I need script help ASAP!

I thought I fixed this but obviously not I was trying to use gains to decide a scene then return…

So…

Reader chooses training with yanny

if else code goes to yanny’s training,

Goto at the end takes us back to choice,

Reader chooses training with laurel

If else code is MEANT to go to laurel’s training,

goto at the end which takes back.

HELP

(Please someone help, I am due to release this story tomorrow but I can’t release if it is going to do this…)

Tag people who might be able to help PLEASE!

(I am looking for a way to fix WITHOUT me having to re-write any of my dialog or scenes, So if possible please help me fix without messing with the dialog/scene)

Script

EXT. FULL LUNA MOON - NIGHT

@transition fade in black

@ROSA enters from left to screen center AND ROSA is dance_salsa AND ROSA faces left

    ROSA (talk_handsonhips)
Hello beautiful humans!
        
    ROSA (talk_gesture)
Have a random quote!

    ROSA (talk_arms_crossed_loop)
We don't all have the luxury of time,
So what we choose to do with that time,
Makes life all the more special.

@ROSA is flirt_coy

    ROSA (talk_think)
Would you like a recap of last episode?

choice “Yes, I wish for a recap” {

@transition fade out black

EXT. BRICK WALL with EXT. FIREFLIES - NIGHT

&YANNY spot 1.280 201 -18 AND LAUREL spot 1.280 283 -28 AND YANNY faces left AND YANNY is talk_think AND LAUREL faces left AND LAUREL is arms_crossed

&EMILY stands screen left AND EMILY is talk_confused_mind_blown AND EMILY faces right

&YANNY moves to layer 1 AND LAUREL moves to layer 2

if (UniformOne) {

@EMILY changes into UniformOne

} else {

@EMILY changes into UniformTwo

}

@transition fade in black

    EMILY (talk_confused_mind_blown)
What! But what about the house and school, I can't just leave!

    YANNY (talk_shrug)
It would all be taken care of,

    YANNY (talk_apathetic)
Also if you don't then I have to run our society,

    LAUREL (talk_arms_crossed)
Like hell you are, we'd be exposed and burning on a fire in minutes..

    YANNY (laugh_giggle)
Knowing me, I believe you.

@transition fade out black

@transition fade in black

@YANNY is deepbreath

    LAUREL (talk_sheepish)
Are you okay yanny?

@YANNY is deepbreath

@pause for a beat

@YANNY changes eyesColor into White

@pause for a beat

@YANNY is scream

@pause for a beat

@YANNY is deepbreath

    EMILY (talk_startled)
What happened to her eyes?

    LAUREL (talk_arms_crossed)
Don't worry, A spirit is using her as a gateway from the realm of shades.

@transition fade out black

EXT. CAIRO STREET - NIGHT

&NYNA spot 0.587 69 358 AND ELIZA spot 0.539 176 370 AND AYAME spot 0.545 140 371

&NYNA moves to layer -3 AND AYAME moves to layer -3 AND ELIZA moves to layer -3

&NYNA is talk_excited AND NYNA faces right AND AYAME faces left AND AYAME is talk_gossip AND ELIZA is talk_think AND ELIZA faces left

&EMILY spot 1.280 31 -26 AND EMILY is raise_hand AND EMILY faces right

&YANNY spot 1.280 202 -35 AND YANNY is raise_hand AND YANNY faces left

&LAUREL spot 1.280 278 -38 AND LAUREL is raise_hand AND LAUREL faces left

&YANNY moves to layer 0 AND EMILY moves to layer 1 AND LAUREL moves to layer 2

if (UniformOne) {

@EMILY changes into UniformOne

} else {

@EMILY changes into UniformTwo

}

@YANNY changes eyesColor into Auburn

@transition fade in white

@EMILY is talk_exhausted AND AYAME is talk_arms_crossed_loop

    EMILY (talk_exhausted)
I-I don't feel so..

@EMILY faces left AND EMILY is barf AND ELIZA is talk_read_phone_neutral_loop

@EMILY is barf

@EMILY faces right AND EMILY is talk_exhausted

    YANNY (talk_sheepish)
I forgot to mention that you get sick the first couple times,

@LAUREL is disappointed

@transition fade out black
} “No need to have a recap” {

@transition fade out black

}

INT. MODERN MANSION - NIGHT

@cut to zone 2

&VERA stands screen center AND VERA faces left AND VERA is dustoff_loop

@cut to zone 1

&EMILY stands screen left AND EMILY is raise_hand AND EMILY faces right

&LAUREL stands screen right AND LAUREL is raise_hand AND LAUREL faces left

@transition fade in white

@pause for 2

@LAUREL is think AND EMILY is laugh_giggle

@YANNY enters from left to screen center AND YANNY is run_jog AND YANNY faces right

    YANNY (talk_angry)
DAMMIT!

    YANNY (talk_angry_defensive)
I was SO CLOSE TO THAT ALL YOU CAN EAT BISTRO!

    LAUREL (laugh_guffaw)
Maybe next time,

    LAUREL (talk_arms_crossed)
Anyways it's time,

@LAUREL faces right

@YANNY is curtsey AND LAUREL is curtsey

@EMILY is talk_sheepish

@VERA is eat_cupcake

@pan to zone 2

    NARR
Your Highness,

@VERA is shocked

@VERA is cough

    VERA (talk_arms_crossed)
Hello Emily Aristotem, I've been expecting you.

@transition fade out black
@transition fade in black

    NARR
Episode 3 - Spellbound

    VERA (talk_arms_crossed)
I trust the girls told you of your true nature, Am I ccorrect?

@cut to zone 1

    EMILY (talk_awkward)
Yes your highness,

@pan to zone 2
VERA (talk_apathetic)
Hush child, call me Aunt Vera,

    VERA (talk_arms_crossed)
After all you are the true queen,

    VERA (talk_arms_crossed_loop)
I suspect you didn't have time to change dear,

@EMILY walks to screen left AND EMILY faces right

    EMILY (talk_awkward)
We had to teleport, A spirit possessed yanny,

    VERA (talk_startled)
My goodness, What happened?

    EMILY (talk_sad_timid)
It was the spirit of my childhood bestfriend silvia,

    YANNY
Silvia appeared to had died to a siren mother.

    VERA (talk_sad)
I see..

    VERA (dustoff_loop)
However fate only moves forward not back and so shall we,

@VERA is think AND EMILY is deepbreath

    VERA (talk_arms_crossed)
I will take you to your new room emily,

    VERA (talk_gesture)
When you have settled in then training can begin,

@VERA exits right AND VERA faces right AND VERA is walk_trudge

@EMILY exits right AND EMILY faces right AND EMILY is walk_talk_happy

@transition fade out black

@cut to zone 1

&LAUREL faces left AND LAUREL is talk_arms_crossed_loop AND YANNY faces right AND YANNY is talk_gossip AND YANNY moves to layer 0 AND LAUREL moves to layer 1

@pause for 2

@transition fade in black

INT. MODERN BEDROOM - DAY

@transition fade in black

@VERA enters from right to screen left AND VERA faces left AND VERA is walk_trudge

@VERA faces right AND VERA is arms_crossed

@pause for 3

@EMILY enters from right to screen right AND EMILY faces left AND EMILY is walk_exhausted

    EMILY (talk_exhausted)
Why do you even need that many stairs?

@VERA is laugh_giggle

    EMILY (talk_think)
Can't you just teleport up here?

@VERA is laugh_crack_up

    VERA (talk_apathetic)
Sorry dear, But I prefer walking to being lazy..

    VERA (talk_handsonhips)
Plus I never said you couldn't teleport here.

@EMILY is disappointed

    VERA (talk_gesture)
I will let you get aquainted with your room.

    EMILY (talk_sheepish)
Thanks aunt vera.

    VERA (talk_suggest)
You're welcome!

@VERA exits right AND VERA faces right AND VERA is walk_trudge

@EMILY is think

@EMILY is admire

    EMILY (blush)
This room is incredible!

@EMILY is think

@EMILY is talk_think

    EMILY (talk_think)
(I will have to thank aunt vera for her generosity..)

@EMILY is think

    EMILY (talk_think)
Hey what's that?

@EMILY is walk_trudge AND EMILY walks to screen left AND EMILY faces left

@EMILY is kneel_reach

@EMILY is talk_read_paper

    EMILY (talk_read_paper)
Dearest emily,

    EMILY (talk_read_paper)
I trust everything is to your liking,

    EMILY (talk_read_paper)
We hope you enjoy grandma luna's room, as we thought it would be a nice way to be close to her once more,

    EMILY (talk_read_paper)
Me and Yanny both wish to start training with you,

    EMILY (talk_read_paper)
I will be training you how to make lights appear and yanny will be teaching you to tame the elements to begin with,

    EMILY (talk_read_paper)
We both have prepared outfits for you, To put them on raise your hand and say Changeous Elementus or Changeous Litageon,

    EMILY (talk_read_paper)
We will start training with whatever outfit you choose, Then you change again at the other's training.

    EMILY (talk_read_paper)
Love from Laurel Flarox.

@EMILY is flirt_shy

    EMILY (talk_handsonhips)
They are so sweet, I shouldn't keep them waiting,

label trainchoice

    EMILY (talk_think)
(Which training should I head too?)

choice [shouldPaginate: YES]
“Laurel’s training!” {

@EMILY is raise_hand

    EMILY
Changeous Litageon!

@transition fade out white

@zoom on 167 0 to 346% in 0

&EMILY stands screen center

@EMILY changes into Light_Training

&EMILY is strike_a_pose

@transition fade in white

@zoom on 155 377 to 204% in 5

@zoom reset

goto LaurelConfirm

} “Yanny’s training!” {

@EMILY is raise_hand

    EMILY
Changeous Elementus!

@transition fade out white

@zoom on 167 0 to 346% in 0

&EMILY stands screen center

@EMILY changes into Element_Training

&EMILY is strike_a_pose

@transition fade in white

@zoom on 155 377 to 204% in 5

@zoom reset

goto YannyConfirm

} “I’ve attended both trainings!” {

}

label LaurelConfirm

    EMILY (admire)
This is beautiful!

    EMILY (talk_shrug)
But do I really want to train with Laurel?

choice [shouldPaginate: YES]
“Yes!” {

    EMILY (talk_think)
Time to train with laurel!

readerMessage You’ve gained laurel’s training gear!

gain Light_Training

@transition fade out black

goto ifelsecode

} “No!” {

goto trainchoice

}

label YannyConfirm

    EMILY (admire)
This is beautiful!

    EMILY (talk_shrug)
But do I really want to train with Yanny?

choice [shouldPaginate: YES]
“Yes!” {

    EMILY (talk_think)
Time to train with yanny!

readerMessage You’ve gained Yanny’s training gear!

gain Element_Training

@transition fade out black

goto ifelsecode

} “No!” {

goto trainchoice

}

label ifelsecode

@transition fade in black

@EMILY is blow_kiss

@transition fade out white

if (Light_Training) {

INT. ENCHANTED UNDERWATER CAVE

@cut to zone 2

&LEVI stands screen right AND LEVI faces left AND LEVI is scream

@cut to zone 1

&LAUREL stands screen right AND LAUREL is raise_hand AND LAUREL faces left

&EMILY stands screen left

&EMILY is startled_surprised

&EMILY faces right

@EMILY changes into Light_Training

@transition fade in white

@EMILY faces left AND EMILY is barf

@pause for a beat

@EMILY faces right AND EMILY is talk_exhausted

    EMILY (talk_exhausted)
I will never get used to teleportation..

    LAUREL (talk_think)
Well you didn't vomit on Vera when we teleported to central,

    LAUREL (talk_shrug)
I've had worse, I got turned into a dog by a baby witch and had to teleport as a dog..

    LAUREL (laugh_giggle)
Yanny thought I was a werewolf and almost cursed me,

@EMILY is idle_jawdrop

@EMILY is laugh_giggle
@EMILY is laugh_guffaw

    EMILY (talk_apathetic)
I can see yanny doing that.. xD

    LAUREL (deepbreath)
..

    LAUREL (talk_arms_crossed)
Alright, you're going to light this cave.

    EMILY (talk_startled)
What! How?

    LAUREL (talk_gesture)
Raise your hand and speak the phrase "Illumina Maximo",

@EMILY is deepbreath

    EMILY (talk_think)
Alright, seems simple enough!

    EMILY (raise_hand)
Illumina Maximo!

@transition fade out white

INT. ENCHANTED UNDERWATER CAVE with EXT. FIREFLIES - NIGHT

@zoom reset

@cut to zone 2

&LEVI stands screen right AND LEVI faces left AND LEVI is scream

@cut to zone 1

&LAUREL stands screen right AND LAUREL is arms_crossed AND LAUREL faces left

&EMILY stands screen left

&EMILY is raise_hand

&EMILY faces right

@EMILY changes into Light_Training

@transition fade in white

    LEVI (scream)
AHHHHH...

@EMILY is talk_startled AND LAUREL faces right AND LAUREL is talk_arms_crossed_angry

@pan to zone 2

    LEVI (talk_arms_crossed_angry)
Could you turn the light off, I have sensitive eyes.

@pan to zone 1 AND LEVI walks to screen right AND LEVI faces left AND LAUREL faces right

@LAUREL is arms_crossed_angry

    LAUREL (talk_angry)
Emily, stay behind me!

@LAUREL walks to screen center AND LAUREL faces right AND LAUREL is walk_trudge AND LEVI walks to screen right AND LEVI is walk_exhausted AND LEVI faces left
EMILY (talk_excited)
Oh my gosh it’s you!

@LAUREL is talk_startled AND LAUREL faces left

    LAUREL (talk_confused_mind_blown)
What, you know each other!?!

    LAUREL (talk_arms_crossed_angry)
Okay, where do you know him from.

    EMILY (talk_sheepish)
He saved my life from a wolf named dante,

    LEVI (talk_think)
(It's her but why is she with a witch?)

    LAUREL (talk_doubtful)
I don't see why a vampire would protect you unle-

@LAUREL is dismayed AND EMILY is talk_unsure

@LAUREL faces right AND LAUREL is talk_arms_crossed_angry

    LAUREL (talk_arms_crossed_angry)
You didn't did you?

    EMILY (talk_awkward)
Do what?

    LEVI (talk_arms_crossed)
I can't help it..

    EMILY (talk_exhausted)
Someone care to explain?

    LEVI (talk_arms_crossed)
I will gladly explain, once I can see.

@LAUREL is raise_hand

@transition fade out white

INT. ENCHANTED UNDERWATER CAVE

&EMILY stands screen left AND EMILY is talk_exhausted AND EMILY faces right AND LAUREL stands screen center AND LAUREL is raise_hand AND LAUREL faces right AND LEVI stands screen right AND LEVI faces left AND LEVI is arms_crossed

@transition fade in white

    LAUREL (disappointed)
I can't believe I just helped a vampire,

    LEVI (talk_shrug)
Me either really,

@LEVI is laugh_chuckle AND LAUREL is laugh_chuckle

@EMILY is disappointed

@EMILY is cough AND LAUREL faces left

    LAUREL (talk_exhausted)
Oh right,

    LEVI (talk_arms_crossed_loop)
I am a vampire,
We have sensitive eyes and suck on blood, Although I am vegetarian..

    LAUREL (eyeroll_subtle)
(SURE..)

    EMILY (shush)
(LAUREL!)

@LEVI is cough

    LEVI (talk_arms_crossed)
I have the gift of mind-reading..

    LAUREL (talk_awkward)
Oops..

    LEVI (talk_apathetic)
And I became soul-bound to her upon meeting her in the forest..

    LEVI (talk_flirt)
Not to brag but I did humiliate a werewolf trying to claim her in the name of mate in the forest..

@EMILY is faint AND LAUREL faces left AND LAUREL is talk_startled

@EMILY is stand_up

@EMILY is talk_exhausted

    EMILY (talk_exhausted)
Okay, this is a lot process,

    EMILY (talk_awkward)
What does soul-bound mean?

    LAUREL (talk_handsonhips)
Similar to a werewolf being able to mate, vampires can be soul-bound..

    LAUREL (talk_shrug)
Meaning they're under a sort of spell where they can not stop thinking about their soul-bound half,

    LAUREL (talk_apathetic)
However it is not forced, So if you don't wish to be with him you don't have too..

    LAUREL (laugh_giggle)
But you will practically get stalked by them as they try to keep you from harm until the day it fails,

    LEVI (talk_arms_crossed_angry)
HEY!

@LAUREL faces right

    LAUREL (talk_apathetic)
Hey yourself, you know it's true.

    LEVI (eyeroll)
I'll let you have that one,

@LAUREL is primp

    LAUREL (talk_think)
We should go now but you guys should swap information,

    EMILY (talk_handsonhips)
As surprised as I am to hear those words come from my own cousins mouth,

    EMILY (talk_exclaim_yes)
I totally agree..

    EMILY (talk_notepad_neutral)
Here is my number and name..

@EMILY is talk_gesture AND LEVI is talk_read_paper

@EMILY is think

    EMILY (talk_startled)
WAIT!

@LEVI is think

    EMILY (talk_handsonhips)
I never got your name!

@LEVI is laugh_chuckle

    LEVI (blow_kiss)
It's levi, Levi hunters.

@LAUREL is raise_hand

@transition fade out white

goto trainchoice

} else {

EXT. MARSH - SUNSET

@pause for a beat

&EMILY stands screen left AND EMILY is talk_startled AND EMILY faces right AND YANNY stands screen center AND YANNY faces left AND YANNY is raise_hand

@transition fade in white

@EMILY is barf AND YANNY is talk_confused_mind_blown

    YANNY (talk_confused_mind_blown)
EMILY, THESE WERE NEW SHOES!

    EMILY (disappointed)
Glad to know where your priorities lie.

    YANNY (eyes_closed)
I'm going to act like that didn't happen..

@YANNY is disappointed

    YANNY (talk_arms_crossed)
Well now my shoes stink.

    EMILY (talk_awkward)
Sorry Yanny,

    YANNY (talk_handsonhips)
Let's just get started so we can wash my boots,

    EMILY (laugh_giggle)
Alright,

    YANNY (talk_neutral)
First we will walk on water,

}

@RudeInception, @JemU776, @Jade.epi?

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Thankyou for tagging people. (This just goes to show, if you leave things till last minute then your gonna end up with errors… xD) Stays awake till midnight, writing.

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I don’t blame you I’m supposed to be publishing my story on Christmas Eve to.

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What’s your story called? :smiley:

My Disease, Yours

That sounds interesting! Mine is called “A magical kind of love” It’s about a girl who lost her family in a tragic accident finding out her grandma was a powerful witch who gave her own life force to save her grandaughter, The MC emily. Then is brought to her grandma’s witching society when she falls in love with a vampire and a werewolf however the witching society have rules against it.

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Sounds Juicy

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xD Hopefully, I mean she meets both LI’s in ep 1 when the vamp saves her from being mated with a wolf. xD AND THAT WOLF happens to be the other LI which is the werewolf. LEVI - vamp / Dante - werewolve.

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Right

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What is the error on the portal? And have you reset your story progress on the app to test this? The web preview won’t pick up gains. On the app, after you have gained a flag, even if you ‘update script’ or restart the chapter and pick another choice, you will still have the first flag. Lemme know :slight_smile:

Well I need help when I try to fix something then other things happened

What happened first was on both it wouldn’t let me get past the choice where it was like “Do you really want to train with laurel” Over and over yet there was no loop… And then I fixed that by adding a label that brought it to the start of the if/else code (Not INSIDE of it…) so that worked but then after playing laurels story and having that loop back up to the choose yanny or laurel again… I clicked yanny and it went to laurel’s training… :confused: On both mobile and computer.

You need to reset your story progress on the app - because you gained laurels flag, you will automatically play this branch until it is reset. I’ve read through the script a few times and I can definitely see how you’re trying to do it, I don’t see any obvious errors apart from that.

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Yeah I saw what you mean! Thankyou for your help!