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Okay, here’s my review:
Review
I suggest you tell why you made Sophia look like that and what they should keep.
Okay, I was too late, but timing when he punched her was wrong. Do this:
@ALPHA is punch_give AND SOPHIA is punch_receive
This will make them do it the same time.
I also don’t like it that you never put dots at the end.
This spot is kinda weird.
Also this spot.
In general, I don’t like it that there’s almost no story, if you know what I mean. Everything happens too fast. (no offence) But I like the plot.
Okay, Thank you for being honest, now I know what to work on before I publish, again, thank you
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