It was really quick but yeah, give it a check.
Your story was so well directed hun! 
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Also Iād like to say something to anyone who wishes to request/has requested for a review.
Please, make sure that you attach your story link in your post. It makes my life a lot easier as I have so many people to get through. Thank you 
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Haha yes! Silly typos! Thank you for catching that!
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Thank you so much for the feedback! Iāll read through the whole script and fix the mistakes.
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Hiya, just finished the first episode of your story.
Apologies for the wait.
Feedback: I liked how you gave the reader a chance for CC at the end of the episode so we could see how you had envisioned the characters. Your transitions were pretty good and I also liked when you gave an extremely detailed flashback so we could understand what caused Melody to feel so unhappy. I liked the fact that the Mc had a passion for singing as it isnāt your usual MC characteristic.
Improvements: When the Mc was supposed to be singing with a microphone there was no microphone in her hand. Maybe try using the prop for it and use the @add prop to CHARACTER command and it should work perfectly. Also, when you want a character to speak whilst off screen, instead of using the INT. BLACK - NIGHT background and using a narration bubble, you could simply move the character offscreen and position the speech bubble wherever you want as your method made it look a little messy. There were no full stops at the end of your sentences however, you could just remember to add them in future episodes and readers wonāt notice.
And I also wanted to ask whether there will be a female or male LI. At the start of the story, you did say that it was a lesbian story however, it seemed like the LI was a male. Do correct me if Iām wrong though .
Overall, your story has really good potential and I will surely continue to read.
Well done hun. 
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Youāre welcome babe.
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No prob hun.
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Iām promoting my story! I hope everyone likes my story!
Author: Cris
LL
Drama
IG: @episode.mt.writes
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4808225838006272
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Title: Squad: Thornvalley
Author: Briana M.
Genre: Mystery/Thriller
Chapters: 4 (ongoing)
Description: Senior year is supposed to be a year of excitement, ambition and fun. Not a year to solve a whole mystery! At least not for five students to solve!
Style: LL
Instagram: @brianam.stories
Small cover:
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Thanks for the thread!
Thatās mine.
Title: Broken Wolf
Author: anae
Description: You have been abused for 4 years. One day you escape just to run into territory of the most feared pack and hands of the most feared alpha, Noah. What will happen?
Genere: Fantasty
Chapters: 3 (more coming soon)
Style: LL
IG: @anae.episode
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5523281340989440
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Iāll get to everyoneās stories soon!
Please, bare with me as I want to give quality feedback so some peopleās stories will be reviewed tomorrow. 
Iāll be reading 3 or 4 more today so I can complete the updated waiting list and create a new one!
Thank you all for sharing your stories.
Hey hun, just finished the first episode of your story.
Just wanted to say that you should be really proud of writing it because it was amazingly directed.
Also, sorry for the wait! 
Feedback : I loved the way that you done your introduction, by showing the reader a little sneak peak of what Layla was going to do when she ran away. Your spot directing was amazing, and that tappable overlay menu was awesome too! Your zooms were also really good and so weāre all the backgrounds used. I liked how you created a sense of mystery by not telling the reader what Laylaās parents asked her to do. Your description of her parents were also great too!
Improvements : Iāll admit, these were extremely hard to find as your story was so amazing. However, I do like to find even the smallest improvements to make your story even better than it already is. First of all, I think that a few of the speech bubbles were slightly too small. Maybe make them a little bigger for people that struggle to see? Finally, I found one zoom too fast but I canāt really recall what scene it occurred in.
Overall, you should be absolutely pleased and satisfied with what you have written, as it was directed like a professional!
Great job boo! 
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**Title: The Bucket List (LL) **
Author : Sophie M.
Description : Noa is an ambitious girl from a small island, Asher is a cocky guy from New Yorkā¦ What happens when their worlds collide and they need each other?
Genre : Rom-Com
Style : LL
Special : I took a lot of time on directing this story and making sure everything is perfect! Also thereās full customization and your choices matter!
Chapters : 5 and going
Instagram : sophiemepisode
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6641738027565056
I would really appreciate if you gave my story a chance! I put in a lot of work to write it 
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Of course I will babe.
After I complete my current waiting list which should be completed in about half an hour, Iāll be creating my new waiting list and Iāll add you to it.
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Thank you!! 
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Hey hun, just finished the first episode of your story.
Apologies for the wait.
Feedback : I liked the story idea of Eden vs the Unprivileged. It was similar to a book which I really enjoyed. Your narration was really detailed and the way that you explained the history as well as showing the reader what it looks like to live and be on Eden compared to where the Mc lived was very detailed too. Your transitions were pretty good and there were no visible grammatical errors. You also gave a trigger warning which is excellent as many do not bother to do so.
Improvements: I think that you over done it with the narration at some points. There was very little dialogue between the characters compared to the amount of narration used in the story. Considering that it is supposed to be an interactive app, some readers may prefer more dialogue rather than narration. Also, some of the spot directing was a little awkward. The characters would increase in size when walking from one spit to another. You can use the spot directing tool to ensure that they walk to a spot the same height that they were. This isnāt an improvement but I got so pissed off when Aylinās roommate Edna basically left her with that creep. I know she was tipsy but I felt like slapping her across the face 
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I really did enjoy that episode as I love stories with detailed narration, so I will definitely continue to read.
Well done hun.
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Thank you so much for your detailed feedback! 
I appreciate it a lot that you pointed out many positive things. 
Apart from that, I will definitely have a look at the spot directing-thingy and try to make it look more realistic by changing character sizes etc. Thank you again, dear!
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I just published my first three chapters ever! Would love some input!!! Instagram @formydearreader
Title: Love Me Dead
Description: Having lost her memory, Alice seeks answers in a Town as mysterious as her past. As list and danger unfold, will the truth be more than she bargained for?
Genre: romance/mystery
Read here!
The Best Stories Are Worth Sharing: Love me Dead
Checkout this story, on the Episode App! If you like it, support the story by passing it along!
Hey lovely, just finished the first episode of your story.
Apologies for the wait.
Feedback: Great use of suspense for the end of your episode. I also loved Dianaās best friend. Considering that it was your first story, your spot directing wasnāt too bad as well. You gave the option for customization for the mc and LI which many would appreciate.
Episode length was also perfect for an introduction.
Feedback: There were quite a few grammatical errors however, Iām sure you can fix that in your upcoming episodes. Also, you really need to use transitions because it was just changing from scene to scene without any flow therefore, it made it look like the characters walked out of their living room and straight to the ship. Use transitions like @transition fade out/in black as they will help tour episode flow much more smoothly. Your character placement could use a little work as characters did pop up from one spot to another. Due to having no transitions, this did have an impact on the spots of the characters as they would appear out of nowhere.
However, your episode was generally good, just a few things which could be improved.
I would definitely continue reading though!
Well done hun. 
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Hi, I already acknowledged that you posted your story for me to read and I will definitely read it.
But could you please not pot it twice as I have to scroll all the way up to make sure I am reading everyoneās stories in the correct order and unnecessary posts make that a challenge.
I will be updating the waiting list after I read the final story on my current one so do take a look at that once posted.
Thank you.