑟𝑒𝑠𝑡. (𝐼 𝑓𝑖𝑛𝑑 𝑠𝑡𝑜𝑟𝑖𝑒𝑠 𝑤𝑖𝑡𝘩 𝑚𝑢𝑙𝑡𝑖𝑝𝑙𝑒 𝑙𝑜𝑣𝑒 𝑖𝑛𝑡𝑒𝑟𝑒𝑠𝑡𝑠 𝑢𝑛𝑟𝑒𝑎𝑙𝑖𝑠𝑡𝑖𝑐.)
𝖳𝗁𝗂𝗌 𝗂𝗌 𝗇𝗈𝗍 𝖺 𝗎𝗌𝗎𝖺𝗅 𝗆𝗈𝖻𝗌𝗍𝖾𝗋 / 𝗆𝖺𝖿𝗂𝖺 / 𝗀𝖺𝗇𝗀𝗌𝗍𝖾𝗋 𝗌𝗍𝗈𝗋𝗒. 𝖳𝗁𝗂𝗌 𝗂𝗌 𝗆𝗈𝗋𝖾 𝗅𝗂𝗄𝖾 𝖺 𝗌𝗍𝗈𝗋𝗒 𝖺𝖻𝗈𝗎𝗍 𝗁𝗈𝗐 𝖼𝖺𝗇 𝗍𝗐𝗈 𝗌𝗍𝗋𝗈𝗇𝗀 𝖼𝗁𝖺𝗋𝖺𝖼𝗍𝖾𝗋𝗌 𝖼𝖺𝗇 𝖿𝖺𝗅𝗅 𝗂𝗇 𝗅𝗈𝗏𝖾 𝖾𝖺𝖼𝗁 𝗈𝗍𝗁𝖾𝗋 𝖺𝗇𝖽 𝗁𝗈𝗐 𝗐𝗈𝗋𝗄𝗌 𝗍𝗁𝖾𝗂𝗋 𝗋𝖾𝗅𝖺𝗍𝗂𝗈𝗇𝗌𝗁𝗂𝗉.
𝗖𝗵𝗼𝗶𝗰𝗲𝘀 𝘄𝗶𝗹𝗹 𝗯𝗲 𝗺𝗮𝘁𝘁𝗲𝗿 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝘁𝗵𝗲𝗿𝗲 𝗶𝘀 𝗮 𝗽𝗼𝗶𝗻𝘁 𝘀𝘆𝘀𝘁𝗲𝗺 𝘄𝗵𝗶𝗰𝗵 𝘄𝗶𝗹𝗹 𝗰𝗵𝗮𝗻𝗴𝗲 𝘁𝗵𝗲 𝗽𝗮𝘁𝗵 𝘆𝗼𝘂’𝗹𝗹 𝘄𝗮𝗹𝗸.
Omg ! Thank you so much .
you are so sweet
Yeah sure it’s all based on your choices
I`ll check it out!!
I can’t find it… Whats the category?
I will try to send the link again.