@camsxnutella
So I’ve read your story so far
Here my review:
E1 - E3
- Directing: You’re doing a great job here so far. Here are my suggestions for this section:
- Speed -> Sometimes the characters walk a little bit fast, for the given scene. Try to slow them down a little bit by writing: walks to (position) in (number).
- Animations: Try to give an animation to each sentence when the characters are speaking to each other. Also avoid that they talk without any text… it looks a bit strange. When the characters are moving from one spot to another, make sure to add a walking animation to it with the command “AND is (walk animation)”.
- Spot placement: Pay attention to the layers of the characters. It looks a little weird if a character walks over another character. To apply a layer just write : (Character) moves to (desired layer).
- Overlays: Make sure the overlay suits the size of your characters.
- Sound: I really like how you applied the sound effects and music.
- Content: I really like the story so far, you’re making a great job in storybuilding by motivating the reader to read more of your story. Also I like the humour of the story, it made me chuckle a couple of times. Maybe it wouldn’t be so bad if you would make a short introduction of the characters when they appear in your story. Not their whole life, but a short character description and maybe in which relation they are with your MC.
I hope I could help you a bit. And don’t stress yourself too much about it, everybody needs practice at first, but I’m sure you will get better and better with practice.
Your story has great potential, keep it going
@Brooklyn_writes
Sure, no problem
Hey,
I would love to read your story. Maybe you can give my story a try too.
Titel: Wherever I go
Author: Alisha Sophie
Genre: Romance and a lot of drama
Description: Mia and her twin brother Cody lost everything. They try to get their lives back on track, but it ens in a lot of heartache and drama. Will everything be all right in the end?
Instagram: episode.alishasophie
Link: episodeinteractive.com/s/4613203588415488
@Brooklyn_writes
Hi there
Great I will make sure to read it ^^
Just have a little patience for I have a couple of reviews to write. But I will read yours as soon as possible!
Thanks a lot!^^
Great, don’t worry! I’ll read you story as soon as possible.
@Liqingluv
Hi^^
Sure, I will give it a read. Just note that it will take a little time before I’m done with the previous reviews. I hope I can read yours soon. ^^
Thanks a lot!
@Victoria_Smith
Hey there
Great I will give it a read, as soon as I’m able to, because there are some reviews I have to write first. I’m looking forward to read your story.
Thank you very much!
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@Gracex
Hi
Sure, I will give it a read. Maybe you have to wait for a bit because I’m currently writing some reviews, but I will surely read and review yours as well.^^
Thanks a lot!
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@issy.episode
Hi there^^
Sure, I will read it.
It may just take a little time until I get to read it, but I will read it for sure.^^
Thank you very much!^^
@xime_episode
Aww thanks a lot^^
Okay I will post it here when I’m done with your review.
@Misstory
Hi there!
Thank you very much^^
Sure, I will read it.
Do you want a PM or can I post your review in the feed?^^
@Alisha.Sophie
Hey there^^
Great, I will give it a read as soon as I get to it.^^
Do you want a review in the feed or as PM?
Thanks a lot!
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PM would be great
Thank you so much!
Hi, thanks for reading it. I apologise is advance for any mistakes or directing blunders, I’m very new to this .
I don’t mind where you post the review, which ever is easiest for you.
Hi Arethriel , thanks again for reading my story if you don’t mind could you please PM some feedback so I know what I need to work on.
I would love feedback on my demo story!
Title: Choices (DEMO)
Author: Alan Richard
Episodes: 3 (Only first episode is the demo. The other two are blank.
Genre: Interactive, romance, mystery, adventure, thriller
Style: Limelight
Description: This demo is an LGBTQ story that takes direct inspiration from decision making games such as Until Dawn, The Walking Dead, and Life is Strange to name a few. Step into Nate Bradey’s shoes as his entire fate lie in your hands. Your decisions dramatically alter how his life will play out. What fate will you give him?
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5797973347139584
Hi everyone. For those who loves a not so normal love story, please try out mine. The title is a bit cliche tough I swear the story’s not! Send me a fanmail or DM me on IG for feedbacks. Thanks!
Title: Puppy Love
Episode Name: Lou
Style: Limelight
Genre: Romance
Description: Jason caught himself in a CRAZY, complicated situation. Watch out on how he will handle his true feelings for Alli. Will he fall in love with his DOG??
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5630801559027712
Follow me on IG: @authorlou.episode
@Misstory
No problem dear
We all begin somewhere, don’t we?
I will write you a PM ok?
@Richardalan
Hi there
Sure I will give it a read. ^^
The concept sounds promising, I will inform you when I have your review ready.
What form would you like? PM or feed?
Thanks a lot!^^