Is this description good enough?

I am writing a story named The Bet. Last few days I’ve been feeling like changing the description, but I am insecure because it may sound stupid or not grammatically correct. How is this:

She is a rude spoiled brat. He is a boy with a painful past. When he makes a bet on her their lives will have a drastic turn. Will the opposites attract?

What should I change? Is it grammatically correct?

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It should be her or their not both

:grinning:

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i would change ‘will have’ to ‘will take’, but apart from tjat it sounds good (:

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no there just needs to be a comma between the two

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Ahhh I see I read it the other way

Thank you

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me too for a second oops

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Thank you guys <3

She is a rude spoiled brat. He is a boy with a painful past. When he makes a bet on her, their lives will have a drastic turn. Will the opposites attract?

just missing a coma, it sounds perfectly fine dont worry :slight_smile:

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