I'd love some feedback for my new horror story


#1

My story’s link is : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5137741814038528
The name : Exorcism Of Phoebe
Description: Phoebe didn’t think her desires would come true, and that thought led her to do a ritual to Lucifer from Hell. With the help of Seven Deadly Sins, can she beat the Lucifer?
Episodes: Read 1 and 2 only.
Fanmail is appreciated.
Keep it nice people.


#2

You can check out my thread here: A Review For A Read!

Winter :snowflake:


#3

Well, you want feedback, we will give it to you, with some critism, you have to learn to take .


#4

Constructive criticism is welcome. However story’s topic is sensitive. So before going ahead and telling me to learn stuff, you should’ve read the description. It has a lot of religion in it.


#5

Alright. I might read it, but since I don’t have a phone ( I maaaaaay have broke it) I can’t really go on Episode, but when I get the chance, I will!!


#6

Alright, thank you :slight_smile:


#7

I’ll read it, but I can only read Episode 1 because I’ve ran out of passes.


#8

It’s only 2 episodes anyway, don’t worry :slightly_smiling_face:


#9

I just finished Episode 1, and it’s pretty good! It was very interesting! However, that picture at the beginning was there for a bit too long, so (if possible) you could make it last for a shorter period of time. Some readers may be quite impatient, and wait for a little bit then click off.


#10

#11

Topic closed due to one month of inactivity.