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Hey! I just started a new story…
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Author: Emily j

Title: Make Up Your Mind

Genre: Romance

Description: When Jade is given the choice of her first love, a mafia king, or his partner in crime will she make up her mind? She will need your help to deal w/ the drama coming up. (LL) (CC)(LGBT OPTION)


Episodes: 1-6 out now! More coming soon…

Oky so here’s the review of your first chapter–


  • The description/teaser looks a bit odd in contrast to the story. Maybe ya can replace it with " When Jade is given the choice of her first love, a mafia king, or his partner in crime. Will she ever make up her mind? Find out in the upcoming chapters of Make Up Your Mind. (LL) (CC)(LGBT OPTION)"

  • In the first scene, I cannot see any motion or panning to the right while she narrates which makes the part a bit boring.

  • In this scene, in my opinion the MC shall be saying, " Fine…Just keep in mind, that I hate you ", instead of " Fine, Just know that I hate you ".

  • Here you made a sudden scene change I see. Maybe try previewing this scene yourself and make out the errors.

So that’s all for the first chapter. I also liked the motion parts in the story such as the one in the bar. If you like this review, I’d try to get you a review for the other chapters too soon.

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Thank you so so much! I just went and fixed everything you mentioned. This was very helpful, btw for the bar scene you mentioned I was still trying to figure out how to make them walk to spot so I would just fade out lol (it doesn’t happen again later in the story). If you can I would love if you could review my other episodes. Again, thank you so much!:heartbeat:

Sure, It would be completed by 1st February or sooner.

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Oh okay, thank you so much I had no idea.

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