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[Episode.percenitygf]

Hi here my story
Title: Finding Out The Real Truth
Author Name: Episode.percenitygf
**Chapters: **5 revamped (6-23 locked) **
Description: Kira have been having nightmares of her father being a gang leader but her mother has told her that he has passed away but then she finds out that her dreams where warning her
Style: Ink & Limelight coming soon
Instagram: Episode.percenitygf
Link http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5626790727254016

[tosinx]

Hey lovely, sure after I’ve gotten through my other requests I’ll give yours a read.
Also, I edited your description as there were a few errors.
Description: Kira has been having nightmares of her father being a gang leader, but her mother has told her that he has passed away. But what if her dreams were a warning all along…?

[Episode.percenitygf]

thank you I didn’t realize it

[tosinx]

It’s alright hun .

[Katherine_Gray]

Girl, that’s actually so thoughtful of you
I also published my new story a week ago, so here it is

WILDFLOWER

• romance/drama
• 5 uploaded chapters
• limelight style
• MC and LI customization
  Description: Kelsey is persuaded that playing a tough and off-limits girl will help her to stay away from drama. But there isn´t more magnetic thing than that. Am I right, Layton?

Here’s the cover (made by me for now lol )

[Gazza_Episode]

Hey! This thread is super helpful
Title: The Unknown
Author Name: Gazza
Chapters: 3
Description: Before the world ends, you and 4 others are teleported to an unknown planet where you find you have magical abilities. But when tit comes to tat, can you save both worlds in time?
Style: Limelight
Instagram: @Gazza_Episode
Link http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4998777703628800

[tosinx]

Hey honey!
I will definitely give it a read once I have gotten through the waiting list and those that have also requested previously.
And thank you!
Could you also attach your story link as it makes it easier for me?

[tosinx]

Thanks babe.
Once I walk my dog, and gonna be binge reading as I want to get through as many as I can today!

[Katherine_Gray]

Tysm! Yeah here’s the link:

The Best Stories Are Worth Sharing: Wildflower

[tosinx]

Thanks babe!

[charlottestories]

Thanks for the thread! Hope you give mine a read!

Title: Scarlet Rose
Author: Charlotte
Genre: Fantasy
Episodes: 7 (more coming soon)
Description: For 16 years, you are locked away from the world to hide your powers. What happens when you escape? Not every fairytale has a happy ending - will yours?
Includes:

• Advanced directing
• Full character customisation
• Point system (choices matter)
• Mini games

Style: Limelight
Link: https://episodeinteractive.com/s/5027860695023616
Instagram: @charlotte.episodes

[Gazza_Episode]

Recently released mine, hopefully you like it
Title: The Unknown
Author Name: Gazza
Chapters: 3
Description: Before the world ends, you and 4 others are teleported to an unknown planet where you find you have magical abilities. But when tit comes to tat, can you save both worlds in time?
Style: Limelight
Instagram: @Gazza_Episode
Link http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4998777703628800

[Callme_80]

Heyy!
TY for the thread
Title : Smoke Then Lollipops
Genre : RomCom - Fantasy
[Choices Matter]
Cover :

Large C:

Summary

Link

The Best Stories Are Worth Sharing: Smoke Then Lollipops

My Insta : @Episode_80

[tosinx]

Hey babe, just read the first episode of your story.
I’d also like to apologise for the wait, I have so many requests so it is not intentional.
Feedback : Your spot directing was great along with the background history of the mc. When you were narrating the MC’S journey throughout her life I was able to understand everything that she had been through as your narrating was amazing.
You also gave the chance for CC which many readers would appreciate. In addition, the episode length was perfect as we’re you transitions from scene to scene. They were very smooth and neat.
Improvements : Some of your speech bubbles were a little to below the characters lips therefore, I had to look at the bottom of my phone to read it. I recommend using the speech bubble helper tool to fix it or, if you had placed a speech bubble and coded it somewhere use @speechbubble reset to solve it. I also thought that the fact that her boss aka the love interest Liam was calling her at night in only *the first episode * was slightly unrealistic. Maybe do that scene in episode 4 or 5. Yes, the mc may be hot however I personally thought that was a little too quick.
Overall, I really did enjoy that episode and I will continue to read.
Well done babe.

[erosinair]

Thank you so much! You have no idea how happy reading this made me. I definitely will make those panning changes for a nice flow. I’m going to update it as well (because I felt like it wasn’t good enough). Thank you for the inspiration and motivation.

[tosinx]

You’re welcome.

[Anna.writer]

hey! I am also looking for a new story to read so I’ll go and check out yours

here’s mine:

60 MINUTES AHEAD by Anna
Episodes: 5 (ongoing)
Genre: Adventure
Style: LL
You volunteer to be the first human to test time travel, going only an hour forward with time. But when you leave travel pod, all other humans are gone. (CC)
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5951939237445632
Cover:

[tosinx]

Hey boo, I read your first chapter.
Id also like to say that your story was amazing!!!
You seem really experienced with directing!!
(okay I’m getting ahead of myself now…)
Feedback: I loved the fact that it was a male Mc. Episode usually promotes female mc stories so it was great to see something different.
Your spot directing was amazing, and so we’re your backgrounds and overlays which were used at the introduction.
The plot for this story was also unique to me, as you rarely see people say I don’t on a wedding day. (I felt so bad for Alia .)
I loved your zooms and tbh, I had to read it twice just to find something for you to improve and I failed honey, big time .
The only minor thing that I did notice was that after the scene where his mum tries to convince him to come back after he had ran away, one character popped into the scene whereas the others didn’t. Maybe it was a glitch on my phone but I do recommend looking into it.
Another person that didn’t need to ask for a review!
I will definitely continue to read, it was amazing babe. You should be really proud!

[Days]

I’ll look into the glitch - I don’t think I spotted that myself when I was rereading but before I publish chapter 5 I’ll check again

[tosinx]

Hiya, just finished the first episode of your story.
Apologies for the wait, I had so many to get through!
Feedback: I absolutely loved the backgrounds and overlays used throughout reading this episode. I also liked how you showed the reader what everyone in her family was going through (I played as a female.) Speaking of females, I appreciated the fact that you used advanced branching by giving the reader the option for a male or female mc. Your zooms were also good and your transitions were smooth.
Improvements: This occurred a few times throughout the episode; the characters would slide to a spot instead of walking to it. Maybe you used a normal animation instead of a walking animation for it? I’d suggest you check it out. Also, I think this only happened twice however, the characters would pop up onto the screen instead of being in their spot beforehand. It may have been a glitch but I do suggest using the &command to avoid this from happening.
Overall, your episode was really well directed and it felt like I was watching something on TV. I’ve never fancied adventure or fantasy stories however, after reading everyone’s including yours I’ve started to read a few. I would definitely continue reading, it was awesome babe.
Well done!