Hi guys! My name is Kyra and I’ve been working on a horror story for a couple months now and I’ve almost finished the first chapter. There is a lot of advanced directing and use of overlays (partially why it took me so long) and it would be great to know if there are any glitches. I would love it if some people could do a quick read through of the first chapter and give me some constructed criticism on what I can improve on. Would anyone be interested? Please let me know 
Of course, could you write in a link so that I can watch you story?
Ok I now reading the story and I will send you my review.
Ok I read it, and I like it.
I love that there is a lot of nervous in the story, but there are parts that are a little boring which I feel like that can make other readers just quit reading the episode, but I did saw that you were putting effort so I think it’s good.
Closing due to one month of inactivity