I need your feedback!

Hello! Can someone please give me some feedback about the Grammar and English in my story?

Title: to the stars and further
Author: fatima
Genre: romance

Story description: You are sexy, rich, smart and desired by every single man. Mark, the only one who will love you unconditionally. But how strong his love will be in front of your past?

Link of story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4520226729099264
Instagram: @fatima.episode1

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