The hijabs don’t work well with the hair style your characters have.
Sh!t and any curse word now needs to be censored with an *
When she runs to her bed instead of a diagonal line she goes straight and then back while doing the animation
When she exits from here she goes up to the left instead of straight left
Instead of “advanced” it should be advance
I don’t know if she means “missed” because she doesn’t isn’t emotional or if you mean I miss you as in she still misses them but doesn’t show it.
This entering scene was a little bit akward maybe have Nichole come first?
These were just the things I could find
The plot of your story is really interesting when you update I’ll definitely read more!