I will rewiew your storyyyyy 😊 (CLOSED)

HEYYY GUYSSSS :two_hearts: So i’m really bored right now, so i’ve told myself why i do not do a rewiew for Authors :thinking:. I Love to help :hugs: so they could improve. Just tell me your Story Link and description if you want :two_hearts::blush:

So i also want enlighten a few things :

  • i’m really honest person, so i’ll say what i don’t like in your Story, what you should do, to improve and for sure i’ll say positive as well, of course :slightly_smiling_face:

  • i will only read the FIRST Episode of your Story.

  • i will also shoot Screenshot for Security, if you do not belive me…

So now a few RULES on it :
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  • No DRAMA !

  • please have Patient !

  • Be Nice

  • to 25 Rewiews, i will close !

where I give a rewiew:
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  • First Impression :fairy:‍♀
  • Description :fairy:‍♀
  • Directing :fairy:‍♀
  • Zoom :fairy:‍♀
  • Sound effecte :fairy:‍♀
  • Speeling mistakes :fairy:‍♀
  • Outfits :fairy:‍♀
  • Animation :fairy:‍♀
  • Overlay’s :fairy:‍♀

Or you could tell me what exactly i should give a rewiew on your story… of course i will do these all but you could add another one i should rewiew, if you want :sparkling_heart::blush:

Waiting list:
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So I hope you agree, and let me give your Story a Rewiew :heart: thx :hugs:

EDIT: HEY GUYS SO I WILL ONLY DOING THESE STORYS WHO ARE ON THE WAITING LIST, AND THEN CLOSE THIS. SORRY.

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I’d love a review. Thank you :heart:

Title: Oblivious
Genre: Comedy
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Episodes: 13 (on-going)
Description: When socially awkward Leanna catches the eye of equally awkward Kai things can’t get more awkward, can they?
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Sure !:blush: i will Start now .

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Title: Capture the Moment
Author: Karlon Artis
Genre: Comedy
Description: Takoda is a photographer who inspires to become freelance and expand his portfolio. Can he snapshot his way to success?
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5666941859397632

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I would love a review!

Title: The Princess Of Fiore
Chapters: 10 (more coming soon)
Genre: Romance (has a bit Action)
Style: INK
Author: inkkee
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6074505541582848
Description: An 18-year old princess whose life got turned around on the night of her 18th birthday. What exactly happened that fateful night ? What will happen once she falls in love with a non royal boy?
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Also I would love it if you could give me the review on DM

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I’d love a review.
Here’s my first story.:see_no_evil::relaxed:
Title: Alone without knowing it
Author: Cheris
Genre: Action, Fantasy
Style: Ink
Description: You live a happy life with your family until you find out that you’re part of a mafia, related to a murderer that killed her own sister and you have to kill her.
Episodes: 6 (more coming soon)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5273213461921792
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Title: Adventurous: New Heights
Author: Madeline M-W
Genre: Action/ Adventure
Style: Ink
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6049511220248576
Summary: A fun winter camping trip with your friend goes horribly wrong. It is up to you to make sure that everyone survives. Will you make the right decisions? (multiple endings) (CC)

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hey, so I just read the first episode of your story and I have to say I like it, but I found some stuff that I’d like to tell you:

first the zoom for example in this picture:

in many scenes the zooms are more distant and sometimes too close, you know? in some scenes, but you would like to zoom in here for example here :

that would be better.

so the second thing:

It would be much more motivated to read the story, if it were sound effect in it, because I love when the stories have sound effects. but it is your decision to add it :blush:

the third thing:

your grammar was very good, but you have only a few small mistakes as in the beginning to put that comma, and spelling you have no mistakes.

So i like your Story :blush: and i Love the Charakter. Keep writing your Story.

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Thank you. I will work on the zooms.
I really dislike the sound selection but I have added it to my next story I’m working on for a better experience.

Thank you.

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Okey, and no Problem :hugs:

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Moved to Share Feedback since this is for reviews. Make sure to check out our Forum Tutorial for more info about where to correctly create topics, and feel to PM me if there are any questions. :wink:

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hey :grin: so i just got read the first episode of your story, and well …

first the not so good things …

somehow the scenen in your story go too fast, suddenly he was in a room, after that in a few seconds in another, finally your story ended. So make your scenes longer possible? and you also added some choices that were not necessary …

Good things:
For your first episode, you have made many choices for the readers and that’s good :grinning:

Your gramatik was good too.

so your first chapter was okey :blush: keep writing.

Okey :grin: i will read your Story now.

REWIEW:

Summary

I read your story, and I have to say the first episode was not so good…

first, the character placements, they are really not good, you also saw that you have difficulties with it, for example, here you can see it …


and they are in their same positions all the time when a new scene comes.
you still have to learn that.

second, your story is really just too fast…
the scenen you really does not know what is going on?

and you could not talk while the two men talk, that the woman is doing an animation, you know? I think with the zoom you have a little scrape. and you also have some gramatik mistakes but, you also said that you do not live in an english state.

and in your first episode somehow not exciting happened, because the first episode is the first impression you know?

but I know the difficulties and do not worry you will get better :wink:, and hope you continue writing your story :hugs:

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I’ll read the rest tomorrow, because it’s late for me and I have school tomorrow :grin:
So good night guys :hugs::night_with_stars:

Name of Story: Him and I

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5237187848568832

Episode account: J Mo

Genre: Dark Romance/Action

Description: Everything was going wrong until your prince charming came along, well that’s what you thought. With time, your “Prince charmings” dark secrets came to the surface and you’ve realized that he is not the guy you thought he was. Instead, he is a dangerous gang member who claimed you and now you’re living a dangerous lifestyle. Will you risk your life in the name of love?

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i would love a review if you don’t mind! thank you! :grin::heart:

Title: Mystery on Hanging Hill Lane
Author: Marshmallow O.
Genre: Mystery, Romance, Comedy (Thriller)
Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6250660385652736
Summary: It’s a race against time as you and your friends try to escape the mysterious sleepover that you were invited to… Read to uncover the Mystery on Hanging Hill Lane.

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Chapters: 5 (More to come)

Full CC/Choices Matter/Point System/Advanced Directing!:blush:

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Story name Vip Brother:Love is…
Authors name Megz_episode
Episodes 4
Instagram name megz_episode7997
How many episode you want me to review 4 are enough
Description A story about 16 celebrities who enter the house of Big Brother uder 24/7 surveillance for 2 months to win the prize of 500 000$, but before that they have to go through all challenges of Big Brother.
I would like you to promote my story.
Style LL
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Link http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4977128782561280
Here is my story, I hope you’ll like it!

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My story: © Tribe of Malapinchi
Author: Jannah Jackson
Genre: Thriller/Mystery/Horror/Fantasy/Adventure
Description: Toss into a land of the sun, magic, lies and dark secrets in Asia. Can you survive, solve the havoc and save everyone before it’s too late? CharacterCustomization
Episodes: 5/6
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5909308359180288

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Title: Blurred Lines
Author: Ellie
Genre: Romance
Description: After an intense break up, Quinn enters the world of no strings attached dating. What happens when it turns out there are strings after all, and she’s completely tangled in them?
Episodes: It’s unpublished - 2 completed, 3 almost complete.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4833334534668288

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Thank you! :slight_smile:

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