I'll give you a detailed review of your stories! (CLOSED UNTIL I CATCH UP WITH REQUESTS)

Hey! So I would love to review your stories, I’ll give you a score out of 5 and any comments on how to make your story better in any way. Here’s what I’d be grading you on:
Grammar (1-5)
Directing (1-5)
Plot (1-5)
Length (1-5)
Cover (1-5)
I’ll read between 3-5 episodes of your story, maybe more if it’s really interesting :blush:

This isn’t to make you feel bad in any way, but to help you improve as a writer on Episode

You don’t have to, but here’s my story if you want to give it a read, especially if you’re into dystopian fiction. No pressure though! Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6665862366625792
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Hi, @natalie81400 !

Thank you very much for creating this thread, this is very kind of you! Constructive criticism is exactly what I am looking for!

Dystopian future also sounds like my kind of vibe, so I have added your story to favourites :slight_smile:

If you are interested in reading a story with several mini-games and where CHOICES REALLY MATTER then, please, give my story a try. I promise, the story will keep you hooked :blush: Episode advocates recommended! (which has made me insanely happy. Go check their account for awesome recommendations if you haven’t yet!)

My story details:

Name of story: H & V: Fate
Author: Alex Af
Genre: Thriller
Episodes: 4 (completed)
Summary of story: Young ambitious journalist hunting down a powerful tycoon who has made a fortune based on lies. But who really is a villain here? Choices matter.
Link to story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6548486212681728
Instagram: @episode.alex.af

I would love a review on my story

Title: First Love
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Genre: Romance
Stroy description: Love, Lies, and Betrayl watch Chay go through it all on her journey to find her first love!

Hi! This is my story!


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Title: I Married the Bad Boy
AUTHOR: Rahdia
Episodes 18 up (on going)
Plot: You play as Dylan a makeup artist in the entertainment industry. One day she meets her favorite childhood celebrity JD and after a misunderstanding the two become married. Can their marriage survive while dodging the press, love interest, ex-fiance’s and Dylan’s mother who is an important figure in the media?
LINK: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6734147080159232

Hello @natalie81400 !!! This is my first story on Episode and I wanted a review please!

And I will also read your story :slight_smile:
Thanks :heart:

Story title : Sandy and her Quadruplets
Author : R.J.
Genre : Comedy
Style : Ink
Completed : No (I wrote 9 episodes) :slightly_smiling_face:
Customization : No but it stills fun to read!
Description : How can she survive with noisy and disobedient quadruplets? Will she finally find the father of her sons ? Here’s the crazy life of Sandy and her quadruplets!
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5337323130716160

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Miss averys little secret
Ig: episode.hina
Author: hina : )
Episodes: 10 (ongoing)
Description: avery has been avoiding one thing her whole life, her past. What hapoens when jf all comes rushing back? Will her secret be told? Will the people she loves trust her?

Hey, I would love for you to review my story.:slight_smile:
So here’s the details to my story in case you want to check it out.
Author: SS
Title: Shattered Souls
Genre: Romance
Style: Ink
Description: What happens when two shattered souls find each other? Will love prevail? +18
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5150158950367232

Please check out my story - Retaliation (CHAPTER 9) IS OUT!!

Description: Rose simple life was destroyed after going against a powerful political family. Rose later stripped herself of her true identity and embraced her new identity as Kim Brown. Rose planned to destroy each and everyone that destroyed her.

Author: Saka Moshood Abiodun
Style: Ink
Sharelink: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5630965940879360

Hey thanks for this,

Name: Filling a void
Author: Amber Thompson
Genre: Romance
Episodes: 3
Link to story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4742249652682752
Instagram: amber__episode

Hey there, @natalie81400!

Thank you for reviewing our stories. Would you like to review mine?

Title: Your Secret Admirer
Author: EpisodeCray
Number of Episodes: 3
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4654341800198144
Additional Notes: Is it okay if you private message me the review instead?

Thank you for your time and I hope you’ll enjoy my story!

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Grammar: 4 (a few spelling problems, nothing major!)
Directing: 4
Plot: 3
Length 4
Cover: 3
Overall: 18/25= 72%
I really enjoyed the perspective of an ambitious struggling woman, and also the sarcastic commentary was great! The goal for the MC is very clear, although maybe you could put more emphasis on WHY the reader should care so much on being on the show. I enjoy that there are so many choices to guide the MC in her reactions, but perhaps you shouldn’t change the choices colors to make it obvious of which is the ‘good’ choice and which is the ‘bad’ choice. I LOVED the interactive ‘game’ with Mrs. Brown in the first episode, really well written! The episode length was a little long, but that makes sense when there’s only 4 total to the series. Overall the story is very honest, comical and I was very interested in what happens to the MC.

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Yes let’s do a R4R :slight_smile:
Title :Her secrets ,his sins
Author :Kls
Genre ;drama
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Description : Abuse and obsession are very real , what happens when college student Hayden cross paths with a twisted manipulative man who falls “crazy in love “ with her
Episode released : 6

Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5794213363056640

Omg im going to read that :slight_smile: looks so interesting

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Grammar: 5
Directing: 2
Plot: 3
Length: 3
Cover: 4
Overall: 17/25= 68%
This is definitely a good start! I would recommend that you use less text effects, they’re distracting from the actual context of the dialogue. When you introduce the characters, don’t introduce by them describing themselves with words, SHOW their personalities and back stories. I would LOVE to have seen Chay’s story as a back flash to really understand the importance of what she went to, as well as her personality. Also the party scene was a little odd since the background characters popped up at different times and then the scene began. To fix that you should first place them in their spots and then use the @CHARACTER starts… The speech bubbles are also stuck in one place during the first episode, which you can fix by putting @speechbubble reset. I’d also recommend that you put more time into showing Chay’s and Josh’s romantic growth before they get serious, that way when they kiss it feels more significant to the reader.

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Being a person of color myself I can relate haha so far so good tho :slight_smile:

Grammar: 5
Directing: 3.5
Plot: 3.5
Length: 4
Cover: 2
Overall: 18/25= 72%
I like how you introduced the MC, it’s very natural and you can tell her personality quite well with her actions and how she behaves. I would put however a more emphasis on her job and how she’s living as well as her status with her friends on the apartment. it’s kind of just let there to be forgotten. I would definitely invest in a better cover as the current one actually threw me off, if you can maybe make one without drawn on features like the sunglasses? The ‘morning after’ scene was a bit rushed, even if it was a "drunken night out’ emphasize that by showing them dancing together, so that the reader isn’t confused. I like the use of alternating perspectives, it’s something I like to use as well to give a unique way to tell the story.

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Hey! Thank you so much for creating this thread :blush: I’d love it if you could review my story. Here’s my story:

Title: Mad Love
Genre: Romance/Mystery
Author: Akanksha S.
Style: Ink
Episodes: 9 (ongoing)
Description: One day, you wake up and your mom is gone. Will you be able to find her in time and also true love along the way?

Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4736906335879168

Thanks :heart:

Thank you I will take this into consideration

Here is my story
Title: Break Down My Walls
Author: @moonlight123.episode
Genre: Action
Style: Ink
Description:You have your walls up. And no one ever comes in. But when you join a rebel gang, you feel attracted to the handsome leader. Can he melt your heart? Love, danger, lust awaits…
link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4509103137619968 1
Thank you for doing this and i will definitely check your story out as my story is also dystopian and i love that genre.

Kindly read my story :slight_smile:
And for info : I’m up for a read for read !
Message me :slight_smile:

Title : Paradise
Author : Maggy
Genre : Fantasy
Style : Limelight
Number of episodes : 4 (more episodes coming soon)
Instagram : maggy.episode
Description A young adult called Fidelia is about to become a Goddess, she has to follow the prophecy. Fidelia is strong and independent, fun, and a crazy party girl. Will she accept her faith?
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4807228412788736 1 1

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