So yesterday I just published episode 16 of my story. And I decided I that I deserve a break, bc why not?
So whilst I’m on my break I wanna read some new good quality stories that deserve waaay more views!
So drop your story down below and I’ll give it a read.
Please note: I will also be giving feedback, (honest feedback) after I have read 1-3 chapters of your story! So if you can’t handle the truth, don’t drop your story down below, please.
Also since y’all are here give mine a read too, and feel free to leave some feedback!
That’s awesome of you girl I just published my new story a few days ago:
Title: Poison for your Heart Author: Aykay Genre: Mystery/Romance Chapters: 15 (Season 1 complete), more coming soon Description: You’re a woman on a deadly mission. But what will you do if a determined EBI agent is on your tail? Can you fool him or will you not only lose your freedom but your heart? CM, CC Style: LL Small cover:
Title: Shado
Author: Roy
Description: After tragedy, Roy returns to civilization a changed women. She begins her crusade, determined to put things right, with the help of her trusted people,waging a one-woman on crime.
Genre : Action
Style: Ink
Chapters: 10 and ongoing
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5108744574074880
Here’s mine! Name: Arena Of Pride Genre/s: Drama filled with romance and comedy Author: Jelly
IG: @jelly.epi Episodes: 9 (more coming soon) Link:http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6418652016607232
Description:
The streets of Morocco are swimming in crime secrets. Accidentally - a twist of fate, drags Layla and her family deep down in the mafia world, where she meets Oscar Kebryak.
So I just finished episode 2
Feedback: I like how you’ve given really detailed flashbacks. The reader will connect as well as understand the MC’S personality traits.
You’re directing is quite good as some new stories I’ve read directions really annoy me.
I actually felt emotionally when the mother committed suicide and it is hard for many authors to get the reader to feel any kind of emotion.
However, you’re waaaay to generous with the episode lengths. In episode 2, it got to a point where I was like when will this episode end. Try to make your episodes within 8 to 10 mins.
Speaking of flashbacks, some readers don’t like too many flashbacks and may exit the story. I personally don’t mind them but you could consider flashing back as the story goes on instead of having 4 episodes dedicated *just * to flashbacks.
I didn’t think the reason the father beat sheilas mom was that logical, nor did I think it made sense for him to want to find her daughter so much. I don’t think that it made sense for him to be that bitter as she had already killed herself therefore, he should move on. (ill continue to read and maybe it’ll make sense.
Overall, I am intrigued by your story, well done hun.
Awesome feedback thank you so much. I respect your opinion.
For me I preferably read episodes with longer chapters, so 8-10 minutes isn’t really an option for me
And the the flashbacks aren’t really flashbacks in the regular sense, it’s part of the MCs story and essential
I’m glad you gave me such a good feedback and if you continue, you can give me feedback wether it will make sense to you now or not
Okay just finished episode 1.
Feedback: I love how you use so many complex overlays and manage to pull them off! It shows that you care about the quality of your story. I also think that your directing is really good and smooth, no glitches etc. I also really like the unique backgrounds that you use, some may not notice this but I did and I liked it.
I personally like to start the episode with the MC rather than another character. I think you should have done a flashback of the mc instead of Zara as the reader needs to learn more about the MC’S past rather than the side characters; especially in the first episode. When Zara and her brother were hugging and she was tearing up, I noticed that the face overlay used did not match her actual complexion, I just thought that I should let you know! Also, make sure that when using a bathroom overlay make the duplicate character the same size as Layla otherwise it won’t have the desired effect. That episode was also really long and I personally prefer episodes between 8 to 12 maximum mons. However as it was your first episode, I think people would prefer more content anyway. The flow of the episode was really good although I would have preferred more background info on the family as well as Layla
Overall, I think you’re story is really good and I’ll definitely continue to read babe.
Just finished episode 1.
Feedback: Okay, first of all your zooms and directing is amazing. You didn’t use the randomizer to create your background characters which I love to see as I despise when I see those horrid looking things!
As your first episode was pretty short, I didn’t really connect with the characters, nor did I know whether I was that psycho serial killer or the cute blond guy elliot.
So for that reason, I’d suggest trying to get the reader to know who the mc is in the first episode then develop our knowledge from there. That episode was definitely 4 or 5 minutes and I don’t tap too fast.
However, I WILL continue reading as I’ve never read a male mc story and I want to know why that guy kills people for no reason…
Good luck and keep up that awesome directing!
Just finished episode 1.
Feedback : You have an opportunity for readers to customizer their characters which many readers like me would appreciate as some readers like to visualise themselves in the shoes of the mc. You directing wasn’t glitchy which I also appreciated. You also gave a brief flashback of why Olivia (I used the default name) hated going to college everyday due to her brothers fame. I think that this episode was a little rushed and could have provided more detail (e.g, how the brother became famous, how the sister helped him etc.) I also think it should have been a little longer considering that you used a ‘few days later’ twice within the first episode readers should have got more insight into the life of the mc. Some commas were used in the wrong places meaning that there was no need for them. Also, you did use present tense instead of future and present instead of past at one point I think It was after the phone call, I can’t really recall. However I do remember that it was ‘will’ instead of ‘would’
I think that first episodes do give the reader an opinion on the story however, as I wanted to know who the girl at the end of the episode was, I will continue reading. Make sure you give your readers a reason to continue reading otherwise they won’t.
Good luck babe
I just published my new story a few days ago:
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